Death Incarnate (Completed)

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Description

Kei was a menace or called by most, a demon. He gets into bloody fights with others. Which makes him a problem to the common folk and criminals alike. But he can't win forever. So, his life came to a close with another merciless brawl. With Kei trying to take as much of them to hell and in his final moments, he never regretted his decisions in this mad world filled with cruelty. If the world is cruel to you then be more crueler back.

Then he received a second chance in a sword & magic world but with a condition from the Goddess of Death.

To save the Demon race.

Note: Don't expect a good story, it's just smut trash as my first published fiction.

Updates are infrequent and may or may not revise these chapters.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2017
Author: node.

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
Followers: 415
Views: 312,521

Chapters(34 total)

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Community Reviews(5)

ArchiveRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So I just finished this story, and it was pleasureable. Seeing a story with an ending here on RR is awesome.
Now for the critique.
The characters need more flesh. Reading your story, this is probably where you need to focus in future writings. The backstory, thoughts and inner workings of your characters and their minds need more attention. You used a broad stroke on everything, and it leaves something to be desired. Now with an OP MC, its not the how but the why that matters. A real fight usually occurs with a wham bam, it's over ma'am.
For myself, who enjoys an overpowered main character, you have to really get into their head and fully flesh out thoughts, desires, actions, reactions, what drives them, their 'reverse scale'and why it is, such to make the story great. We all know the MC is going to win, we want the character interaction's and details.
You could totally have made more books off this story by making it a war between gods, Deco using a hero summon to win worlds or destroy faith power bases of the 'white prostitute'.
ElmvreyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Good bingable story with good grammer that has no noticable flaws after CHP 2. Great story, not quite perfect for me, so 4.5/5 OR 9.5/10 although the MC is OP it's played through well and is not the sole focus of the story, more what he does with it. ex: "I'm building a haven for me and mine,with minor diffuctily" vs. "I'm taking over the kingdoms just cuase, Then Imma ignore and/or forget them to struggle on their own." Good read. took ~3-4 hours to read, start to stop.
ZethuronRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Was a alright read, through there are much problems. The author wrote it as a fantasy/wishfullfillment dark-ish isekai story, and its good if you treat it as one.
The characters arent that much, but still they are decently done overall. The MC stands out as being better developed than the others, but thats not much, since the other characters are barely anything, through this can be attributed to the fast pace and short length of the story, also the fact that the author was not trying at making well developed side characters. A warning through is that the MC and some of the side characters have basically no limits on what they do to their enemies (basically almost everyone else) this does mean that theres 18+ content in this novel such as sexual acts, torture, gore and so on. So dont read if such content does offend you or you simply dont like reading it.
The story is pretty cliched, and i dont blame the author for that, he did a decent job at writing the world, the overall plot and sorta making it interesting despite the amount of Isekai cliches in this story. Through the story could certainly use more detail, the chapter near the end are especially a problem in that, since they are rushed, all problems for the MC and side characters just does disappear.
Grammar is a major problem in this novel, with most chapters being not edited at all, only the first chapters have any editing done for them. There are just so many mistakes with tense, spelling and miss-typings that it makes the story harder to read at times. It also does not look like the author is going to fully revise those chapters, considering this is his first novel. On the other side the author did his best at making a story for people to enjoy, overall his writing style is decent.
Overall, a okay novel to read if you like power-fantasy, a antihero isekai novel, or just want to spend time on reading something without caring for quality.
mcdeathcoreRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
While the overall score for the story isn't great. Its not bad for a time waster. If not leaving a slight disappointment of what it could have been. Do I regret reading it, yes and no. Would I tell my past self to read it if they had nothing to do. hmm. its short so sure.
Breakdown.
Overall score - 2.5 it would be a 4 or higher if it kept up the quality from the first half. (character consistency and story structure.)
When he releases the princes is the turning point. it goes from a personal story of a powerful person to a overview of that story if that makes sense. lots of povs and other things.
Style score - 3.5 I didn't think 'it would have been cooler if he showed it this way' too many times. so yea. style is hard to measure.
Grammer 2.0 I can read it. 1 is machine translations so my expectations are rather low to begin with. run it through Grammarly or just reread it and most of this will clear up to a 3 or 4.
Story score 3.5 the second half let it down so its above average only because I like the type of story it is. If you aren't a fan of the op mc thing then it might not be for you.
Chatacter score - 4.0 Only lost a star for inconsistency. the characters were interesting to read bar the later ones. spider and headless. because they didn't have time and weren't in the right storytelling structure to be fleshed out. Still the best part of the story by far. Anyway the inconsistency were how he treats main characters and the rest of the cast you can figure it out.
NuclearBirbRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Story devolves into a script format, lots of abbreviations and so on - combine that with the overly quick pacing, a lack of any conflict that matters - interpersonal or otherwise, any romance I clouded feels super rushed, and not a lot of humor, I can safely say I don't understand the draw. The protagonists main thing is that he murders a fuckton for ANY perceived slight, who h is an interesting character trait, but it goes somewhat unrelated besides his slaves ooh scary moments. He then proceeds to be a standard protagonist, and buy slaves to free them - it's pretty obvious they're just there as plot devices - this seems like it's trying to be a revenge fantasy isekai, but it fails to make me actually mad at the world- our protagonist is so clearly unaffected in all ways by the abuse he suffers he may as well be a blender instead of a person. The concepts aren't inherently bad here - I'd be excited to see what this author has to offer after they learn a bit more. The best, and first piece of actionable advice I have is to stop abbrwviating, and remove all cases of script format - the grammar itself is fine, its just the formatting and abbreviation, and it shouldn't be too hard to fix that. Everything else should be fixed with a bit more experience honestly.