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Self-Published
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Description
Grant never made it home. During his drive, he met what should have been a minor accident, but an unexpected failure left him crippled and without his only purpose. After reaching his tragic ending, he woke up in a strange new body. Given this strange new lease on life, he pledged to live the life that was torn from his grasp through whatever challenges it may bring him.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2017
- Author
- Amadeus1
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Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.3/ 5.0
Chapters(6 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- KycomputerRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5would give 5 stars, but i think you could consider taking slightly more time describing the story and the protagonist's percerption/narration
- AccridianRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5While the story so far (up to chapter 4) is somewhat generic, your use of vivid descriptions makes your fiction more palatable and intriguing than the others.
However, I feel that the story is progressing too fast. The characterization of the parents and descriptions of their relationship with the main character are minimal and somewhat shallow.
Spoiler: Spoiler
Thus causing the eventual falling out between the main character and her parents to be hard to sympathize or empathize with since we hardly know the other characters or the nature of their relationship with the main character.
I believe that due to your descriptiveness your story has great potential, but it suffers from pacing issues. If not for that, I would give your fiction a 4 (or a 4.5 in the future since the plot hasn't had enough time to develop yet).
(No fiction deserves a 5! Because no fiction is perfect!)