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This is a story of Shiro, a 12 year old girl who wished to adventure around the world. Only to end up in an untimely death. When she wakes up, she finds herself in what seems to be a new world, and her body has changed to that of a catkin. Using her knowledge from knowing literature of people in similar situations and adventuring, she tries to make a place for herself in this new world. Only to find out that reality is far crueler than one would imagine. Even with what one would call an OP unique skill and other OP advantages, she finds things quickly fall apart regardless how hard she tries. Thus she seeks more and more power to not only survive, but to protect what is important to her.

Unbeknownst to her though, lies within her an ancient power time primordial. A power so vast it can bring anything to its knees. This ancient power can easily be unlocked with just one sentence, but this sentence shall never be spoken. Instead, Shiro will embark on a new path to gaining a new different kind of power as she moves forward in this new world.

WARNING: The first few volumes will have tragedy, which will disappear at around Volume 5 or 6. From then on it will be just pure OP-ness and having fun.

While I personally like OP characters and don’t like tragedies myself, I think it is unrealistic that a person goes to an unknown and everything just magically go their way via plot armor. So I wanted to build up a more realistic OP reincarnation novel where MC struggles through a new world regardless of their advantages due to gaps in knowledge (despite how prepared she was) and simply not having enough strength at the time.

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This is my first poor attempt at a story. I read a lot of novels overall and was in the mood to see how well I can write one. Expect a lot of mistakes here and there as I am pretty new to writing.

Releases should be about 2 times a week(changed due to chapter size pretty much doubling) unless stated otherwise or inbetween volumes.

I will at least commit to finishing the volume I am on (Nothing worse than a story being cut off mid story).

So give me your comments what you think. I don't mind if the comments are bad and etc. Just lay off the grammar nazi (My only weakness)

