Dream life!
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The story of how a teenager named Jason ruled the world of his fantasies without restriction and as he pleases.
Read how Jason explores new world and dimensions just like he's always dreamed about.
Please Read Author Notes for important information at end
[Author Note: Going to start with Jason exploring different anime worlds and worlds has always seen and dreamed about experienced while in the middle of this he will begin to forge an empire from his knowledge all the anime worlds are not going follow canon after all Jason is the depiction of my fantasies and dreams.]
[Author Note: This story has always been in my imagination so from now I'm going to be sharing my fantasies with you guys while trying to get some donations for incentives to push to continue my story.
Also Just started up school so I might miss daily chapters but when I post after my mini unannounced hiatus I will do all my daily chaps on the very same day I continue, oh and I will also have a system that for every 10$ I will put up a bonus chapter(and extra chapter including bonus PM'd to their profile.]
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2017
- Author
- huludavid123
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.8/ 5.0
- Followers
- 17
- Views
- 10,515
Chapters(5 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- UrobrouSRoyal Road★★★ 2.5I know, kinda pedobear title but it it is nessecary.
So, let's get to it:
you used charts.
this is good - you know of the system and how to use it.
and that's all for the good parts.
you took enoguh material for two or three paragraphs and condensed it into a very small paragraph.
Spacing out sentences, pacing events, periods(.), commas(,) and such are very much lacking, and the choice of words is a bit odd as well:
the MC "awoke" for school - ATM he is not a "god" (blame your title for spilling the beans) nor is he an ancient leech or a mighty dragon.
he's a kid waking up for school.
small things like that exceed the expectation of the readers: you think you're reading about a kid, then some big words come up like "awoken" or "arizen" and such, and suddenly you think "wait! there must be more to it!" and it turns out it was just a kid waking up for school.
get me?
Sorry if I am a bit hard, but imagine writing 16 chapters then not understanding why no one is reading your stuff - your grammar is good; no point in ruining it with bad writing practices.
I wish you luck with your story.
and a pet peeve of mine, regarding your title:
please change it.
everytime I look at the damn thing i think about a bearded teenager with dyed hair listening to linkin park while wearing black skinny-jeans.
seriously.
it's distracting as shit.