From Chief to the Emperor (Rewrite)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2020

Author

killerpants

• Chapter 14: Gentle Whispers
  Aug 19, 2020
• Chapter 13: Sacrifices to gain luck
  Aug 18, 2020
• Chapter 12: I'm pregnant!
  Aug 11, 2020
• Chapter 11: Beauty and arrows
  Aug 10, 2020
• Chapter 10: No morality in these lands
  Aug 5, 2020
• Chapter 9: Dear?.....Deer?
  Jul 29, 2020
• Chapter 8: A new tribe is formed
  Jul 28, 2020
• Chapter 7: It's just a tiny fire
  Jul 28, 2020
• Chapter 6: Are you even a man?
  Jul 27, 2020
• Chapter 5: No hole is safe?
  Jul 26, 2020
• Chapter 4: Woman get?
  Jul 25, 2020
• Chapter 3: Showing his worth
  Jul 24, 2020
• Chapter 2: A new world
  Jul 24, 2020
• Chapter 1: NTR
  Jul 23, 2020

Reviews

Community Reviews(9)

• NICK144952Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The story is getting there. It is interesting and also captivating. The best I can describe it would be a giant peice of your favorite cake, just staring you in the face and, you can eat it. The story is a weird mix of modern and prehistoric,  it works well. I aso wanted to ask you if he will build up his own kingdom.
  Grammer is a bit off but nothing major. Use Grammerly or other proofreading sites. They will help. Great job by the way.
  The characters are relatable and have a pull that draw you in letting you experience the story through them.
• hammbodyRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The story and characters are great so far, and I highly recommend on that alone. You can tell the writer is not a native English speaker, and he is upfront about that. That said, it's actually quite well written, and you can tell he has put some work into polishing it. Of particular interest to me, is his use of sentence structure to change the pace and build suspense. It's well done.
  I'm one of those readers, however, that can skim over grammar mistakes, awkward phrases, and repetitive words. If you are not, then there are mistakes that will ruin your immersion in just about every chapter. One thing I can't ignore, and I've found this even in some professional books, is when the author mixes tenses. I found this in several places in the story as early as the first chapter, and if the author PMs me I'll give examples. Tense mistakes are my personal immersion kryptonite (doesn't make me immune from making them), and yet I'm still reading ... so kudos.
  I gave five stars for a purely subjective reason: I like it and will keep reading. I drop a good 90 percent of what I start, so that is an accomplishment.
• Ivan_IvanovichRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  So what did I like about From Chief to Emperor? Here it is:
  This is a light story which goes great with some Doritos and a dip in your hand. It does not require the reader to overthink things. Yes it is set in a prehistoric era, yes the author tries to make it realistic, but it is still a fiction, you do not need to take things too seriously. You shouldn't if you want to enjoy it. You can sit back, eat, laugh and follow the progress of the adventure.
  Edward's actions and reactions can be very funny indeed. There are some good one-liners which cracked me up. There is no comedy tag, but there are some good jokes in there.
  It is interesting to see how Edward changes the new world around him. He has a very different set of values and knowledge. All of this affects those around him and this is the part I enjoy, seeing a change. Taking something, destroying it and making it a new.
  Finally, the story has a clear and reaching goal (hint the title). I find it captivating how Edward slowly builds his empire from sticks and stone to... well we don't know to what yet. But there is a continuity and a sense of progress and next goals within each chapter. It got me hooked and I was keen to find out what happens next, and how will the Edward achieve it.
  Lastly, I find that characters in the story and especially Edward's friend are quite lovely and likeable (Night, and others), albeit slightly naive. The interactions and relationship building is quite nice too.
  What could be better? Well, the story continues to improve with each chapter. The author even goes back and corrects his old chapters to the best of his/her ability. But clearer and better descriptors would have been helpful. It took me a while to realise that they in a jungle and not in a forest, not to mention the fact that it was an asian jungle with bamboo and stuff. Also, I want to know more how do the important people look like. What colour eyes and hair do the Nightingale have, are there any flaws and the like? Stuff l
• authormillsRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I'm really digging this story. It's quite intriguing so far. Like other have said, there's some grammar mistakes throughout, but nothing terribly major. The story is still quite readable.
