GALACTIC

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Description

200 years in the future Earth is inhabited by aliens. After being colonized by the Regal Empire and gaining independence, Earth now has hybrids called astrals.They have a range of abilities, from boring, useful, silly and reality-bending. Ace has the most common ability of them all:teleportation.Ace tries his hardest, but his hardest is never enough, and is always worried he isn't as strong as everyone else, trying to prove he'sa hero and a man.One day he finds a magic watch.A watch that hates him.His dreams of becoming a hero will finally come true. Sadly he is too focused on winning and never learns.

Note:Best viewed on a cpu/tablet.Story is under revision and chapters may change frequently until complete.

Volume 1.5, Brimstone, is out now! It beginshere.

Want to know more about the background and settings? I created a companion book that updates every now and then. Some parts are redacted to not ruin the story, so sometimes you shouldcheck out earlier chapters after major scenes.

GALACTIC: Myth, Magic, and More.

Disclaimer: Please don't take this campy story seriously. This story is LGBT. It has bad words, violence, and butt stuff. I've already warned anyone before they read it and I don't want complaints. The main character is bisexual. Please don't send me angry messages if you're not okay with that. If you do I'll send them to my friends and we'll just laugh at you together.

Artwork made by me! :)

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: ~HOLLOW~

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 2.8/ 5.0
Followers: 108
Views: 240,341

