Collective Mind cannot understand

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Description

What is a person? What is humannnes? Do elves have humannes? Or do they have elvinnes? And what is justice? Care? Love? I can't understand.

The story is about how the collective mind tries to understand people and other intelligent beings. But for some reason, sometimes he understands things in his own way.

AN: I will temporarily stop writing chapters. Be patient

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2021
Author
Shystrex

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Rating
3.9/ 5.0
Followers
48
Views
14,712

Chapters(31 total)

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  • WaxisfunRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    In general a pretty good story, however it feels like the author has a really good idea and is rushing to put as much of it on writing as possible without paying much attention to sentence structure or grammer. The dialogue format is especially confusing and at times it's difficult to determine who is speaking about whom. I got all the way to chapter 10 just on the merits of the story itself however as the MC develops more dialogue increases between the characters which frankly just becomes too painful to read. What's also difficult is that the story has a LOT of potential. I genuinely want to keep reading it however a good idea can only take you so far. I enjoy how the MC wants to understand the world around them but in order to convey the growth and make the reader understand and form a connection with the MC you need to be able to convey the concepts to the reader, especially in dialogue which I know is no easy feat. I would recommend that the author stop posting more chapters and go back and read the dialogue aloud.
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