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Status

Hiatus

Author

Aoisatan

Reviews

Community Reviews(5)

• TheDangerousDinoRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I came from the most recent update ( Experience Ho! Pt 6 ) and I'm enjoying it so far. The story is unique and entertaining and I would recommend giving it a read.
  Though keep in mind the chapters are VERY short, the writing is a little inconsistent at times and there's not much clarity on what is going on ( I assume that's going to be cleared up later. ) Also, it's present to me that Mr.Aoisatan likes what he's writing and that in itself it great.
  ;)
• acederequizaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Read continuously until chapter 16 and then skipped some.
  Style:4/5
  It is not often that one could find humorous chapters at first go. While other opted for grimdark and depressing introduction, you use comedy instead. I applaud you for that. The comedy was good with quirky characters. I wanted to give you full marks for your effort but alas there was a little letdown at the latest chapters. As your style improve and you put more details into your works, the comedy that endeared me was somehow lost.
  And this is a major problem with comedy. Once it dried up, its hard for us to maintain the high level we set earlier. A suggestion for you to keep it up is to watch more comedy or read something funny to get the juice flowing. Mine would be watching Mr. Bean or Peter Russel and Who's Line is it anyway?
  Story: 4/5
  An isekai type of story with a non standard take. Impressive but need a little more polish in term context of your world. If I'm not mistaken, you might not have plan in advance how you want it to be. You create as it flows along. So the further we read, the story gets a little more confusing.
  You are doing a good job. Just needed that extra planning on your part and tie up any loose end that you might create unknowningly.
  Grammar: 3/5
  There are alot of grammar mistakes of various types that made the flow a little jarring in the beginning but nonetheless you improved as you go on.
  Character: 3.5/5
  Quirky characters that one could relate to. But need more from supporting characters in your story. Other than the few you started with, the rest of the characters were quite not as interesting or fleshed out as they should be. Seems like those people are just there for everyone sake of being there.
  For me, what make a story interesting is not just the characters but also the support elements that make and define the character and the world. I hope you could work on it a little more.
  Overall: 4/5
  The author's improvement could clearly be seen from chapter to chapter. H
• God_is_GoodRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  A really, really facinating story.  It's really funny, and got me really laughing a lot at some parts.  It has intriguing characters that seem to jump right off the page and catch your eye with crazy ideas and really fun personalities.  Although it's a little more lighthearted then my usual style, It was truly an enjoyable read.  The story is the best part.  I won't spoil anything, but it was a really intriguing plot with lots of twists and turns.  Please do give it a try, Royal Road Readers.  You won't regret it.  :)  Keep up the great work!
• VolosRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  As of chapter 46.  First if you’re concerned on length, don’t be.  Each chapter/scene is pretty short, but on the whole the work is neither too short nor too long—though I hope the end is in sight.  Others have noted the slow start, but I actually think the charm of the work is the beginning.
  The earlier scenes maintained a comedic narrative, mostly in comedy through absurdity.  Later on it feels like the author started to take the narrative too seriously, and made a more straight forward attempt at the LitRPG genre.  By chapter 25 I rarely even grinned to say nothing of laughing, which is unfortunate because there is some solid comedy in the first 10 chapters.
  The grammar is fairly bad, which means it’s slightly below average for RRL standards.  It’s at the level of at least one mistake per paragraph, but not at the point where it constantly prevents immersion.  There aren’t any characters that are likeable, which would be fine if the comedy kept delivering, but it just doesn’t.  By chapter 46 most of the humor is thoroughly rung out, and it’s my hope the author can find some fresh inspiration to finish out the narrative (which will hopefully not drag on to long).  I’m not planning to follow this work, but I may come back time to time and check in.
• wezardRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Don't lie to your readers. Still you could add SC later