Duorbis: Colission of the worlds

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Description

This is the story of two worlds called the upper world and the lower world. Both worlds have their own creatures and population of people which have their differences.The people in the lower world are called warlocks. They are a race of arrogant warriors and have horns coming out their heads and have big muscular body’s. The ones living in the upper world are a fully different race of disciplined and elegant people called sorcerers and have a slim body with pointy ears. They both have developed their own powers which are unique to their race. A sorcerer can’t use the powers of warlocks and vice versa. However they didn’t know of each others existences.After a very long time these two races eventually find out that their exists life on the planet which they could see very clearly in the sky. They start to communicate with each other and establish diplomatic relationships. However this would not last long…

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Duorbis

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.8/ 5.0
Followers: 8
Views: 3,823

Chapters(18 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

1Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm really liking this story thus far. There's a good amount of worldbuilding introduced, but it leaves more questions than answers, which leaves a suspenseful feeling, especially considering the imminent war mentioned in the prologue. The fantasy/magical aspects are interesting, and I'm genuinely intrigued by what will happen next. Great start!
mattgRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It is a breath taking story!!! I can not wait to read the other sections. I can not recommend it enough. Read it and you will understand what I am trying to say. Good luck guys! I wish you the best! Keep up the good work! . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Sun HashiraRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The plot itself is great.
A war between two civilizations, caused by a a naive little mistake.
Each side has had too many losses, and one side tried to shift the paradigm of the entire war to its side by sending an infil team to steal a state secret.
As the review title suggests, improvements are of paramount importance in this novel to succeed.
To the author, I mean no offense by my words, take it as positive criticism.
The writing style is sloppy. Get that in.
I get your effort to try to build up suspense and that sense of impending doom in the mind of the audience by alternating scenes between both sides in a tense situation.
But try to separate the POVs would greatly enhance that feeling.
Try to use different fonts.
Use Italics for mono- and dialogues.
Use separation markers between POV changes, even in those tense situations where alternating scenes are a must.
These subtle changes are a must-have for this novel.
If you're a fresh writer, I suggest you take these suggestions to heart and do not take offense by my words.
I again apologize if my words were sharp.