Drakon the Necrolord

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Description

Drakon. Half-vampire half-elf. All Revenant.

Sixteen times the world has almost been destroyed. The first one added the system, the 2nd fused at least 20 known planets together and the third was earths old moon crashing into the new planet. Each time it heralded in a new age.

The 16th age started 13 years ago after the end of a 2000 year war between the land-based races and the Shahuagin.

This is a story about friendship, colonization, and rebuilding.

And lots and lots of battles

This is Drakons tale.

Quick note: If you leave a bad rating please leave a review of why you don't like it. Don't just leave a 0.5-star rating without a reason.

On that same note. If you leave a 5-star rating let me know what you like about the story. Between the two ill know what works and what doesn't.

Update 3/24/2021:

Because I got a few comments on it: This is only my second novel ever. My first attempt is also on this site but abandoned. With every chapter I write, I feel like I'm getting better.

[participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge]

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: ChroweHunter

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

AlejoTheBearRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The dialog is a bit stiff. There is frequent but not constant minor spelling and grammer errors.
Those are the only complaints I can find. There is an obviously robust world already built as shown by the lore chapters, and the topic this story have and will be using from summoning, base building, and crafting to more all scratch my itch pretty well.
AlthayasRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
After reading hundreds of stories on RR, from time to time I find a new variant. This isn't the first tale with the idea of a necromancer ruler, but first he isn't evil, second his class combine necromancy and command, third he has a cadre of sympathetic companions with a certain originality in their classes.
Now, a few reserves : no antagonist for the moment, a little overpowering with the divine gifts and quests. Nevertheless, the possibilities of his domain for the story interest me.
I noted some minor issues in spelling and grammar, but they impede not the reading.
Concerning the style, the protagonist has a pleasant voice, the story mixing his narration with the bonus of lore don't disturb the immersion in the world. Only one chapter had another POV, Grim his childhood friend, his voice differs o Drakon, but appears similar. It would b interesting to hear the POV of the other core members, but I think that Drakon should be the main narrator.
New lore entries could give the readers more information concerning the continent and the world. The progression of the levels should' not be too fast for the personnages.
Concerning the history of the world, he seems to be ancient
Mister BillRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm all caught up right now and really enjoying the story. It's a romp and well worth reading. It has very interesting worldbuilding as well as a good story. Lots of neat little unique bits and I'm excited for each new chapter that comes out.
Keep up the good work, Mr. Author!
RokiusRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I love the fact that you humanized a necro!!!! Most stories I read have a necro that starts out with good intentions but usually goes on a murder spree. The fact that he can respawn but others can't makes his decisions even more profound. Please keep updating!!!!! I love this story!
ZmoleRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So far I'd say a diamond in the rough, yes there are a few grammar errors and etc but nothing that gets in the way of enjoying the story. And the author is trying to fix any mistakes as he goes along so chill out. Really well written so far in my opinion definitely give it a read! I found it addicting and cant wait for next chapters to come
vall3Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
First of all, I wanted to give both story and character 5 stars but it feels a little premature for that since the story only has 16 chapters at the moment and there is a lot of place to both grow the characters and ruin them as well as giving the story more room since a large part of the story so far has been world-building with the moment to build up what is needed for an interesting story but with a few more chapters in and I can change it to 5 stars if it keeps going in this direction.
The style has been fun to read and easy to follow without being overly simple and leaving a lot of plot holes and vital information or overly nagging and tedious to distract you from the fun and interesting mechanics and potential in the story.
Grammar score I'm just going to give 5 to since a) I haven't found anything that's been bugging me in the story without my brain auto-correcting it by itself and just going past it if there are any and b) by my previous statement most of you probably figure it out but I'm not exactly the grammar police.
To finish this off I want to say that its a fun and interesting story to read with a lot of future potential in both story and that it has been an enjoyable journey so far watching the world the author has built grow, expand and get more depth with each chapter and if you ever wonder about something you can just ask about it in the comments and the author is more then likely to write a bonus chapter about it explaining and possibly elaborating about it the answer is longer then a short comment that is.
GrimPhoenixRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
A great story with a premise i love. The mc is interesting with mysteries to be explored and is surrounded by other interesting characters that im keen to learn more about but the interpersonal interactions often feel stiff and awkward with motivations seeming unbalanced. The class for the mc is an amazing concept that im excited to see the progression of without being crazy OP but i admit i prefer blue screens because the make things feel more orderly with a few exceptions (Azarinth Healer). The world is rich in lore but the author does tend to brush over things in an attempt to rush the story which combined with the short chapters leaves things feeling hurried. Chapters solely dedicated to lore try to make up for this but leave the story feeling disjointed. All in all a good story with some issues that doesnt make the story unreadable.
Well worth the read.
newyevon2Royal Road
★★★★ 3.5
While I like the story, it has issues I can't overlook, and just when it was getting to the base building part as well. :'(
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No clue why I have to use fifty words when what I wanted to say could be put succinctly into a smaller statement, therefore saving people time while also getting my point across to them.
ShadowOfHAvocRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The main jist of this review is that this story reads like a first draft. There is nothing wrong with that, and honestly the only way to improve is by doing. You have a good base for your story and hopefully upon further revisions it will become a great story. And hopefully this review helps.
The Story and Style:
First off I want to say that this story is built around a pretty unique post apocalypse concept and I really like the lore so far. However, that also leads me into my biggest complaint with this story, everything is reactive we get lore and other common knowledge stuff after the fact.A good example of this is the Adventure's Guild tour and class discovery.
The MC is raised in a boarding school/orphanage for adventures and it is supposed to be the 16th Age since the System was introduced. Just from that we assume that the MC should already know the basics of the system and of classes, as well as having a basic understanding of adventure life and the functions the Guild has, since he was raised by them. However instead it seems like the MC is as clueless about all of this as if they were new to this world.
Overall the best way to improve this story is to spend more time fleshing out the world, instead of rushing ahead. Take your time and explain the lore in character instead of doing little out of character lore dumps in between chapters. The more you explain and describe stuff the better the reader will understand what you are talking about.
I would also recommend reading the dialogues out loud, the way it is written know gets the point across but they don't flow conversationally. Currently they are more info dumb like.
Grammar:
Overall I didn't really notice any major grammar mistakes, the story is quite readable from a grammar perspective but it's not perfect. The sentences are on the more simplistic side and there are some missing capital letters here and there. It could do with another read through and edit.
The Characters:
Sadly this story only really h
KyeRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
So, this story caught my eye mainly because I'm a sucker for necromancer stories.
The story begins with Drakon, a rare race called a Revenant. A Revenant is a result of a vampire and elf getting it on, but here's the catch, vampires are classified as undead.
So technically they shouldn't be able to have children, that's a unique idea and could be explored well, it makes us curious how the main character's mother got around that limitation.
Here is where it gets a bit murky however, the explanation given is that they "moved away from darkness" or something similar to that line of reasoning.
Maybe it gets explained later in the story since this review is pretty early, but it's not too big an issue anyway, at worse a missed opportunity.
Now, grammar, the other reviews rate it quite high, it's not horribly unreadable, far from it.
But there's duplicated words, many spelling mistakes per chapter so far as well.
Although I am a bit of a grammar nazi so take my opinion with a grain of salt, next, the writing style, it's very much average.
There's really nothing special about it, maybe sentences flow a bit odd sometimes but the chapters I've read have apparently been edited and I did find a comment mentioning the repetition of actions like winking and so on.
That's a common issue for writers, they often repeat something too often, like a gesture or a bitter smile, maybe even a sigh, things like that.
But the author seems to know now anyway, so moving on, character.
Drakon the main character seems pretty likeable sometimes, although there are moments that make me question what he's been doing all his life.
For example, after becoming 18 you get your class and race identified, the race part is minor for other people but Drakon was adopted and his parents died not long after.
He was sent to an adventurer kid boarding school that doubles as an orphanage, which makes a lot of sense and I must praise the author for this, having adventurer parents drop their kids at a boarding sch