Emperor Saga : Slaves Covenant

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2016

Author

riou666

• Chapter 6 : Medic
  Jun 15, 2020
• Chapter 5 : The way of the warrior
  Mar 17, 2016
• Chapter 4 : Baton
  Feb 29, 2016
• Chapter 3 : Books
  Feb 29, 2016
• Chapter 2 : Discovery
  Feb 29, 2016
• Chapter 1 : The Undead and Children in Army
  Feb 29, 2016

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• Vera Anne WolfeRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Full disclosure this is a Review Exchange and I read to the end of chapter 4.
  Overall Score: 4/5 As the title would suggest this story follows several slave protagonists. The life of a slave isn’t easy, and these slaves labor for an army during battles and have to fend for themselves when it comes to food, etc.
  The newest member of this group of slaves is Hans. The writer describes him as 5 years old, but I think eight or ten years old would make more sense. Some of the things he does, says, and can do, like reading books is a bit beyond the normal five-year-old capabilities.
  But Hans does prove himself unique in other ways. He can use Healing magic, and despite constantly being beaten up and laughed at for once being a noble, he’s got guts—a fact he will later display when he saves not just himself but another slave from several enemy gnolls.
  The writer isn’t afraid to kill his characters, which does a good job of hiking up tensions and apprehension—at one point I just thought everyone was going to die and we’d be stuck with that.
  Style Score: 3.5/5The writer relies heavily on “tell” vs “show”. I wish that were the only issue but he also relied heavily on exposition in the middle of active scenes that weren’t really necessary. That along with sentences that needed to be rewritten so they were less awkward, a poor word choice that was often confusing to read made what simple details we were given a bit difficult to enjoy.
  Story Score: 4.5/5 I’m only four chapters in, but I do feel the pace could be improved by taking out scenes where no main characters are physically present. The same scenes often have no impact on the overall story they’re simply there to convey information that could be placed elsewhere. Most of that information could have been given in dialogue also, which eliminates several breaks in active writing altogether. Most of this is noted in my chapter comments.
  That said, I did find the story engaging. Though it was confusing who the real protagonist