Freedom Online (unfinished)
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
(DO NOT EXPECT A GOOD STORY, OR ANYTHING LIKE THAT SINCE THIS IS SIMPLY MADE WITH MY FREE TIME WHEN I HAVE NOTHING ELSE TO DO!)
Freedom Online the new biggest hit in VRMMO gaming!
Follow Jhonny as he starts his new life in freedom Online.
An adventure full of Fun and Random stuff!
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Author
- Geocide
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.2/ 5.0
- Followers
- 138
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Community Reviews(1)
- DonutDaddyRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5So I read the first story and when I found the author was writing a second I was excited, because his first story he has the skeleton of a great story but he was to lazy to polish it. So I expected him to take the criticism from the first and make the 2nd amazing.... I was disappointed to the point I wanted to cry, yes this story is BETTER and yes it is GOOD but it is not the full potential that I believe the author has, and the only reason I can think that is because the author tries to speed through, and u end up getting what all are parents warned us about "stop trying to speed through your chores because it just makes u do a half-assed job"
Grammer- below average for sentence framing, flow, description, and vocab. Charecter- They are like robots, no emotion
Style- He uses a mix of first and third person. While not bad it messes with the flow. Story-Good plot and setting.
Overall- 3 1/2 stars.