Criminal Lord

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Description

Terry Isenburg, the greatest assassin who killed thousands of powerful officials and even led an army of people to reform the world had finally killed his final target after many years of suffering and effort. Changing the world was in sight. Until he was betrayed... Although, even in the abyss of death, two choices were placed before Terry. Enter the Trial or Hell? Watch how the man who nearly took over the world now attempts to take over a world of sword, monster, magic, and one hella strong tarantula...

I made this story because I always wanted a dark fantasy isekai with a hella fine backstory rather than an idiot being run over as well as having sustainable, epic scenes with a badass main character. All of which I believe my story has. (Although I'm bad at managing levels and experience and I have little imagery since I hate imagery)

One other thing, the first volume may be kinda boring/repetitive but I can guarantee loads of badass action in volume 2 so please stick around. (I would also appreciate the views)

If you like or dislike the story, please write a comment or review about this story to help me improve, but please don't hate on the story without explaining why. I also hope that you readers share the story to give me more support. Thanks and I hope you enjoy the story.

[The cover is something I made poorly but it represents something in chapter 9-10]

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2020
Author: Grandmaster17

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 2.3/ 5.0
Followers: 48
Views: 13,258

Chapters(20 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

DailyDoseRoyal Road
★ 0.5
I had a hard time going through the prologue alone. Events just happen for no reason, blaming "personnal technology" or the such to suddenly throw a grenade back for instance.
Also, while the grammar wasn't the worst, it was clearly not reviewed. This wouldn't be such a big issue, repetitive sentence structure, overused words and such, but some slang like "cuz" were also present.
I don't know if it gets any better later in the story, but for now, I would strongly advise to come back once the story is a bit more polished (hopefully).
LearethRoyal Road
★ 0.5
I started this story based on the recommendation of a RR author I liked. I'm sad to say they have bad taste in stories.
I love LitRPG, Isekai, or just general reincarnation stories; manga, fanfic or of any kind. And this? I am going to try the other two stories the author who recommended it offered, but if they don't redeem their taste? Never again.
One of the worst Sues I've ever seen, of any gender. Only thing going for them was that their spelling wasn't bad, tolerable punctuation, and could describe thing happening or descriptions of stuff without devolving into a word salad or purple prose.
As to the actual story? The first chapter was all boasting about how badass 'Terry' was, mooks being stupid, incredibly badly written action scenes without any understanding about how many exclamation points to use or who often to use a sound effect. Seriously. They didn't need to use the word "bang" more then 3 times in a row. Describe a sound, then give a description of what the physical effect of the sound/action was, no need for a paragraph of "bang" sound effects.
And the first chapter ended with 'Terry' being a bad ass in yet more incredibly badly written action scenes and more boasting (but only to the reader, the MC doesn't toot his own horn of course) followed by the second chapter beginning with "Wagh I died!?" followed by 'You were a super badass in your last life, be a super badass in this life!!!!@!' Followed by the MC gloating at how badass he was/is and having an incredibly hard time pretending not to be a bad ass and demonstrating he needs to take a pin to his ego or some anger management classes.
All in all I wouldn't try reading this again until I saw the word "rewrite" attached to it. And only then if I saw thanks to an editor in the description first.