Cultivators are extinct!

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Elizabeth Rielle wants to be a hero. To be a hero that would protect the world from the thieves that steals old women’s bags to monsters that threaten the survival of humanity. But when she took the dormant meta human DNA test she finds out that she is a rare specimen, her DNA is 100% clean without any changes. No nuclear change, solar change, and not even any hereditary diseases.

Elizabeth is absolutely the perfect example of a perfectly healthy human being. Since Elizabeth is perfectly human anything injected in her body to make her stronger will kill her since the human race has evolved to be capable of making their bodies stronger. Rejected, the distraught Elizabeth goes to find a job that would allow her to help society in the smallest of ways.

She entered the police force but even the police force is mostly handled by metahumans, making her a simple traffic enforcer without any capability to get to a higher position.But when an incident almost costs her life, memories appeared inside her mind showing her a way on how to become stronger without changing her body in any other way. With a new way of becoming stronger and the hope of making a change towards humanity Elizabeth followsthe path of becoming the last cultivator but what she doesn’t know is that higher powers are watching her and one day she might need to face them.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Blacklight85

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Rielle VioletsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Quite fascinating a name, don't you think? :)
Wickedly_DesignedRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
The story has a good premise, but sufders from subpar execution.
The best one can say about grammar is that it is (if barely) readable. Tenses are all over the place, perspective jumps erratically from line to line in some places, and sentence structure is often problematic as well.
By necessity, the grammar drags down style, simply by not allowing anything worth mentioning to emerge.
World-building is a mess. We have cars that run on fusion generators that still produce considerable amounts of exhaust. We have tasers that run on bioelectricity, but exclusively the electric potential of the brain, yet able to produce a considerable charge... We have buildings said to be able to withstand city-scale meteoric impacts, yet the previously mentioned fusion cars can and do crash through stores - and explode afterwards.
Then there are metahuman abilities... Saying that a speed of 26 kmh would already qualify someone as a metahuman. So, is Usain Bolt one as well, with his top speed recorded somewhere close to 45 kmhs?
It's like a 12 year old set up the world by taking familiar elements, and tried applying the rule of cool to them, without doing any proper research or considering how said items and conveniences would affect the world as a whole, or if they by themselves were in any way or form a logical and plausible thing that could and would emerge if the tech level allowed them.
And we haven't even talked social structures yet... We have metahumans, at around 30% of the population.
A significant minority by itself, but concentrates the absolute majority of the population's physical and mental abilities as well. Yet, seven chapters in, there is no mention of any sort of resentment, social tension, etc, beyond some personal details that aren't even proper indicators of the general views. Where's the mutant hate? The elitism of the metas? The existential crisis of the baseline humans?
What about resources? We are shown a western consumer society that can and does keep up a g