Do No Harm
Self-Published
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Description
Milo Atkins has just woken up from a 200 year cryo sleep to find his vision for a super-powered earth realized. He's showered with praise and comforts for pioneering this new step in human evolution.
But Milo himself, put to sleep due to his immunity to the process to gain super powers, grows concerned about the parades and celebrations in his name. He's the last human alive without ANY powers, after all. His suspicions are confirmed when he realizes that the curvaceous doctor assigned to him, is actually a convicted felon.
Why would a world filled with superheros want someone normal? And why the pretense?
[The price of power...is flesh.]
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- LynaForge
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- Rating
- 3.7/ 5.0
- Followers
- 58
- Views
- 7,342
Chapters(8 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- AstrilleRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5Having read the first six chapters, I'm left interested but a little confused.
The synopsis implies that Milo is the main character of the story and yet, so far, we have seen only the footprints that he has left in the sand. We know he exists, but that is the extent of our understanding. This would be fine by itself as I don't mind a slow start but when combined with the time jumps that seem to take place between (and within) chapters, it feels disorientating.
Because descriptions of memories and past events are woven into chapters into current time without prompting or much explanation, it feels like I'm constantly second guessing myself about when actions are taking place. So much focus needs to be wasted on understanding whether the scene is in the past, is happening currently or whether a chunk of time has actually elapsed without me noticing that it would be easy to miss some of the lovely details included by the author (such as mis-heard or misunderstood names by Evan when the chapter switches to his PoV).
As such, I've rated the style fairly low. It feels unfair because the story itself is unfolding nicely. The world building is paced well, creating vivid visuals without feeling too heavy. The story score also suffers as a result as it feels like I'm slotting pieces of a puzzle together... but perhaps not the puzzle that the author intended.
The characters save this story so far. They're dynamic and interesting, with clear voices within the story itself.
All in all, the story is good, with the potential to be great. It just needs a bit more untangling so those rogue threads support rather than hinder the author. - SnekekRoyal Road★★★ 3.0what in tarnation? i have no idea whatsoever of what is happening. the largest piece of information i got was from the synopsis. without it i might as well be reading russian. the timeskips are so confusing that you cant tell what is going on at any given time or if there even is a timeskip. there is no context as to who you are experierncing the events with. it seems that even the author has only the slightest idead of whats going on. needless action. just seems like word filler. now i know that i might be giving a too harsh reaction but i dont write that many reviews. if someone can convince me to pick it up again i dont think i can go on. sorry. (just realized that my review was a large ramble. not going to change it but i know that it is mainly just repeating myself.)