Empire of a Thousand Sermons

Hey folks, first real piece any critique im happy to get, cause i legit want to improve on my work so feel free to comment!!!

so the short version is this is similar to alot fo stories from HFY, or humans are space orc subreddit.

its a sci fi (HFY), where humanity has lost earth, been conquered, most live on habitats orbiting the sol system, and forced into "enforced civilization". mutants, space ships, solar empires, war, politicing, space wizardry, and an all around good time. takes multiple perspectives to tell the story of a human "captain", a newly minted empress, a psuedo divine hive mind, a intelligent janatorial robot, and the other supporting characters as i attempt to tell this narrative story of everything going wrong. going to try to blend up different elements for different characters until i find a set that jives well with my style.