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Lnv

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 1,128
Views: 882,134

Chapters(78 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

MATRRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It's good.
(Has been a couple months since i've finished it, so I don't remember much)
Pretty sure this was one of my all time favorite stories, I like the twist at these type of stories and the MC. The MC may be a little bit without her screw, but I have the feeling that it will be just fine when the fiction picks up again.
The OP-ness volumes will be fun when they come out.
TrashlynRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I love this catgirl and her adventures, woe onto anyone who would get in the way of her happiness.
praktiskaiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
satisfying progression, the System interface is very compact. As far as power progressions systems go, I like this one a lot. Even a lvl 1 skill makes a difference and it's hard to naturally acquire and level up skills, instead of going from 0 to lvl 20 or something in a few weeks.
there are some errors, the protag's need for water was neglected at the start unlike for food. Also, copper currency is useless. Imagine having fractions of a cent, thus am positive it only (even if slightly) harmed the story. In the end, the greatest flaw is it being (as far as I can observe) dropped
ChaoticRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
If anyone out there wishes to read a heartwarming(somewhat) story of a nekomimi, this is a stroy for you. Chapter one was a little wierd, but it disappears very soon. To get to ball rolling, my guess. From then on, the fantasy story flows, mixing in the oftenly seen elements with more personal and unique writer's style. The believable element of the story makes the character feel much closer than usual, allowing us readers(dungeon cores) to sympathise and empathise with poor Shiro. (Good name choice, by the way, me like)
Of course, Shiro is quite the overpowered cat, except that she maaaaay not be utilising her potential to the fullest. But then again, the weak to strong ramp followed by the very believable acquisition leads the story to flow much, much better.
Not much details have gone into to full in-depth description of skills and mechanics, but hey, we ain't no professional. In fact, the missing elements make it even more interesting instead. Though perhaps not quite as much as I lead you to believe. The story isn't complete yet, we can't be so quick to judge. You should keep this in view, because once you are hooked there is no going back.
Shiro is cute. Read for Shiro. Shiro Kawaii. Go Shiro.
*This review is done at Volume 3 Chapter 4*
JazehiahRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
What we have here, is the story of a potentially strong main character who is too dumb to fully take advantage of her infuriatingly strong advantage. It's both endearing and frustrating to watch Shiro's plans (most of which are actually pretty good) fall apart because of circumstance, other people, and her own inabilities.
That said, it's a good story. The main character has (almost) nothing handed to her on a silver platter. I do hope to see Shiro mature a bit, and maybe meet some genuinely nice people or make some friends.
Wickedly_DesignedRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Good story, good execution. It doesn't try to be the new masterpiece of the century, but is nevertheless a perfect choice for casual reading.
The story's best points are immersion and mood, in my oppinion: events have a good flow to them and the author has the ability to make the readers feel like they are a part of the story.
Grammar is good, no major flaws to break the above mentioned immersion, only a few less than significant mistakes here and there.
The reason for the lower than average story score is worldbuilding details: the author created good logical structures, both for the social/political side of things and both for the litrpg system in the story. But he seems to have filled these up with oversimplified ideas. Take crafting for example: a complex set of skills and stats to affect the outcome, actual non-system experience and ability actually influencing the pure math, working as a seemless whole. Full points. Then alchemical ingredients with definite uses and oversimplified metals were added. Copper, bronze, iron, steel, and a couple of extra layers that I won't bother looking up for noew, mithril and maybe adamantium were included, which should be more than enough to give you a picture... And these metals have a clear tier system... Some of them aren't even pure metals, but alloys by themselves, but no clear indication was given why one metal is better than another, no indication that some may be better suited to a given type of task/item, and a rather simply implied hint that other metals not mentioned as part of the tiers may exist (like the tin used for the bronze)... It's a small thing, overall, but I could continue ranting about it for pages... I don't expect the author to be as well versed in metals as for example klinH of Wizard with the Flower Blades is, but a bit more complexity and realism wouldn't hurt - as well as some extra clarification on the details for the crafting. Not necessarily the process itself, but what came of it: the MC creat
whoeverRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
As this tory is updated quite often, I often looked into it but after reading the story synopsis or latest after reading some of the prologue I always skipped it. Which means I missed quite a good story for far too long.
So if you consider reading it, skip the syopsis, skip the prologue. Best also skip the first chapter and start with the first chapter with a "(2)" in the title. Those raise all kind of scary flags that are luckily not representative of the story.
About the story itself: The story is centered around the main character, Shiro, from whose point-of-view the story is told from. Don't expect many other characters who could distract from here. She gets an quite OP skill very early and unsurprinsingly relies on that almost exclusively. While the skill is very overpowered making her also quite overpowered, the story takes it slow enough that it is still interesting. (Though I fear it is very unlikely the story can have more than 3 arcs due to the OP-ness, which is still quite a bit more than many other OP-stories manage).
WaveHolderRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Style:
Pretty good overall, classic. Try dividing the paragraph into smaller pieces.
Try avoiding long story expositions ( f.e. after she studied the Status screen ) maybe divide it among the first few chapters.
Grammar:
I noticed a few mistakes here and there but considering the level at which others write, you are perfectly fine.
But your wording made me uneasy at some points. idk, might be just me. Seemed weird at some points.
Story: I love cats, dungeons, and long chapters. So you have 10/10 on that. I read only prologue and 1st ch. so there is not much story to go on.
Altho [SPOILER] you somewhat confused me with the whole dungeon thing, and then you suddenly switch to beastkin. You might explain it in ch2 so that is fine.
Character:
[SPOILER]
12yo girl in an adult Khajiit-like body ( or nekomimi ? )
Idk, that whole idea is a bit far stretched. Your MC is acting a bit more mature that is normal for 12yo ...
Again, it´s your story and you surely have plans.
Continue doing what you like and be prepared for lots of fame :D This story is nice so far. You might get to the front page one day :D
Don´t be discouraged by the low score points. I might update it when you release more chapters and the whole story crystallizes more clearly.
Oh and one other thing, SHORTEN YOUR INTRO TEXT!
It´s too long and NO ONE will read it.
-WH
panderggbRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
The style in which this is written seems as though it was meant to be read as if a twelve year old wrote it, and since I assume that's how it was meant to read I believe it succeeds to a certain extent except that the character is unexplicably emotionless in circumstances that most children who don't have experience being a captive would instinctually resist, such as sudden and unexplained slavery.
The grammar is pretty good. I only noticed a few small errors like when boar was used instead of bear in one chapter and quite was used instead of quiet in another.
The story itself is not terrible up to the point that I had to stop reading which is at the point when the main character is dumped on by the other slaves for killing the master.
That brings us to the character part. The main character is a twelve year old girl who acts a bit like a psycopath as she seems to have only a couple of emotions during the story, one being fear, the other anger. She feels no joy, no sorrow, no hatred, no depression. The other slaves aren't any better. They all call her retard and treat her like garbage and the author excuses this by saying that they just don't want to deal with someone who will be dead soon... yet after she becomes one of the protected hunters none of the other slaves commiserate or console the CHILD among them... even among slaves there would be those with at least some sense of emotion or caring for each other. All of these characters are literally just cardboard cutouts with no meat as characters.
KorstRoyal Road
★ 0.5
If I'm honest it's not even how horribly the MC's life is in your stories that annoys me. It's that there seems to be not real reason other than that you felt like writing it that way. Your story isn't investing or interesting, it's just irritating. I wish I could say otherwise and I have been trying to power through as you wroked thorugh your story. However you so candidly try to palm of horrible things that make no logical sense in any universe in a non-ironic fashion that I simply cannot take it anymore.
I won't tell you to stop writing because I don't think anyone has the right to say that. However I will say that this story encompuses everything I hate about novice literature. Stories where everything is horrible can work, but it takes a sort of finess that you seem to be severly lacking in. Your a bull in a china shop with laser strapped to your horns and you don't care what anyone thinks. This might seem admirable, however it really isn't. Because just like the cliche of a bull in a china shop, your story is just as cliche; It's just that you've made everything racist and horrible. Two things that take away more than they add to a story unless handled with care.