Did I build an empire?

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Description

In a society passionate about games,  the new one was grabbing eyeballs.  As a self declared salted fish embarks on the journey within the game, can he really be blaise and nonchalant?

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2024
Author
Bookdevotee

Tags

LITRPGACTIONFANTASYVIRTUAL REALITYADVENTURESCI-FISLICE OF LIFESCHOOL LIFESTRONG LEADGAMELITMALE LEADSECRET IDENTITYSPORTSMULTIPLE LEAD CHARACTERSKINGDOM BUILDINGSTRATEGYURBAN FANTASYPROGRESSIONARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCEDUNGEON CRAWLERATTRACTIVE LEAD

Royal Road Stats

Rating
3.0/ 5.0
Followers
2
Views
1,270

Chapters(6 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • HildegardHopeRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    Alright so I am leaving a review mostly about the 1st chapter. For reference. Your paragraphs are incredibly short, a paragraph should be 6-12 sentences, most of yours are 2. There is very little physical description, i have no idea what the MC looks like. Your dialogue is good, and it really shows a lot about these characters, most of the problems i noticed here could be fixed by downloading Grammarly (#notspon lol) and adding some descriptions. You are doing well, as i go through the other chapters i will post comments about what i noticed on them.