Chasm Spells

Information

Status

Completed

Year

2019

Author

Sun Kitten

• Chasm Spells
  Oct 6, 2019

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• RznRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Danie is an interesting protagonist in a setting that is described just enough to be intriguing, but the back and forth between a reluctant Master who will not even take her on as an apprentice form what little of the conflict that there is. Not a whole lot happens in this short story, but it does show Danie is at least capable and can understand when not to burn bridges. Ultimately it was a fun if short read with a good chunk of delving, but the delving itself did not hold any captivating moments.
• TealiciousTeaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Another enjoyable short short story.
  A descriptive style that fleshes out the setting. I do feel the the weight of the description slows the pacing down a little towards the middle where the main is going through the motions till she learns what she needs to know to overcome her obstacles imposed by social conventions.
  The story is interesting and the main is a compelling enough charcater that I care what happens to her. The emotional investment carried me through an otherwise undramatic story. Their is no tension beyond the personal drama of the main and I feel this somewhat stalls the plot as it tries to connect from the intially raised interpersonals issues to the statsifying conclusion. And the conclusion is good. I am sad this is a finished story and I don't get to read more.
  I did not pay attention too much attention to proper grammar. I did notice a double negative that was irratating. Paragraph spacing was also abit inconsisent. No major issues as the story was readable and flowed well.
  I have already mentioned above that the main character was interesting. She is the highlight of the story. Sadly I feel she was underutilised by the plot. The plot is sufficent but drags slightly too long to hit smoothly hit the beats or conversly is to short and lacking drama or compelling mystery. The teacher was relatively engaging and any other character does not have a signifcant enough presence to do much more than assist world-building and moves the plot.
  The world-building was fascinating. The potential for a complex and nuanced culture exists and is partially developed. The short span of the story stalls further grow. However the brief engagement is pleasant and tickles at a sense of wonder. I think the story could have done with a scence that conveyed the scale and cultural depth of the chasm in comparison to the city. There are links but that wow moment was not quite reached.
  In conclusion, this was another good short story. A compelling main character and a satisf