Fallen from the Moon

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Description

What is a person to do when you wake up and find yourself in a totally foreign environment? And worse still, a completely different body?

One moment, Elise was in her castle lounging about, and the next, she finds herself in a life threatening situation and stuck in the body of a stranger. How did she appear here? Why has this happened to her? And what is the body's identity?

Even though Elise is plagued with questions that she is unable to find an answer to, and forced into a body with a mana amount much lesser than what her original body, she is still determined to find a way back home. However, she will soon find that home is a place faraway and more difficult to get to than she imagined as she gets increasingly tangled up in difficult situations.

"You will regret looking down on me." ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Author's note: Please drop comments or reviews to let me know what you think of the story or how I can improve. :)

*On hiatus*

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Akemin

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.8/ 5.0
Followers: 58
Views: 24,092

Chapters(16 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

ElyasRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Started reading it because I'm also a fan of female protagonists and so far it seems like a pretty promising start to an adventure. I hope she can regain her strength soon because I think what I hate most is when I finally get to read about a female MC and she's weak and has to be protected all the time. So far there isn't too much to review but the few chapters that are out seem good so I'm looking forward to future chapters. Also I'd watch out with how arrogant you make her because I think that can make a lot of readers leave. So far she seems to have a really good personality except for the way she treated her brother who was worried about her in the first chapter. That could be because she was under the moon influence thing but I hope she isn't an asshole ^^.
Thanks for writing!
bubbleduckRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
So this is a story I picked up a little while ago hoping it was another science fiction story – mostly because of the title. I was disappointed but not too much.
Style – 5/5. No problems here. There are probably some little improvements that could be made and I just haven’t noticed, but hey, I’m not perfect, so I’ll give it the score that I (imperfectly) think it deserves. Paragraphs are well structured, it’s never unclear who’s talking, no strange decisions are made on the author’s part that interfere with the reading experience (coloured text and the such).
Story – 4/5. It probably could have started a little faster, but the heroine’s purpose has been set out well. Yes, that's right - a heroine. Bonus marks for originality right there. The world has been built well too. Most of what you lost on this section was simply originality (adventurer’s guild and all that), so basically nitpicking. It’s a little hard to judge what this is going to be like before any of the complications have been resolved or any side plots or antagonists have been introduced.
Grammar – 4.5/5. Overall well done, no mistakes I could spot. It’s not like I was hunting for them though, there are no doubt spelling errors in there somewhere, as there are with any work – even published ones. What you could work on a little bit is imagery. Help build the picture of what makes your world unique, other than ‘it’s a land of adventure and monsters’. Give it a flavour, so to speak. Good imagery can completely direct the flow of a story, and yours isn’t on the outstanding level yet.
Character – 3.5/5. This one needs a little improvement to catch up to the other points. We know who your characters are but we don’t know what they’re made of. We don’t know what they like or dislike. They are mysteries to each other and to those around them, so how are we readers supposed to understand them? There are little hints towards their personalities which are slowly filling in the gaps, mostly action-based, which I d