CHŪNIBYOU: Another Chance in Another World

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Description

Marc Churchill has lost everything. His friends and family, his car and his job, even his life.

Reborn into a different world he has been given another chance, a world with a different common sense. It is a world that lacks the frustrations and disappointments of his old life and a world where he can leave behind every problem and start anew.

Trading a lousy call center job for a life adventuring in a new world sounds great at first, but getting by in a world full of magic, beasts, elves and mysterious Towers may require more than just an open mind.

[Winner in the November 2023 Royal Road Writathon challenge]

[Winner in the April 2024 Royal Road Writathon challenge

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Tokage Noshipo

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 276
Views: 199,354

Chapters(112 total)

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Community Reviews(9)

The Wild WitchRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The stats in this game really make sense and are a true part of the story. They are funny, too. The helplessless of MC (I keep giggling at the name) in the new world despite all the extra info from his tutor is relatable, and almost getting killed by small vermin is something every gamer can relate to. I mean, it has happened to each of us at least once in one game of the other right? Right..?
There are grammar errors and typos I didn't manage to mark and truly, they don't really matter. English is not the first language of the author, and I would not want to story to suffer because of them overthinking the grammar or spelling.
I'm at chapter 11 as I type this and will probably finish the story up to now by tomorrow.
DabossUnberogenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
An interesting Isekai adventure, full with all the classic tropes and the author's own takes on the genre. It follows Marc, a man who had lost everything, in the vein of many similar stories. That part was well written, I enjoyed how it progressed. As he explores his new world, he starts to recover his meaning. Now, onto the main review.
The style was quite well written, with standard divided paragraphs and dialogue. Some of the dialogue was strangely distributed, but in general it was comprehensible. I liked the way that it was written.
The story was as well written as could be expected, and it was quite enjoyable in general. I liked the worldbuilding and the way that its inhabitants interacted with the main character. All of the action scenes were well written, and the background and worldbuilding were clearly thought out. It suited the genre without being overly derivative.
The characters were fleshed out well, and I liked how realistic they were. The characters in the fantasy world were very well written, and the main character was deep as well. Quite a good job on this. Good characters are quite hard to write.
In general, a very interesting and entertaining read.
NostalgiaCaptainRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a story that warmed my heart, and the author has done in-depth thinking about the social environment and lifestyle. Mark's thoughts on the reality of life in the face of the new world also resonated with me: without magic, can life be lived in a different way?
The writing style is gentle and delicate, the layout of the article is also very attentive, and I feel the sincerity of the author.
PrinceOfEdenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Let's dive into the story first.
The story takes a bit to hit its stride, but once it does, it becomes an engaging journey that leaves you craving more. While it initially follows the expected Isekai adventure tropes, it impressively shifts gears to establish a palpable sense of danger and high stakes. This intriguing turn makes you eager to witness how the story will truly unfold.
Now, onto the characters.
I appreciate the portrayal of characters in the initial chapters. While the focus has been on a handful, particularly the main character Marc, it works well. Marc's relatability as a human who faced tough times resonates, and the other characters introduced so far are well-fleshed and credible in the context of their world and situations. (I'm really looking forward to the group dynamic of Grenn and Rynan.)
Let's talk about the style.
The detailed style, while commendable, occasionally seems to overshadow the core narrative. Marc's interactions with the INTERFACE, while intricate, can feel a bit overwhelming. To explain what I mean, imaginging listening to a song with lyrics that end halfway, but the music continues to play. However, it's apparent that the INTERFACE serves a crucial role beyond displaying information, so this reservation of mine will likely fade.
With a few grammatical and spacing errors aside, this story promises to be an interesting read.
SmirkyWRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style - The manority of the story is written in third person past tense. That said, every so often, a sentence will be written in the present tense, which can be a bit disconcerting. It doesn't make the story hard to read or understand though, so it's only a minor issue, and nothing huge.
Story - The author is great at using tropes which readers of the genre commonly enjoy, while avoiding the utterly dreadful ones. The vast majority of litrpgs (especially of the isekai variety) are very poorly written, and merely exist for the reader to get a boost of dopamine after seeing the MC's levels go up. And while that's not always a bad thing, it's terrible if it's the only focus. The author here introduces actual challenges. So while the sweet, sweet growth of levels can be expected, it won't come for free either. Love to see that!
