Crystal Magic Adventure: A Tale of Discovery

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Description

Lila, a daring and curious explorer, uncovers a hidden cave in the heart of rugged mountains near her small village. In that cave, she discovers a powerful crystal that grants her extraordinary abilities. But there is always a price, and she is not the only one that ends up paying for it...

As Lila navigates a world filled with magic and dark secrets, she must confront both external dangers and the inner turmoil they bring.

Cover Art by Blueverse Design (Instagram: @designblueverse) and 40K Wong

Editing and Proofreading by Konkeranto

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Frosty I. Frost

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 104
Views: 15,234

Chapters(18 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

0nLin3Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm reading this story in another website and I really like it. I was expecting more cliche developments after reading first chapter, but the twists and turns keep surprising me. I like the moral dilemmas mc goes through a lot. And the grammer is great. I would recommend it to anyone looking for something new to read.
FrostyTNTRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This book is a must-read for anyone who enjoys things like high-fantasy, DND, and fun magic.
Style & Grammer
The author does a really great job at showing us what the characters are feeling, I would have preferred a few more descriptive paragraphs but overall the style is great. I personally like that the author didn't restrict themselves to one POV and bounced around in the middle of the chapters. It's well punctuated.
Story:
I'm not a big fan of high fantasy in general because it feels a bit stale. But dang, was this book good. It does a really great job of attracting the audience and adds a lot of flavor. I would also like to mention that in chapter 1 when she finds the crystal there is no big scene. She just goes to the cave and gets it. I'm not saying that it's bad or anything but I would have liked a bit more description of what happened and how nervous Lila was, but otherwise, the story is well thought out.
Character:
I like the MC, Lila, and Crystal's interactions. But I would like to see Crystal develop more and start to feel human. Also, adding more adventures and side characters would feel a lot smoother.
HippioScipioRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The 'young man/woman finds mysterious kungfu master to train them' storyline present in quite a lot of wuxia novels is not an archetypal story where the MC usually presents anything other than a facsimile of morality. However, the MC here has a moral code and sticks to it - even after tragic events, a very rare and noteworthy thing for a wuxia novel.
Talking about our MC, I'd say she is a pretty solid character and she is written well enough to merit being called human-like. Her relationship with her crystalline master is interesting on the face of it, and the groundwork seems in place for both conflicts and resolutions between the two - aka compelling character arcs.
I'd say the worldbuilding is also pretty neat. Overall, I like this story and will continue following it.
Kaleb ZaleRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I am 5 chapters in (originally reading from wattpad) and I am enjoying the read thoroughly.
Style:
The tone of the read is playful and a little entrancing at times, I enjoy the whimsy Frosty weaves throughout the story and how the characters move through the world. The world building is very precise and helps me paint a strong image which I feel is close to what Frosty wants.
Grammar:
Frosty's first language isn't English as he has mentioned, but he should be very proud of the overall accuracy that he maintains throughout here - there are a few errors and tidy ups, usually with paragraphing and comma usage, but that is easily repaired and doesn't spoil the read.
Story:
I love the story - it's simple and therefore easy to carry forward, Frosty is pushing the story on with each chapter and inserting conflict to keep me going, there aren't many points where I slow down or the read feels longer.
Characters:
Crystal is fun and her banter with Lila is fun, Elias I would like more of. I would say there are a lot of characters introduced quickly in the first chapter and that could be looked at, otherwise each character feels unique - especially the big lad John! :)
Thank you for sharing your work and I look forward to continuing my read.
UEMARBIRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story follows the adventures of Mila who had to overcome incredible odds. A tragic fate awaited her at the expense of her adventurous spirit. A well put together story all in all with each character being unique. I was entertained reading into each interaction, and the thoughts going through her head as she contemplated her actions.
However, with each step she takes, her heart is darkened, to a point where she is willing to bring harm to others without second thought.
Style score:
The story and the setting being described is just perfect without being overly detailed. It still has incredible details, but not to a point that it becomes suffocating.
Story score:
As of chapter 12 it's really hard to say this, but from what we are given thus far its excellent without revealing too much into the world. Lila's story gives a lot of depth even into human psychology as her exposure to danger and death has hardened her heart.
Grammar score:
Few minor problems that were addressed. No difficulty reading.
Character score:
This is where the story shines. The interactions between Lila and all and I mean ALL characters were entertaining. From talking to Crystal to a shopkeeper and his wife, each interaction is brought on by twists and turns. However it is her who stands above the rest as a strong female protagonist.
AkmedrahRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
TLDR: Slow-burn fantasy story with a good storyline and decent characters. Hopefully, there will be more character development down the line. Looking forward to the development of the story.
STYLE: The style of this story is well-written and consistent throughout the existing chapters.
STORY: The story follows Lila and Crystal, a girl and a literal crystal, on the (thus far) beginning of their adventures. With the direction that things seem to be heading, this looks like it will shape up into a fun little story! The one-star deduction is because calling this story 'slow burn' is a bit of an understatement. I appreciate all the details and information we are getting, but it is rather slow.
GRAMMAR: The grammar in the story is good. The only issue I had with it is that the formatting of some things, like the inclusion of extra line breaks and other minor formatting issues, made this story difficult to read on PC. When I switched to mobile, however, it looked much better.
CHARACTERS: The characters, or at least the main characters, are Lila and Crystal. Crystal is a bit of an enigma, which, given what little we know, is to be expected. However, Lila is a bit of a letdown. She is prone to emotional outbursts, but that is the only kind of tonal inflection we get with her. She has had several things happen that, in my opinion, should have had more of an emotional/visceral impact on her. I look forward to seeing how this character will grow.
