Chronicles of the Lightning Wizard

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Description

[Winner of the April 2024 Royal Road Writathon challenge]

Overpowered? Check!

Transmigrator? Check!

Golden Finger? Check!

No Harem? Check!

Low-Key MC? Check!

Looking for a story with those qualities? Well… you have come to the right place! You don’t have to worry, the MC is truly low-key. He isn’t going to look for trouble out of nowhere. If he is, he’s going to hide his identity well. He wants to be the [Hidden Boss] after all…

More serious synopsis:

Awakening as an apprentice wizard within the Lightning Magic Tower of an unfamiliar world, Zack, an ordinary introvert, confronts a daunting reality: estranged from his loved ones, he faces an uncertain future. Yet, fate has granted him a unique boon—the coveted "golden finger." Little does Zack realize, this gift is no mere trinket but a key to grasp “Infinity”. Embark on an epic adventure alongside Zack as he explores this mysterious realm, delves into the arcane arts, and unravels the secrets of his newfound abilities. But amidst the magic and danger lies… the possibility of unexpected romance. Prepare to be spellbound as Zack's journey unfolds—a tale brimming with intrigue, enchantment, and the promise of limitless potential.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: ImmortalThief

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Rating: 3.7/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(5)

readerWangRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Idk, I just like the tone of the narrator. it's a bit lacking in details at first but it slowly got better. It's better if you re-write the first chapter though. I haven't read the later chapters but hopefully it can maintain the quality. I just felt like the current rating is unjustified so I rate it as 5 my actual rating is 4.
BendisRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The great.
Writing/grammar - no complaints here, no major or minor issue to take me out of the story. Story structure is consistent, easy to read and follow.
World building - This can be a two sided coin. Only seven chapters in but it did enough to make the world distinct, while I enjoyed the rules of the tower and the magic build up with all the skills I can see how some might find it a bit too much.
Action - I like it when it's not overly descriptive with all the skills.
The Ok
Plot - It's just the beginning so hard to make a judgement as the first chapters was him finding his footing, but him finding contracts and roaming the world seems is a classic way to show the world and have some action.The action was just beginning in chapter 6 so could be better in the future.
Character - He is consistent sometimes funny, hard working, the only thing bothering me is him being a 10 year old. If he was like 15-16 you could glance over it but a 10 year old taking contracts and talking to others equal to equal even a little bit of flirting will get kinda weird. Usually there must be a reason for a choice like this that has such a great impact on the story so I hope I find a reasonable explanation in the next chapters.
Dialogue - Only in the last chapter there was dialogue so couldn't get a great feel for it, but it was ok.
The weird
This could be a very bad or a very good quality of the story but nothing in between. I'm talking about the 4th wall breaking, again such a story point with huge impact must have a very good reason that should somehow tie into the plot. Obviously this will become apparent as I read the story forward but If you do manage it congratulations as I could never write that very Vonnegut like.
4/5 stars I'll change it to 4.5/5 if later his low age has an actual impact on the plot.
CosmicSlimeRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This one was very different from the typical LitRPG story. It’s not particularly bad but I do think it’s kind of strange in a unique sorta way. The story hits the ground running and after only a few paragraphs, Zack is already adjusting to his new life in some mystical tower. That’s fine and all but it kinda feels a little rushed, granted, the chapters are a bit lengthy but it still feels like a lot of stuff gets packed into them.
The best example of this is the way time is portrayed in the story, it can feel like weeks are just flying by in a few short paragraphs, and then we just get a quick recap to skim over the details. Not sure if that was the intention, but even for a fast paced story, some amount of clarity can do a lot.
The grammar is good but a few sentences do kind of drag on a bit. No noticeable grammatical errors stuck out.
Aside from the pacing, the only thing I have a hard time wrapping my head around is the method of storytelling. Both the protagonist and the narrator are constantly breaking the 4th wall. It’s not inherently bad and can even come off as comedic, but it does take away from the immersion quite a bit.
Other than those two issues, it’s a pretty unique story given that both the system and magic of this world revolve around points. With a few adjustments it can go a long way.
Strictly WorseRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
A weak to strong magic progression story with a generally fun tone that still manages to feel like it has some genuine stakes when it counts. The writing definitely improves as the story progresses, though I think for me personally just having had a bit more time to understand the MC's personality and for him to gain a bit more agency also contributed to my growing enjoyment of the story. The story uses the idea of the MC being the hidden boss really well overall, with great tension between him wanting to gain strength but also not standout or become fully beholden to anyone.
If I was to make a minor criticism it would be that while that tension of the MC being pulled in different directions is generally interesting, it does make it a little harder to relate to the MC for me as he can jump from flashy and overt to secretive and back again quite quickly. This might just be a personal thing but it was slightly jarring occasionally as the two approaches are so different. I think he feels a little less to me like someone who has the priorities of a secretive hidden boss and more like someone who has always wanted to roleplay as a hidden boss and now has the tools to make that happen.
Overall if isekai or neat magic systems/cultivation is your thing give it a go and you'll likely have a good time and don't stress too much if you don't immediately gel with the MC, he's proactive enough that will probably grow with time.
Jared3Royal Road
★★ 2.0
The story starts off interesting with a good troupe. However from the forth chapter the writing style suddenly changes to third person and instead of showing us what's going on the author tells us in third person in past tense. The main issue with this is its written such it sounds like a child role playing a cringe gangster. It has ruined the story for me.