Dragon Ball Magic

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Description

Sala Malik and Avo Cado are earthlings. When the humans were killed and the earth destroyed, Avo was one of the few to survive. Seeing his best friend die in front of his eyes, the feeling of powerlessness was unbearable and soon, as he watched the universe undo what had been done, he made his resolve to become a powerful magician and a defender of his home ! With the resurrected Sala, Avo left the comfort and familiarity of his planet on a long journey through space... All in order to learn the secrets of the Arcane.

ARC 1 - First encounter with the Namekian people. Chapter 1-7

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: Cathbel

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Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 27
Views: 15,757

Chapters(16 total)

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MastersgtjamesRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I will start by saying... I like the premise and the concept of the story.
However.
The MC's name is just ridiculous. Avo Cado? Naw, that's just a joke that gets dull after the synopsis.
MC's friend... Idk... maybe she adds something to the story for other people. For me, not so much. I think the story would be better with a single MC, solo story.
Now, this next bit may come across as mean, but I do not intend it that way. The story feels twisted. Not bad, but as if it was arranged wrong. It skips where it should drag, and drags where it should skip. It is hard to describe. All I can say is that I find myself skipping almost entire chapters out of a lack of interest in the situation or the descriptions. Finding myself disliking the characters, their 2-dimensional behavior and lack of depth.
I like the Synopsis (minus the sidekick MC that is Sala Malik), I like the MC, his motivations, the idea of this being a Dragon Ball Universe story not focused on martial combat but on magic... Then we get a fantastic MC, Great Motivation/background. Sadly, after that the story seems to skew. MC seems to take a backseat in his own story. Sidekick decides where he will go, leaves him there without his ship/possessions, then he just goes with it. He does not FEEL like he is super motivated to learn, to learn everything. Instead, he just feels like he is just shrugging through his experiences. You could have had chapters of detail on reuniting with his people, trying to learn more about them. Instead, we get just the bare facts, then into the Montage-esque training sequence. Only to slow down at weird points... Just feels weird.