Disciple.

Self-Published

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Description

I was there before Death was born. I was there when the Sea of Chaos formed. I was there when the first universe was born. I was there when life appeared for the first time. I was there at the dawn of time, and will be there for its twilight.

Long story short I am old and powerful. I would be called an Eldritch Abomination by many among you. This however is not my story. This is the story of my favourite human, a man who managed to surpass my expectations until the day of his death. A man to whom I personally taught the deepest secrets of Creation.

The story of my Disciple, born to a world within the Fayd. A man who was called many names. Godkiller, Guardian of the Gates of Death, My Left Hand, Destroyer, The End by his enemies. That Crazy Dude by his allies. I call him Sam-Sam, mainly to annoy him.

But primarily, this is a story of a man doing his life right. With all my wisdom I can’t think of him living a better life than he did, given his circumstances.

So gather round, for the story of my dear friend.

Not a litrpg.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: reluctant writer

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 26
Views: 8,641

Chapters(15 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

The dude who cookRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
If you like science-fiction and fantasy this is what you locking for .
Tana NariRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Much of the story is trying so hard to be serious that it instead borders on hilarious, which contrasts in interesting ways with the laid back, often deadpan, and not at all serious behavior of the characters. There's a tonal dissonance there that could be used to great comedic effect, but it's clearly not the author's intent to do so.
Skip the intro, which is just the author ranting about physics and telling people not to complain that his story tosses them out the window. Then skip the first segment of chapter 1, since it's nothing but useless setting information that could have been introduced slowly throughout the story instead of a front-loaded info-dump, except that nothing in it is complex enough that it needs be discussed at all. "Some mages are better trained than others, they have a ranking system for how good a mage is... oh, and also the MC is a super fighting genius" covers everything that matters.
Once you get to the family scene, it gets better. The author does know how to write character interactions quite well; the family interactions are fun and charming, and other characters fit well together- you can see that they've known each other for a long time. And then the story wastes hundreds of words giving you unnecessary backstory information that was better when inferred rather than stated.
But I give points for not wasting time trying to tell us that the MC is really weak but somehow wins everything ever anyway. That alone makes it better than the majority of stories in the borderline xianxia (this one has a Lovecraft twist that isn't really used) style storytelling that seems to have inspired this story.
The writing style also leaves a great deal to be desired. Run-on and truncated sentences abound, the story tries too hard to make mundane stuff sound epic, the usual glut of adverbs, and chapters that would serve the story better if they were broken up so that each scene is its own chapter.
There is absolutely no good reason for an 8,000 word chapt