Chosen One Protective Services

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Chosen One Protective Services is a portal fantasy/gamelit story that takes a good, hard look at the various entities who decide that random children are chosen ones and kidnap them for their own purposes, and the shadowy government agency that struggles to stop this human trafficking...(COPS Emblem by Andrew Halbrooks. Support your artists!)

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Andrew Seiple

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
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MajorMathwinRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I came across C.O.P.S. a couple weeks ago read the first few chapters and blitzed through to the newest release Chapter 12 the last two days.
All in all a most pleasant reading experience.
Beginning with style: This takes place in two different worlds, rural Texas sometimes after the Korean War and a planet filled with all sorts of wizards, elves and other fantastical creatures. Out of these two places Texas is the one that really threw me for a loop. It feels like a place ripped out of time. The author ability to convey how his two different POV's think and perceive the world around them is astounding. I wouldnt call the prose either workmanslike or poetic but simply natural with a good bit of sly foreshadowing mixed inbetween. Descriptions are detailed and trivialize visualization.
Story: This is told from two POVs, Rusty and Cyrus Colfax, two of the many children of the quite troubled and down on their luck Colfax family. Rusty gets whisked away to a magical world by a highly suspect wizard and has to survive there. Cyrus the older of the two remains in Texas where he tries to get his brother back, something not made easier by his injuries from the war, his disfunctional family or his lack of funds. I often found myself dreading a POV switch because I always got attached to the present story line, but that wasnt a real issue as both POVs were equally gripping.
Grammar: I didn't find any glaring errors but I'm also native speaker so take that with a grain of salt.
Finally the characters:
The two POV's are the obviously the strongest of the characters:
Young, but hardworking and dedicated Rusty and crippled but determined and resourceful Cyrus. They both are quite deep characters believable and yet interesting, even inspiring in parts.
As for the side characters there is not much to say yet. Most have only played relatively minor roles until now but even still they appear to have minds, motivations and dreams of their own. More than enough for a start.
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KaamosRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This one is pretty good. The chosen one main character is believable if a bit too mature for his age. There is a reasonable amount of character growth and the story is fascinating.
You can skip the earth arc safely if you want to read the fantasy part of the book.
Fred FredsonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It begins with the story of Rusty, a young, naive and hardworking boy from a dysfunctional texan family that loves to delve deep into fantasy worlds with his war crippled brother Cyrus.
When finally the chance came and a wizard appeared before him, he couldn't be happier and instantly accepted to offer to be isekai'ed. But instead of being transported into a gigantic palace where he would be hailed as the coming of the new hero, he is transported into a filthy swamp, attack by frog monsters and manipulated by that wizard to delve the dungeon for the good of humanity.
But this was no grand adventure. This wasn't dragons and dwarves and riddles and wonder. This was just him, in a muddy cave, trying not to die a horrible traumatizing death in a place where his mom wouldn't know he was dead.
So what will he do to survive and what will his brother Cyrus do to safe his little brother from even more predation? Read this story and find out.
RedPineRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Based on the first chapter, Andrew Seiple is still writing strong. Personable characters, good prose, and a darkish world approached in an optimistic fashion.
Based on the premise in the intro, we can expect more of the sorts of things Andrew writes well: turning alien worlds familar, turning familiar tropes alien, and presenting genuinely difficult ethical dilemnas without losing sight of the difference between good and evil.
ICountFrom0Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I was prepared for:
A peek at the seedy underbelly of a normal fantasy trope.
I was not prepared for:
Views of the homelife in tatters.
A detailed magic system I'd never seen before.
Layered plot with so many chosen, who feel real.
Magic with consequences. Characters with choices. Views of people that feel real. I took a break so that the chapters could build up ahead of me, because I kept feeling upset every time I hit the end. Sometimes a story is just that good. It feels strange to be enjoying a story that's this grim, and to be happy each time something goes horribly wrong, but sometimes that's the fate of the chosen one. Somebody should really do something about that...
Mike KurzRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The plot is fun and interesting.
The characters are well designed have both depth and growth.
The writing is clever and delightful. The author manages a rare feat of both including America's shameful history and not making it painful to read.
It'd be 5 stars if not for two personal pet peeves
1. The text is justified which breaks the easy flow of reading.
2. The author makes use of the literary thing where a character does something in the story and narrator says "He will later regret doing that" or "He will be very glad he did" -
Both drive me crazy and almost made me drop the story multiple times.
lobabobRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Pros:
Writing quality is excellent as always with this author, and the story and characters are interesting.
The younger brother's story is a lot of fun and very exciting. Full of magic, adventure, mystery, and danger.
Cons:
The older brother's story is boring. It's even more boring when we're forced to compare it to the younger brother's story, as we're forced to when our perspective keeps switching between them.
Every time we swap to the older brother's story I have to resign myself to a boring slog until we can get to the actual story I was promised in the synopsis.
I'd recommend heavily reducing the older brother chapters, or increasing the pacing of his chapters so that something meaningful actually happens in his parts of the story.