Crucible - A Lost Dungeons Tale

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Description

All stories must begin somewhere, this one starts with the creation of the universe.

What follows is a tale of chaos and order, of gods and monsters, of creation and destruction. The birth of a universe is a tumultuous journey, different entities working with opposing ideals, cooperation giving way to frustration and jealousy.

It is in that dangerous concoction of emotions that the god of monsters created the first dungeon core. Forged in a crucible of dedication and desire, the first core held potential, the likes of which could surpass even the civilised mortal races.

Unfortunately it was not meant to be, the core was lost in a tragic accident and its creator thought it to have been destroyed.

Over one-thousand years later, the core reformed inside an extinct volcano. In time it would grow enough to learn and learn enough to grow.

This is the story of the first dungeon core.

Crucible, the lost dungeon core.

Note: Story updates every hiatus*.

*Iappologise for the delay.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: J-B-W

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 553
Views: 32,266

Chapters(7 total)

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Community Reviews(7)

NikkiAngelRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Feel like I have been watching the movie of this book whilst reading. Cannot wait for the next chapters!
BinLoxRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Story and characters are a solid 5/5 for its kind so far. Love the innocence displayed by Crucible the most. Grammar is good, but please put the chapters through a spell checker before posting! E.g. wared (warred*)
j03manRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This has the potential to be the best ongoing dungeon story on royal road.
Most of my scores are preliminary since the character and story have not had time to develop significantly yet.
The style is very engaging, particularly the prologue.
The grammar is annoying at times and needs to be cleaned up considerably so the story can flow without being interrupted by confused use of plural, possessive, and plural possessive nouns, verb tense errors, poor adjective choice etc.
B-CRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Give me more.
Already eager to see this completed. I have a feeling one book may not be enough.
Well Done.
KitraneRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Already looking forward to more. Interesting take on a dungeon origin and decent job done portraying the core mentality as a newborn isolated child
blahblahblahblahblahRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I want to know more.
I want to read more.
I want to see more.
I want to feel more.
Give us more.
HickupsRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I've been reading up to chapter 6 (latest as of yet)
Let me start with the positive. This story is imaginative with unique ideas and the author shows enthusiasm. I sincerely hope that despite what I'll write in the following he keeps enjoying the process of writing.
Getting to the negative. First of all glaring issues with the vocabulary and regular grammatical mistakes make it partly unpleasant to read (this hopefully changes with practice). Also it's infodumpy at times.Secondly, there are a lot of character problems (imo). The mc -supposedly childish- is forcefully thoughtless and simplistic in speech yet can process complex mental constructs in narry a second. She has supposedly access to all common knowledge yet remains ignorant by decree of the author. Thus too inconsistent and written like an autistic with more than mild retardation she's a major deterrent to me. The supporting cast as of chap 6. is no better, consisting of sad carricatures for which I'd weep were they not inherently annoying.
Tl;dr: Creative story but utterly devoid of the qualities of professional writing.