Descent of the Arcane

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Caleb was your average office worker in most ways. He went to work did his job to the best of his abilities begore going home. The thing that set him apart was his fascination with the occult and anything tying into magic. Now, he realized that it was all fake but a part of him yearned for a world were it was real. A world of adventure and growth. Maybe he should have been more careful of what he asked for.

"Caleb look at this. This book mentions something called a Cradle of Life." Maddy one of Caleb's few friends got his attention. They were currently pouring over a fee old times that they were having trouble translating.

"My tome mentioned something similar. Look here it seems to say 'the Great Rebirth shall transform the Cradle so it may join'. Unfortunately it doesn't mention what the Cradle will join nor exactly what the Rebirth is." Caleb replied while looking at the gorgeous 5'3" red haired woman next to him. Most people found it strange seeing the two together. Caleb was 5'8" had light brown hair and a bit of a stomach pouch if he was going to be honest while Maddy looked like a model who worked out almost religiously.

WORLD JOINING THE MULTIVERSE!

ALL SAPIENT CREATURES RELOCATED TO THE TUTORIAL.

CHILDREN IN THE FIRST 5% OF LIFESPAN MOVED TO THE TEMPLE OF THE GODS UNTIL THEY RECEIVE A CLASS AT LEVEL 10

ALL SICK OR INFIRM HEALED ALL AGED PEOPLE RETURNED TO 30-40% OF LIFESPAN

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Kyle Kovar

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.6/ 5.0
Followers: 203
Views: 33,050

Chapters(20 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

DrakenileRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Decent world building and author seems to care about the story so hopefully won't be dropped. Not enough chapters to know how it will turn out but I am feeling hopeful. Author says hes interested in feedback and while that may be a good thing I still hope he'll stay true to his own vision. If an author takes too much of his audience's views he'll lose what makes his story good
TooHardToReadRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
First Things First:
This Review might be over the top and focused on negative things. still It got a certan rythm to it, that made me continue reading, so consider carefully if my negative is your negative.
Rating is reflecting that, Its a new story, And I don't really want to destroy it.
The Grammar suffers through quite a few of Homonyms/ misspelled words. (Honestly immersion breaking for me at least)
The Style is that of a LitRPG story.
The status window is quite massive (Textfronts) and I am still not all that sure how it works (runes-spells etc) ( okay might be to early, or just me)
Quite a Lot of the chapters feel like there are chapters missing inbetween them. like In chapter A he is getting his Affinities checked. In chapter B he developed X spells and got archievments. (To passive for my taste at least.I want more Hands on approach- sure the magic system isn't the focus here, still a bit of seen development would be nice)
The MC is obviously a genius without equals. ( only the system is still declaring him 'talented' not godlike) But his actions speak more of a recless character who isn't thinking all that much about what he is doing. (I know it's hard to find a witty MC, but it's fitting better with all that genius thing)
At this point I would say its a Xianxia story. (cultivation incoming )
BtW the ' strong Lead' Tag is missing.
ramoutonRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Good story so far.
There are some homonym problems, in addition to some spelling issues and other typos. Some of those make it hard to read at times, but if you power through it is a good story so far, I hope the author can keep it going.
The worst offender homonym-wise for me is : do => due
Nomad1791Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
I went into this expecting spelling mistakes from the beginning just because of the summary. This is clearly written by someone who English is their first language but the spelling mistakes make me think they are very young. So hey cudos to the athor you are writing something that has garnered a lot of interest please don't take this negative I believe if you keep writing you'll only improve.
Joe ThomasRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
When I started reading this I thought that this must be a non-native English speaker due to all of the spelling and grammar mistakes, but it became clear through some of the word choices that the author is American. It is somewhat ironic that this book is about a linguistic genius but is written by someone that struggles to write their own native language.
A few spelling or grammar mistakes here and there are to be expected in some of these stories, but there are so many that it does ruin the immersion and take you out of the story. Some of these would be solved with a simple spell check, which is particularly galling. The author does, however, use paragraphs correctly, and many other elements that are missing when non-native speakers try to write these novels, which certainly improves this and brings the grammar score to above 1 star.
The story itself is fairly standard LitRPG system apocalypse stuff, and does as well as any. The reason I haven't just given this a 1 star is because the story really does do the heavy lifting in this one, and there is a lot of work for it to pull in order to make up for the rest of it.
There are several characters in this novel but they are all hollow, one paragraph characters that have almost nothing to say to the main character. There's no decent conversations or human moments. There's no realism or sense of struggling or humanity. Each character is described in a sentence, or possibly two. Dialogue is limited to describing LitRPG elements that the character might not know and that's about it.
The main character is far too much of a Mary-Sue. Initially they have a great talent of being a lingustic genius and the author looks like they are taking it in the direction that this would make them a runic master, which would have been great. Unfortunately, they then added in that he was a combat genius as well, and had this unbelievable bloodline, and really anything else that the author wants them to have and it just doesn't make sense a