Crafting to pay rent
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In a virtual realm where magic and adventure collide, Linnet, a skilled crafter and member of the guild 'Blink,' finds herself navigating the challenges of both a fantasy world and the real one. She has just given up her job and has began selling her creations on a third party site to pay her bills. She faces not only the alchemical intricacies but also the looming uncertainty of her future. Fuelled by the passion for her craft, Linnet grapples with love, friendship, backstabbing and nosy neighbours
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- Hiatus
- Year
- 2024
- Author
- Gamesdisk
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- Rating
- 4.1/ 5.0
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- 17
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- 1,705
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Community Reviews(2)
- KT CorbettRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0There is definitely some potential here. The VR world is vivid and colorful, and most importantly you connect it to the real world through the conceit of the main character crafting in-game for a real-world living.
there were just a few things that confused me. The description says that the main characters name is Linnet, but the text refers to her as Glade. Is Linnet her real name and Glade her game name? It seems like you could cause confusion to use her real name in the blurb, and then have the first chapter use her game name.
There are some grammar issues, but they aren't huge. Beyond the ones that others have pointed out in comments, I think the big one is that there are frequent run on sentences, which is a bad habit in itself, but you also occasionally omit a coordinating conjunction or use a comma there should be semicolon, so it just sounds wrong.
For example:
"She scooted over to the bubbler and ignited the burner under that too, she proceeded to grind ginseng into the cauldron and skilfully slivered in the reeds."
Each of these clauses is basically a sentence in itself. You could use a semicolon between "too" and "she" or try "...that too, then proceeded...". There are a number of options but as it stands, it just doesn't sound right.
Overall, this is decent start with good characterization and a fascinating setting. I hope you continue to flesh it out. - Yvan UngRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0I understand that the story is in its early stages, and has clear potential to grow, so this is what I would like to see later on:
- Customers using the products Glade crafts in-game for skin gambling
- Linnet having to make financial statements for tax purposes since it would qualify for self-employment (and, depending on the country, charging the local VAT if she sells enough)
- If the guild improves enough in raiding to be able to undertake higher-level raids, maybe have Linnet sell raid spots...
However, there are some sentences that confused me somewhat.