Druid Of Valinor

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2022

Author

Shyan Brightly

• Chapter 17 - One Beer Won’t Hurt
  Dec 21, 2022
• Chapter 16 - Bring Out Yer Dead
  Dec 20, 2022
• Chapter 15 - Abyss Stares Back
  Dec 19, 2022
• Chapter 14 - The Fourth Wall (B-Story)
  Dec 17, 2022
• Chapter 13 - My Name is Thief # 1, Prepare to Die
  Dec 17, 2022
• Chapter 12 - A Frosty Reception
  Dec 16, 2022
• Chapter 11 - The City Gates
  Dec 15, 2022
• Chapter 10 - Hell Is Other People
  Dec 14, 2022
• Chapter 9 - On The Road
  Dec 14, 2022
• Chapter Eight - I Wanna Fly Away, Oh Yeah!
  Dec 13, 2022
• Chapter Seven - The Morning After
  Dec 12, 2022
• Chapter Six - Strictly Business
  Dec 11, 2022
• Chapter Five - Elves Have Very Long Names
  Dec 10, 2022
• Chapter Four - A Damsel in This Quest
  Dec 9, 2022
• Chapter Three - My First Battle
  Dec 8, 2022
• Chapter Two - Character Select
  Dec 8, 2022
• Chapter One - Call To Adventure
  Dec 8, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(4)

• GuthanRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I'll cover the five scores. While I tend not to ramble on for too long I need to fill that 200 word quota somehow.
  Style score 4.5. Your writing style is decent. I wasn't feeling roped, but I can't say I was turned off by it either. You might want to find more colorful words to pair with your dialogue tags. It's just "said or asked". Having too many descripters can be bad though so try to keep them down if possible.
  Story score is good. The plot has been done before, although your take on it it interesting. The comedy is decent for a first try and I don't get the feeling any scenes are forced. I'll suggest setting up organic scenarios in the future, as readers tend to hate when the character revolves around the plot instead of the reverse. You are doing good at this so far.
  Grammar is mostly ok with a few exceptions. Personally, I go over my own story with a fine comb before and after posting a chapter. Little mistakes tend to pop up otherwise.
  The character score is great. The characters feel lively and interesting. The main character is definitely funny enough to keep someone watching. If you want to move this forward I'd stay away from too many established tropes like harems. Those can turn away new readers even if done to make fun of them. It CAN be done well, but most of the time people have already seen it before like in konosuba.
• JEPayneRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This is a great example of an Isekai fantasy story. It kicks off immediately post-isekai-ing with a scene that had me laughing all the way through. The tone keeps steady through the chapters I've read so far, light without being absurd, and completely entertaining.
  Style - the style is consistent and effective. Descriptions are clear without getting in the way of the story and the character interactions, allowing the plot (and banter) to unfold without plowing through paragraphs of aesthetic info first.
  Story - a great twist on the fantasy formula, it literally uses the heroes journey as a plot device with the MC charged to tick the check boxes to earn the salvation of his eternal soul. I freaking love this concept, its hilarious and I can't wait to see how the author continues to play around with it. It also puts a unique 'flavour' spin on the system that I haven't seen used before in an isekai story. It does take its time getting places sometimes, but this is for the benefit of character interactions early on, so I don't think it's much of a drawback.
  Grammar - No real issues I saw.
  Character - mostly just the two characters at this stage of note, though they are undeniably well written. The MC in particular is a stand out, I think one of the things I love most about him is that he's not an idiot. A lot of isekai MCs are frustratingly slow on the uptake to justify the author's narrative decisions, but not this one. He's pretty quick on his feet and comes up with solutions to problems beyond plot armouring his way through battles. He may not be the standard hero figure, but so far he's getting the job done. I would like to see the travelling companion fleshed out a little more, but I'm sure that will happen with time.
  All in all, it's a great isekai story that prioritises enjoyment over taking itself too seriously. The writing is of a very high calibre and you can tell the author knows what they are doing. I strongly recommend any fans of the isekai genre check it
• ediav42Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Considering that MC is fighting to not become Kanye West's roommate, that is one of the greatest motivators I have ever seen in fiction. I am really hoping God is Joseph Campbell as well like Rick and Morty kinda did with that meta episode. Well I wouldn't really be too upset if it wasn't but since it is a whole Hero's Journey thing would be fun if God at least took the guise of Joseph Campbell at first. Whether MC is well read enough to recognize the reference, or even just saw that Rick and Morty episode, is another thing and could be an amusing interaction that could go several ways.
• A. StargazerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Or at least that’s what I’ve gotten out of it so far. My first impression; as a litrpg, it’s standard for the industry, more or less. It is exactly what you would expect from a litrpg and isekai story, and if that’s what you’re looking to read you should definitely check this story out. Unfortunately, I can say the same about a lot of other stories.
  Which isn’t to say that the author is cliché. Rather, I’m just saying that the litrpg and/or isekai library is crowded, and I don’t feel there’s anything particularly special to make this story stick out among the crowd. I loved the “heaven is a bureaucracy” joke. The classes and combat/progression mechanics seem to be based on World of Warcraft or a similar mmo, or at least that is my interpretation. While the overall goal of the MC’s quest has been defined, and the stakes, we still don’t know too much about the actual world of Valinor or how the MC’s adventure will shake out.
  Grammatically, I didn’t spot many overt errors. Five stars.
  Style wise, I’m detracting a star because it feels like this is an area where the author could improve. In particular, I felt that the paragraphs were short, with the majority seeming to consist of only one or two short sentences. I felt that many of the ‘paragraphs’ could have been combined, and should have been combined. I advise the author to look up some guides about paragraph structure and formatting, because I feel like they could benefit from such resources. The author’s voice is good, in that it does feel like that MC is narrating the story.
  Character wise, the author does a good job of introducing the MC’s personality from the beginning. He’s a horny nerd who played a lot of video games and neglected his family, although we don’t know much else about him. That’s fine, it’s an isekai, we don’t really care about ‘our world.’ The only other real character we’ve met up to this point is an amusing elf maiden, and a snarky ‘help’ feature.