Dungeon Story

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Description

An unnamed soul wakes up to find themselves in a white room with an being that claims to be everything. With that said the being informs the soul that they died and will be reincarnated as a dungeon core in another world, the kicker being that the soul can only pick some of their memories to be reborn with.

Without any hesitation the soul asked to keep all their memories pertaining to fairy tales, folk tales, myths and legends.

This is a tale of an dungeon who's a little bit to enthusiastic about bringing these stories to life in another world where dragons and magic already exists and the Adventurers who dive into its unknown depths.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2017
Author
NichiDG

Tags

LITRPGACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICCOMEDYSLICE OF LIFEGAMELITMULTIPLE LEAD CHARACTERSNON-HUMAN LEADREINCARNATIONHIGH FANTASYPROGRESSIONDUNGEON CORE

Royal Road Stats

Rating
3.7/ 5.0
Followers
6
Views
200

Chapters(98 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

  • lolitacore001Royal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    Esta e   a   melhor  novela  de  masmorra.
    Tem   muito potencial
  • SoufdeboefRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    You have a nice idea for your story but you execution is lacking.
    Your grammar is not good enough. Some paragraphs being too sloppy making it so that i sometimes have to read over some parts. You also tend to use the same word too much in one sentance. I also don't like how converstaion is mixed into description wich makes it hard to keep apart.The chance is big that English isn't your first language but i am sure that at least 30 procent of the mistakes made up until now could have been prevented if you read your own work.
    Characters are also not up to par. In a dungeon story it is important that you have good characters wich you can get emotionally invested in. Otherwise it just feels like you're reading about a beautiful mouse trap.
    Lyra is maybe the laziest character i have seen so far on this whole site. One moment she popped up and the next she was a friend and trusted person. No backstory, introduction, thoughts or emotion. We also don't really know anything about Alice either (And she developed from a emotionless person to a normal girl way too fast)
    TIPS
    1. You have only used Pov changes to show us what is going on in another area so far. I suggest using it to show us the thoughts and emotion of different characters.
    2. Think about where you want to go with your story. If you have a clear goal connecting the loose end becomes way easier.
    3. Download grammarly and read your story like a reader would. If you are already doing that: get a proofreader. It can be a friend or somebody on this site. Go check out the forum.
    I would like to end this review on a more positive note. Despite the many flaws you're creativity really shines through. I noticed myself really liking some of your ideas the boss battle being the best so far. There are a lot of dungeon stories on this site and it is hard to stand out but if you truly take my critisism serious i am sure you could make something good.
    I will change my review when i notice it has become better.
  • veronica clashRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    It is interesting and at the same time I think the acts lack more development.  The jump from one stage to another lacks more connection.  If it provokes intrigue in the situations of the characters, but I have already reached chapter 17, and I feel that I did not understand that one situation has to do with the other.  I think it's because he goes from action to calm, but he doesn't have the tension in the middle, he lacks more rhythm.  The pre of the situation lacks more background or more development, both between characters and what is happening around.
  • magical heartRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    A decent start but dungeon rules don't seem like they would function.
    seems like an adventurer with a matchbook and little care for his surroundings could beat this dungeon and the rules by which the monsters follow is kind of weird and dumb as the plot progresses. I feel bad for saying like there's a real effort put into this but it just breaks the immersion for me. Also, the characters come off a bit flat in the syntax is confusing definitely needs to be improved upon. All in all, I just can't keep reading this.
  • BurningmanRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    Ok, i tried to read more than chapter 35 i give and give the author chances but...
    The problem with a lot of dungeons story is that it isn't a dungeon story, if this novel was named the birth of the city (i dont know the name of the settlement that his dungeon will get) and the dungeon core was a side character nothing in the novel would change.
    there is more story about the city and characters than about the dungeon, to give you an example there is no description about the dungeon, the first floor he made a library and thats it, the second floor was supposed to be little red, the second floor the three pigs somehow they swapped places, and the third floor gave up the folklore it wasn't even explained 'these are the mobs here' no background to make it, no story abou why the mobs are there.
    i was expecting more, act 2 started even worse, when i think finally we are going to the dungeon it start with a side character pov then the dungeon get teleported before anohter half of a chapter of side character then a fucking party where i stopped reading somewhere in the middle.
    see this is why this story should be called another name, there is no dungeon story, we dont even know how each floor is designed, 'there is a woodlands with x thing..." ok, the distance between each of the three little pigs house? wouldn't the house get destroyed after some time so the story 'retain' the flavour? how is the designe of the mapa is there a trail they follow? in the three little pigs the house are visible since after one blow up the pig look to his brother house entering it, the same thing with little red, how much following the script they need to walk? one hour? two hours? the distance? these things are never answered, this is why i said this is not a dungeon story, if i try to be generous just only 8~10 chapters would be about the dungeon, less than 1/3 of the story, this is ridiculous, when i finally think the dungeon will do something he become a gag character, he become a referee
  • dada11dada22Royal Road
    ★★ 2.0
    So it's your typical reincarnation, with memory erasure, except the librarians knowledge on fairy tales, disney types of fairy tales. Honestly I'm disappointed. At the very least they could vere off of cliches or go for some classic fairy tales. Instead they go with your bog standard wolf evil fairy's good. Fairy's good.
    Honestly fae are some of the most malicious creatures in pre disney fantasy
  • BadGenuisRoyal Road
    ★★ 2.0
    Great concept. But the execution is not up to there. Admittedly, the chapters are 2 years old, God knows if the writing had matured.
    But I can't continue with this standard.
  • MarcusDeGabrielRoyal Road
    ★★ 1.5
    For a dungeon story it's just not focused ON the dungeon itself, it's more of a side character set in someone else's story. We mostly seem to be focused on the humans and all the "above" ground problems that are going on with only MINIMAL focus on the dungeon setup and actions. The story could honestly have been set around the dungeon group and THEIR adventures, while the dungeon is just a semi-casual npc and nothing would be different.