Chaotic School

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Status

Hiatus

Author

Maiseluu

Reviews

Community Reviews(4)

• PizzaPizzaRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Ok, so, I may be totally off base with this, but the story looks like an absurdist piece, and I'm all for it.
  You know how kids sometimes give you off the rails never-ending-story sequences of "But then blair went WOOSH?"
  It's like that in high school, plus a lot more looney tunes and spongebob. The casts randomly have magic powers, but it's established that do, and weird stuff happens. And they react.
  The End. Until the next chapter, where it gets more Captain Underpants than it did before.
• BellaArtzRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I really don't know how to put my feelings for this story in words but let me just say, I love the vibes I get from it. It's not trying to hard and I can tell that the author put a lot of love and enthusiasm into it.
  I love the premise and how vocal the the actions from the characters are. Their antics are laughable and each one the characters has a uniqueness to them. Everything is described well but there's room for improvement in the areas of grammar and style.
  I genuinely find the story interesting and can't wait to see how far the characters develope and figure out things together.
  I greatly enjoyed how easy it was for me to get into it and I'm happy I didn't have to grind my teeth as I read. The pacing is a bit fast but it suits the narrative well. It's fresh and has its own intensity that I admire.
  Keep up the good work!
• Paul James KeyesRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I am leaving this review in the spirit of which the story was intended. What’s nice about it is the story doesn’t take itself too seriously… or seriously at all! It feels like a fever dream of sorts with the quickest pace of any story I have read on royal road to date. This is good, because the worst thing a comedy like this can do is linger for too-long on a joke that might not hit for everyone. The pace stopped me from growing bored and propelled me into the story like an over-sized slingshot. What I’m trying to say is the humor is slapstick and it’s silly start to finish!
  You really have to go into this judging it for what it is. This isn’t trying to win any literary awards, and the prose are rough, but its funny and unpredictable and pretty easy to read.
  There are some grammatical issues, but I sped through them witlessly especially as the author turns the direction of the narrative on a dime. The characters are silly, matching the style and story elements. If you enjoy this type of humor it’s a fun read. Dive on in and judge for yourself!
• RJWRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  This story is clearly written with a lot of love and excitement but often it feels like all that's happening is this wacky event and then this wacky event.
  Admittedly this isn't my usual type of story I read but I thought I'd give it a go and I've read the three first chapters which are currently out. The story does have a charm to it and I feel like there's some really good potential here.
  I think the characterisation for the main character is somewhat there but I can't help but feel like the world for all of its slapstick kind of comedy ( I think) can't make up for me ultimately not really knowing too much about the main character and her motivations as well as the other characters. They feel kind of flat. If this has been mentioned clearly maybe just the constant speed of the story is kind of jarring.
  I think maybe the author is trying to imitate the kind of comedy you can see in anime but I could be wrong. Either way this is a good first attempt at taking on a type of story that can be quite difficult to get right.
  Some suggestions could be, remember to show not tell, a lot of places in the work it felt like you could show more rather then telling me this happened then this happened. Also, although the pace needs to be kept to keep the comedy moving also remember to contextualise and create a background for the story beyond just the school. Furthermore, It's all well and good everything is wacky but is everyone just kind of crazy why are they so not bothered about their situation.
  Maybe try and study works of other comedy writers, have you read hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy?Or maybe you could study how one piece adds it's comedy in? For example there's exposition in the beginning explaining the crazy fruits that gives Luffy his power and then he does do the slapstick comedy stuff of woah I'm inhumanely flexible/stretchy and can slingshot my way anywhere basically? Perhaps thats not the kind of comedy you're trying to do but maybe you could even try to analyse