  I'm really interested to see where this goes. Cant wait for more!
• BobinskijRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  This novel is good in the traditional sense. Well laid out plotline, title is straight to the point and the content is plentiful without filler.
  Granted that the grammer could use work but writing in another language is tough already and this novel only has the occasional wierd choice of words or a misspelled word, it's rare later on but the first few chapters can be a bit of a challenge to read if you are a english native speaker.
  Some points in the chapters there are well researched concepts of basica survival things so the auther takes care in his writing which is a good plus.
  However one small nit picky thing I have is the characters are somewhat under-developed. The main character and heroine are realistic enough so they get a pass but some of the other characters have little development. For example, the heronies friends are way too accepting of the MC, considering this is set in prehestoric ages where fire is considered gods wrath they are way too accepting of a guy that is litteraly doing the impossible everyday and doing things they cannot comprehend.
  But thats just a nitpick, generally pretty good start and it is interesting enough to want to read more and see where it goes.
  Also download Grammerly, a useful tool if you want to improve your text but it can be finicky at times, will help with the grammer issue tht non native English speakers have.
• Shiro-kyoRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Enjoyable read! I am quite curious which direction the story will take (writing this at 9 released chapters). I am hoping for some civilisation-building. And with that title I think I'm gonna get what I want.
  Only 4.5 stars because there are some weirdly written sentences and grammatical errors. The author did apologize for his english in the beginning though, so I won't hold it against him.
• Fox CassiaRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  The idea is unique and I can really see the creative sense that is peaking out behind the writing. The author has stated that English isn't his native language, and after a while you can tell. That isn't to say it's bad by any means, but it does start to read a bit off at certain spots. If it starts to bother you - it shouldn't - just pretend you're a spanish conquistador listening to a native chief recount some mythical legend, accent and all.
  The author has a lot of creative talent, just don't let the veil of grammar stop you from enjoying his work.
• neo KohRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The story is very interesting and enjoyable!
  4 stars for some confusing English and grammar, but overall a fun read
• NewbageRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  TL;DR: Ridiculously bad english. Mediocre-to-bad plot. Inconsistent character behavior. Would not recommend.
  Decent premise. But the grammar and language use is insanely bad. The author admits he's not a native english speaker and says he's getting better. But when I first started reading, he had already gone back and edited the first several chapters based on "user feedback", and after his English "got better". And they were still ridiculously, unbearably bad. I shudder to think what they might've been like initially, before the edits.
  I saw a review that said there was bad grammar that detracts from the experience pretty much every chapter. I'd say that is a drastic understatement. There's bad grammar that detracts from the experience every second sentence. Sometimes multiple times per sentence.
  Besides the grammar, the action and story is dubious as well.
  The author ascribes modern sensibilities to the natives when it suits him, in order to advance the plot. But then ascribes primitive/underdevloped sensibilities to them whenever it's convenient, so the MC can lord his superior knowledge and morality over them. It's contrived, and reviews that say this fiction's story is good enough to outweigh the truly horrendous language use are pretty much straight up lying to you.
  Here's an example:
  ---Very, Very Minor spoilers from the first couple chapters---
  The MC is supposedly been warped back to prehistory -- to when mankind were just gatherers (didn't even hunt before the MC got there). They just gathered fruits, plants, and bugs. This is why the person he first meets when he gets there is so amazed that he snared a rabbit.
  Yet when he first encounters an antgonist and his group of buddies, who had been regularly kidnapping the woman the MC was with, and raping her, he manages to convince them not to kill his ass and reaquire the girl. Instead, he convinces them engage in a hunting competition with him?! Yea right. Even if he had magical language skills that let him u