Grammar - Few grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing major.
Characters - A huge problem in this genre are MCs that will commit seemingly suicidal acts just for the possible gain of a few levels. Marc here is at least more cautious of the dangers, especially after some of the events in the story, so full marks in that regard. I didn't really have any problems with any of the dialogue so far either. Nothing really felt cringy, or felt like something that no person would actually say. Well done!
Overall - While this fiction has a few minor errors in grammar, I don't think they're even close to big enough to deserve any stars deducted from the overall score. Looking forward to reading more of this in the future!
MattMcCormickRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The baby is fine by the way but in the scant moments when he stops snorting or crying I take respite in the amusing fictions of Royal Road and this tale by Toshinoko Noshabinko (close enough) has become one of those respitey amusements or would be if someone could stop pissing themself for five fucking seconds. As a respectable grown man and doting father I am definitely 100% fine with a story callings itself ‘CHŪNIBYOU’ lacking tits and guns. Fortunately there are both good world building and characters just in case some degenerate was hoping for an edgelord protag-kun surrounded by jiggling hangers on. The prose is also much best, English well good five star.
This is worth your time (unless you just want sociopaths with bows and arrows getting handed free shit by the universe) and it’s worth a re-read for me once baby brain wears off and I know what sleep feels like again… I may update the review in future just in case I was hallucinating any chapters.
HughgentRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I'm very interested in 'half' of this story.
I would argue that the 'first half' of this story is fairly standard other world isekai fare. This isn't what I consider the strong suit of the story, but it is necessary. The 'latter half' of the story however is fascinating!
I believe my enjoyment of the 'latter half' is because of 'grounding'. There are more elements that I can relate to, thus drawing me into the story more.
So while I can't care overly much for that 'first half' I am hooked for the 'latter half'.
RocksNPebblesRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The style is what let's this down for me. The MC is a bit slow and below normal intelligence. He constantly has his own inner anime weekly recaps and struggles to keep basic information in mind. In this way we are often rereading things. He explores his system and finds most of the features, then enters a mini tutorial where he has quests to...repeat his actions to go through each part of his interface.
This is all quite inefficient and I found myself skimming through both the long winded prose and the system prompts, which means skimming everything. Most chapters could be cut in half with editing and suffer no loss in content.
He has a gamelit system of quests and is given the full gamelit compliment of a minimap and inventory. Confusingly or needlessly he has both a game inventory and a spatial magic storage. We have a solid multi chapter long info dump and while he stupidly exposes himself and blurts out his secrets, his goddess clearly knew he was a moron and set him up in a place to be found by a powerful mentor to train him.
A very paint by numbers low agency existence for an MC riding along thick plot rails as nothing much happens and he has quests for every little thing. Even the MC notes these as controlling and frivolous. 4 stars is generous as I don't want to tank the ratings for a new author who has promise. More agency, don't show AND tell, only need to show or tell, and seek higher efficiency in word count vs content. A short walk in the woods and a single full conversation need not take 18 chapters.
His interaction with the goddess was also way way too long-winded and the skipped the key parts where she explained things to him! 3 plus chapters of him going wha wha what? Asking pointless plot irrelevant things was inefficient. And careful of pov shifts, they are random at times and drift between characters without warning within chapters.
Antyl3214Royal Road
★ 1.0
It was going so well, the background of how the protagonist was sent to another world is so good, but the author did the same as other authors, he gave the protagonist a momentary mental retardation so the story could continue.
Which, by the way, he did very poorly, the protagonist arrives in the new world and has an area with protections for him to prepare, and then you wonder if he prepared himself!? No, he thinks like an idiot "I have to get out of here at some point... so I'm going to leave now" he doesn't prepare himself, he doesn't try to understand what magic is like, he doesn't try to use it or show the cheats granted to him, and two seconds after leaving, he comes across one of those initial monsters from games and almost dies because he's an idiot.
I hate stories about protagonists without a brain... they just don't surpass stories with the protagonist who pretends to be a genius, but because of the author's lack of ability they make him the most idiotic of idiots.
Guys, it's not difficult, the reader doesn't want a genius protagonist, he just doesn't want to have to wait patiently for every clearly idiotic decision made by the protagonist, who only exists to move the story forward. I clarify that the protagonist can make bad and idiotic decisions, but the difficult part of describing this type of decision is writing in a way that makes the reader think: "if it were me, I would do the same idiotic thing" or "it could happen to anyone", I've never seen anyone manage to do that.