Fate weaver’s convergence

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Description

Aidan was bringing his military career to a close, after a little over six years of fighting on an earth now littered with dimensional tears. As he was on his way out of the military, he found his life cut short as he suddenly blacks out while preparing to depart. The next moment, Aidan awoke in a clearing with no idea where he was, or who he now is.

Planned Release is once a week.

Any feedback whatsoever is appreciated; I want to do the best I can for this story.

At CH9 the story shifts perspective from multiple first-person perspectives to only the mc first person and third person for the rest. Eventually, those chapters will be reworked.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Amberhorn

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 782
Views: 525,388

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Community Reviews(9)

BooksBeforeBrosRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I really like this book for a variety of reasons.
first, this is the first gender swapping story I’ve read where the MC response is believable. the author also has it play a bigger role then 'Hehe guy in a dress'. The MC isn’t constantly complaining about their new body or any of the other frankly beaten to death tropes.
The world is interesting, the people feel flushed out and you get to understand them well and all their motivations. the fantasy elements are well thought out. I also enjoy slightly sappy, BUT still heartwarming story of emotional healing.
The pacing is a bit odd in the beginning leaving me kind of bored and wanting more excitement centered around the MC but in the later chapters it picks up. the shifts in perspective could be a bit smoother. but other than that, two thumbs up!
caurieRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
tl;dr: the story as of now is a story of healing, of loss, of rediscovery, of family. Read if you'd like to read an interesting take on reincarnation tropes with an overarching mystery that deserves all the love that it can get <3. It will make some cry and some people may relate a lil too much.
It's probably not the best form but I want to say a couple of things about the story:
Our MC is a child. Time and time again reincarnation stories use some sort of method to make their main characters adults in children's bodies but our MC is a kid and is treated as such. I don't understand how that's a lack of agency because I feel like they get about as much agency as a child would normally get. As the story progresses we get to see more and more of them as they discover themself and who they truly are. I can see that Amber put a lot of work and thought and likely a good amount of herself into the MC's character and it shows, and I think to its benefit. Basically, if you're going to take anything away: take away the following: Our MC starts broken and they really show it and sometimes it may get tough to read, but dealing with all that baggage is kind of the point of the story... it doesn't excuse them for anything flawed they may think or do, but there's a reason it happens in the plot.
The grammar gets better. You can see Amber's writing improve as you get further along in the story. I binge-reread the whole thing (used to read it a few years back) right as hiatus ended and it was manageable.
The way dialogue is written can indeed get some work but it's serviceable and does not in any way take away from the rich characters that Amber has put into the story.
All in all, this story is about a group of flawed individuals coming together and finding each other and healing from their individual pasts. I would recommend this story to basically anyone with a decently open mind. Thanks for writing Amber and I hope to see more from you! And to the rest, I hope you all found this
MuraKaimanaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Going into this story I wasn't sure what to expect, but after nearly catching up to the releasing chapters I can HEAVILY recommend this to anyone looking for a great book to read!
Not only is the world unique and awe inspiring, but the characters make it feel like a world worth investing and living in! Following this story has been a blast so far, and I'm really looking forward to it's continuation!
HarlokRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I feel I need to respond to the review of Zip123:
I've read fro the Prologe to Ch. 19 and I have no issues with the grammar or the punctuation. I'm not a native english speaker, but to me there are no big errors.
Some sentences are longer than in other stories here on RR an I needed a second or two to sort them out. But I've read far worse.
I like it at the moment and hope that the story progress with character-development and interesting backstory.
WaywardwizardRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The concept for this story is quite interesting, though not in its entirety unique. It is nice to be able to find similar stories to those i already liked, though. A lot of stories of this type can end up being really... problematic. This one avoided those issues as well as it can. The grammer starts off pretty dicy but it gets better soon enough, some rewriting wouldnt be out of place for the first dozen or so chapters. Some parts can also be a bit repetative as the same speech descripters are used over and over again. The characters are pretty dynamic and react realistically, with the exception being the adults being totally ok with beating children? Like i get that she has super strength and all, but a lot of it seems like too much. The worldbuilding is well done. Ive seen a lot of deage gender bender things end up as creepy, gross fetish material, and im glad that didnt end up the case here. The mc mentions dysphoria, however it isnt a very realistic representation of it, as they basically just ignore it and move on. overall its a joy to read, and i reccomend it if you like isekai, drama, sword fighting, and trauma.
ZonzogRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
This particular story makes a good setup for an isekai powerfantasy, yet chapter after chapter MC is deprived of any agency. Everything is chosen for him. The only time MC ever did something by his own accord is when he/she acted out of character and did exatly the thing he was told not to do with no reasoning behind it, and instant regret after it.
MC is deprived of information. MC is prevented from acting. Everything is planned for her. MC is suddenly saddled with "friends" with no personality, that are alluded to also be love interests in the most creepy way possible.
And the way female pubirty is handled here is pure cringe. If i was in MC shoes and someone would call me a "bleeder" i would deprive them of their teeth without hesitation.
Zip123Royal Road
★★ 2.0
The overall plot sounds interesting and the character backstory is also pretty ok, but there are huge problems with the rest.
Right in the first chapter I started to read, there were mistakes with the language, the grammar and the punctuation in pretty much every sentence.
I wanted to see if it got better in the later chapters so i also read chapter 19.
I dont want to be mean, but i had the impression that it got even worse, especially the dialoge between the characters.
I stopped reading at this point because I felt the story is not going to be enjoyable to read for me before some major improvements are made to the overall structure of the language and the grammar.
English is my third language so I also have some problems writing in english, but in my opinion you need someone that has a solid grasp of the english language to proofread your story.
I know that this is your first story on this site and hope you stick with writing and improving, but at least right now I have to give your story a pass.
Lirah SilvartiaRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
The story had an interesting concept. The first couple of chapters were structured decently enough with only a few issues that were, in reality, non-issues.
However, a few chapters in, the grammar and writing style shifted toward the negative. Instead of reading like a story, it was structured more... similarly to a script. Or even that of a Roleplay with certain things, like some actions, being placed in asterisks.
There was also dialogue being done in a script fashion rather than a storytelling or conversational fashion. For example, it went from something like "Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet," Says MainCharacterA with a sigh, to "*Sighs* Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet" -MaincharacterA.
So it seems to me that they started posting their drafts/storyboards instead of actually posting their story itself.
Regarding the story, it's rough. It needs a proofreader or even a beta reader. Preferably, a beta writer to help clear up things and fix the disjointed flow that started showing up. Otherwise, it's... not terrible. Just... extremely rough.
The characters... are interesting. Though the main character's absolutely drastic personality shift is a bit sudden and doesn't match their proposed backstory, I get the feeling it's supposed to be the trope of 'New body, new feelings/thought process to match' type deal. Although it isn't mentioned early on. I don't know if it ever does, as the roughness was a turn off at this point.
Overall, I think the author needs to revisit the previous chapters and take the time to revise them, fixing the flow and conforming to proper narrative styles, to ensure everything is in order.
In the current state, I can't think of giving it a higher score, but it definitely has the potential to warrant a better one.
luda305Royal Road
★★ 2.0
One of the possible goals in writing a fiction is to invoke certain feelings in your audience. That certainly occurred with me--in the form of white, blinding anger--though clearly not in a good way. I slept on it before writing this review so I've calmed down now, but there are two serious warnings to potential readers that I feel compelled to mention.
First, the protagonist is a misogynist. Not in a physically violent way, but rather in attitude.
The way that he handles becoming a girl upon reincarnation (possession really, as it's not from birth) is deeply disrespectful to women. And after a year of adjustment, she both (a) still hasn't fully adjusted to the point, and (b) still has deeply concerning attitudes towards women.
Second, the protagonist's character as a whole is very difficult to understand. One might say that there's a bolted-on personality
of a girl onto a male ex-soldier.
You might say that the protagonist has a case of multiple personalities. In any event, there is a deep divide between the protagonist's internal self and external self. I think the most charitable interpretation of this is that the author chose to do this intentionally.
However, it is deeply infuriating with it comes to the plot and characters.
It messes with the pacing severely as the protagonist has frequent internal monologues about what's happening or what they think of it. It messes with the plot as they frequently take action (or action is taken with them) that contradicts what they internally desire without any reason provided to override this. It messes with the plot further as their doing something with which they have no prior experience and which they have (or should have) the mental maturity not to act without seeking advice. It messes with their free agency as they frequently have an opinion about some proposed course of action, but is unable or unwilling to externally express it, thus becoming subject to the whims of others. And perhaps worse of all (and rel