OTHER: Overall, this is a good story and a quick read (at the 13-chapter mark at least.) If you have an hour or two to spare I highly recommend this story.
Lile BanRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This is an advanced and comprehensive review based on the story so far up to the chapter you see on this review - the characters are subject to change and they have the opportunity to be developed further - as well as the story.
Plot:
The narrative follows Lila, a young girl hailing from a secluded village, who stumbles upon a mystical crystal. This discovery inadvertently results in the devastation of her home. Lila embarks on a quest for retribution against the enigmatic Alara, who manipulated her. Throughout her journey, she encounters a variety of characters. As the tale unfolds, Lila transitions from a naive village girl to a savvy traveler. The overarching storyline is compelling, but certain plot points need further refinement, particularly Lila's ethical dilemmas, such as her decision to abandon Nosdramo.
Characters:
Lila, the protagonist, undergoes substantial evolution throughout the story. Her transformation from innocence to wisdom is well portrayed. The crystal serves as a moral compass and guide for her. The supporting characters, including Mardro, Gerda, and Aranth, while integral to the story, lack complexity. The antagonists, Nosdramo and Alara, could benefit from further character development.
Writing:
The author's descriptive writing style effectively sets the scenes. Lila's internal monologues offer readers a glimpse into her thoughts and emotions. However, some sections feel overly verbose, and certain dialogues seem stilted. The most impactful moments in the plot showcase the author's writing prowess.
Pacing:
The story begins at a leisurely pace, setting the groundwork for Lila's backstory. The tempo escalates once she embarks on her journey, maintaining a consistent rhythm, slowing down appropriately during critical character development moments. This pacing matches the expectations of an adventure fantasy narrative, though some parts could be more succinct.
Themes:
The dominant themes explored include vengeance, morality, greed, and the loss
NitaxxRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I recently concluded the first arc and I like it. The author seems to consider it a bit slow burn at the beginning but I really liked the pacing, everything was a natural progression.
Style: The author has a unique style of writing that perfectly combines narration and dialogue. The focus on emotional mechanisms is appreciated as well.
Story: The story is great and really promising so far. The first arc nicely ties up some things and gives way for the next arc to take care of other details. There's enough questions left to keep curiosity and I'm looking forward to the next arc.
Grammar: There were no obvious grammar mistakes, nothing to break immersion. A few missing punctuations but not much of a big deal.
Character: The main character is fleshed out pretty well though she does break character a few times but that's good as well, people aren't one dimensional, sometimes they do things even they wouldn't have expected. A certain character, not sure if that can be classified as a character, seems a little bit twisted and that's kinda fun too.
All in all, it's a good book and you should really give it a read.
JoeyDeLeenRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Crystal Magic Adventure
This story has some really wonderful subversion of traditional fantasy tropes. I think the author will continue going from strength to strength as the story progresses.
I’ll go through the four subcategories here.
Style
The style of this story is fairly consistent, with the main flaw being the tendency to jump from POV to POV without notice. Often this is unnecessary, as the same information could be conveyed from Lila’s POV without the jump.
The imagery conveyed by the prose is one of the strongest points of the story, and the tonal shifts, for example from the first chapter to the second are done really well. With that said there are a few issues that stood out to me.
One was instances where the same word is used repeatedly to describe something, making it redundant. One example is here: “
Using ‘bloodied’ three times in one paragraph is a waste of words when more variety could help set the scene more vividly.
Grammar
Tidy grammar, not perfect, but perfectly readable. In some cases, it might need a fresh pair of eyes, as there were parts that were unclear. For example in chapter two,
Story
The first chapter makes a tough call between starting in the middle of the action, or starting with character development/introductions, and unfortunately comes down in the middle. This leaves the reader with an abrupt change from a girl chatting with her friends and daydreaming, to suddenly entering a cave and encountering magic almost immediately, with the sense that this happened five minutes from home.
While the reader gets to know Lila a little bit, it doesn’t allow you to get a real sense of what she’s chafing against, or what the stakes are for her. This is particularly unfortunate given the events of the second chapter, as it robs that scene of some power.
In general the world seems fascinating and the story gives plenty of foreshadowing about about its wider history.
Character
There are some gorgeous hints of strong characterization here, however
L.K. WinturRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The story isn't necessarily what I expected, but it kept my attention and I have enjoyed it overall so far.
Style:
The style and chronology of the story are good, moving smoothly from one chapter to the next and keeping the reader interested in turning the page with good chapter endings. One recurring issue I noticed throughout was that the tense isn’t always consistent, sometimes jumping to the present tense when the rest of the story is told in the past tense.
Story:
This has the makings of a good story. The setting is described wonderfully in places. I think there could be a bit more detail to some things, for example: How far was it to the cave? What did the cave look like inside? How big is the crystal? A few other things could be described or explained in a little more detail, like the burial which left one wondering how it was possible. The plot is slow so far, but does have an unexpected turn of events early on that draws you in to want to find out more. However, it isn’t clear at all what the quest is yet.
Grammar:
I was impressed with some of the dialogue and dialogue tags, especially early on. There are a few repetitions (using the same word twice in one sentence or in adjacent sentences) and unnecessary explanations (stating the obvious or things we already know), so like all writing there is room for improvement. Overall, the vocabulary is great.
Character:
I like the human characters in the story, especially the MC who is well-defined and realistic and gained my trust from the start. The crystal is my least favorite character so far, partly because of the way it addresses Lila (my dear, sweet cookie, lass, etc.). Without those ‘endearments’, it would read just as well and have more appeal. And partly because of its character. It has a strange view of things and no value for human life. Maybe it becomes more likable as time goes on, or maybe it’s not supposed to be likable. I can’t yet tell.