Chapters(304 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

David F. WeismanRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The first chapter gives us a great deal to think about. Somehow the protagonist is caught in a time loop, and goes back to the beginning when he dies. Unfortunately he loses his memory each time, so he doesn't understand what is happening any better than we do.
The next section is easier to understand. Ace is a slacker student at a school for heroes, with the power of teleportation, which is considered the most common and least prestigeous superpower. He doesn't like to work hard or study, and cheats to avoid dissapointing his dad and letting down his team too overtly.
No spoilers after the first chapter, but I will say that very often when you think you understand a character, a major secret is revealed or hinted at. The author tells us in the introductory matter that the protagonist thinks he is good because he is the least bad guy around, but so far I only see an amusing but immature youth. There is still plenty left to read though. They are still in training, and Ace is not the only one who has benefitted from his fathers influence, and cheats when trying to prove his prowess. I sure hope the supervillains they face started in similar circumstances, since others on Ace's team have worse surprises than that!
This is great fun, with plenty of twists and turns.
Publius Decius MusRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Edit for Chapter 4.4:
The problem with this novel is that I wasn't looking at it from the right angle. First, I thought it would be an adventure novel in sci-fi settings. Well it isn't. It's surreal horror. And if you read it as surreal horror, it is actually pretty damn good.
Original Review:
First of all, the author has clearly done a lot of thinking both for the plot and for the characters. There are many layers for the story, and the characters are all fleshed out, at least in the author's mind.
However, the execution falls flat. I will enumerate my problems with the book in no particular order.
1. The reviewers of this website are often obsessed with the phrase "Show not tell!" I think that is wrong. There are some cases, when telling is actually the better option.
In this case, I have to agree that showing really would be better.
It's not as if the author would only tell! On the contrary, they actually drop a lot of hints and have instances where characterisation happens through dialogue or action. But there are also cases of the omniscient narrator outright telling us things, and these are jarring.
2. As said, the author has thought up a lot layers for the story, and I am pretty sure they wove the threads of the story masterfully in their mind - but the the execution again leaves a lot to be desired. The pacing is on and off, sometimes it's good, but more often than not it feels rushed or too slow.
3. The dialouges need polishing. Sometimes they are good, but at other times they don't feel like living people conversing at all.
On a plus side the grammar is pretty good. There is one punctuation rule that the author consistently disregarded, but other than that, there are only occasional typos and odd word choices.
Derin_EdalaRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This has a pretty good basis for a time loop story. The premise is interesting and promises to develop into something complex and hard to put down. This individual powers are pretty cool, and the idea of someone cheating at sports by teleporting in very very tiny increments to simulate speed is hilarious.
Polishing up the grammar and pacing of the story ould help it move from good to great, as there's a lot here that could really shine if it were differently paced and structured. Some different style choices would also really help present the story better; the choice of third person omniscient, in particular, leaves the reader feeling a bit adrift, as that's a particularly difficult perspective to pull off well (I think third person limited would work a lot better), and the dialogue tends to meander a lot. But the story still carries itself on a strong setting and plot, and on its characters.
There are some decently compelling characters here; ace and his father, and their relationship, are particularly interesting. You really get to feel for both of these people and what they're going through. Anyone interested in a time loop fantasy should give this one a look.
DuckwritesRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This book, when it comes to premise, is right up my alley. I love superhero type stories and I also love stories where average powers are used in creative ways.
Plus a good LGBT story is always welcome.
I'm writing this in chunks as I read so right now I'm commenting on the first chapter, the story is kind of hard to follow at this point because it feels like I was just dropped into the middle of something, but I'm sure I will get a better explanation as the story goes on another issue that the dialogue isn't spaced out in such a way that it is easy to read. one character’s dialogue ending where another character’s begins. like this:
"something stuff words," ace said "response and quip" wrinkle responded.
This can make it a bit hard to read and keep up with who's talking at any given time.
The story seems to be a reset premise where the main character restart the story when they fail from the beginning
Going back to the dialog issues it makes it genuinely hard to read as each portion of the book is sort of a block of words
The story is entertaining enough and has gone pretty much as I suspected it would so far but that's not a bad thing
The characters are decent so far, nothing groundbreaking, but have the problem of being suppressed by the dialogue issues and the omnipotent narrator, but the latter is more of a personal preference.
Overall I think the story has a lot of excellent potential but a lot of work needs to be done before I would consider buying it, though I would give it a listen on Audible as long as the narrator didn't have problems with some of the grammar issues.
Dylan KingRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
GALACTIC opens up with the main character, Ace, dead and trapped in the void. Here he has a conversation and it's learned he's been here many, many times. It's a tried and true trope, and an engaging start to the story. The characters are compelling and the story is clearly going somewhere.
As I understand it, the first portion of the story was written some time ago, and the author has since returned from a hiatus to continue it, which is always welcome. The prose at the start of the story is a touch robotic and it would really benefit with a little more work on sentence construction and flow. The author also begins with a habit of switching between perspectives between sentences. In the first chapter, there were times where we switched between Ace and Wrinkle's thoughts at an incredibly jarring pace.
These are small things to fix, but would make a massive difference to the readability of the story overall. I haven't yet gotten to the later, newer chapters, but I'm looking forward to seeing how the author has improved!
Tomato In The StreetRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Style Score: I love your style and to be honest, I learned so much for reading It. The way you writes It is vivid but also avoids being direct at times, giving the readers much more freedom of imagination and some things to think about
Story Score: The idea is rich, and the potential is wide but to be honest, I just read the first 3 chapters so I can't really say If I'm correct, but this is something similar to Ender's Game? Haven't really watched Ender's Game but they have the same vibes
Grammar Score: Your Grammar is nice, my grammar sucks too so I can't really comment here, because If I correct other people's grammar when my grammar is trash then I will look like an arrogant guy, sorry. But your vocabulary is wide enough to describe what's happening and like I said earlier, give the readers vivid imaginations, I leave this comment here
Character Score: I just read the first 3 chapters and yet they're not that shallow or maybe because the chapters are long? Ace had enough depth in him that even though I haven't read the rest, I can assure that he will have some kind of redemption arc or something, that's my theory anyways. Unless, a plot twist happens?
Anyways, my review doesn't help you much to improve since you're a much better writer than me but keep up the good work and slow and steady wins the race, thanks!!!
Jacob A ZuckerRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Not usually the kind of fiction I would personally read, but still enjoyable. With a little revision, I think it could be quite entertaining. My one complaint would be that the writing is a bit choppy. There's some basic grammatical issues that could be fixed. Some general line-editing might also help the flow of the story a lot.
ArkeneRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Character development is rough, I don't feel particular invested in finding out more about any of them. Some might enjoy this but it's just not for me. I just didn't find any of the characters interesting enough to spend any more time reading then I have. And the pacing just feels disjointed.