Champions Arena:Jace The Plague-Bearer (A Disease Fantasy LitRPG)

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Description

The earth will be invaded in a year by monsters from another world. Jace, a child blessedwith a system bythe god of abnormalitieswhose power is disease, curses, and hexes, is tasked with surviving this new age.Jace however isn’t alone and is only one of many gifted with these new powers. When the invaders arrive, does Jace have what it takes to not only survive but prevail in this new age of earth?

(Please note-The first few chapters are shorter in length, but get progressively longer the further you go.)

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: ash-saltzman

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 33
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Community Reviews(5)

OnicRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Story. This story reminds me of my anime days, and I really enjoy reading it. It has such a goofy and silly feel to it that it's difficult not to be entertained. This story matched a preference I had forgotten I had. Jace going about his life, experimenting with his disease skills on anything he can get his hands on as he prepares for the upcoming battle is a joy to journey with— and the best parts of the story are yet to come!
Style. The style is straightforward and consistent. The pacing is appropriate and easy to follow.
Grammar. I'm not the best judge of grammar, but as long as I can read the story smoothly and understand the message, it's fine by me.
Character. To put it simply, Jace is likable. He is entertaining to watch because of his humorous personality, but he is complex enough to have dimensions. The other characters have yet to be explored, but I'm sure only time will tell when they will.
Overall. This story is entertaining, well-written, and LitRPG—we all know how much people on this website enjoy this genre. Furthermore, a plague bearer is an intriguing concept to read about. Don't you want to weaponize disease and sickness to fight people? This is an excellent story! Check it out!
C.T. YarrowRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The author clearly has an vivid and compelling vision of the story and they're telling that story with a great deal of enthusiasm. Enthusiasm counts for a lot when you're telling a story on an epic scale. The author has set themself a task that requires a great deal of stamina, begining the story with a year to go until the looming disaster.
The author seems young and inexperienced and that inexperience shows itself with somewhat inconsistant tenses. The work would be better if the author could pick a tense and stick with it but it's not a fatal flaw because it doesn't obscure the story. The speed with which they're writing can also lead to slightly flat dialogue and the author does sometimes tell when they could show.
However, much like their central character, the author is leveling up through practice. In just the first 12 chapters they've grown in competence and confidence. The sentence structure is clearer and the language less hesitant.
This fiction is worth following because both the story and the author are going to some interesting places. I can't wait to find out how Jace masters his disease powers and what he choses to do with them.
Eric VanderlipRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Champions Arena:Jace The Plague-Bearer is the story of a boy named Jace who gets given power to repell a coming demonic invasion.
Style: A consistent perspective and smooth writing. The pace is solid if a little verbose.
Story: The strongest aspect. Obviously great care has gone into crafting the world and the litrpg system. There's one issue though: too much information.
When world building, it's great to map out every little step about what happens, so you really know what is going on. When writing, you want to convey the general idea of what is happening without unneccessary details. The extra stuff you leave out can be answers in the comments for those who want more, but shouldn't weight down the story itself. For example, describing every time Jace eats dinner, takes a shower, collects mana, goes to school, and comes home is unecessary. Instead, skips steps with something like "the next day, he..."
Grammar: Perfectly readable but there are some issues with commas, periods, and run on sentences.
Character: The early chapters are more action/event focused, which is fine. Jace makes a fine proactive protagonist. The rest of the cast is the shadowy villain and charlie from DSC, whom we only glimpses of, so there's not much to say.
Conclusion: I recommend Champions Arena:Jace The Plague-Bearer because the litrpg system is well-designed and exciting. This is a story where enjoy watching the protagonist get stronger and overcome obstacles. It's a fun read.
drewhead118Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall, this story feels ambitious and enjoyably large in scale. Some of the systems are distinctive and unique enough to be memorable. I've had fun with the portions I've read! That being said, the writing itself is more than a little rough around the edges, which can have the unfortunate effect of dimming the polish of the rest of the story. I'd recommend that any fans of the LitRPG genre give this story a look, but the grammarians may want to take a step back and wait for the story to be given a once-over with a spell checker.
Style score: The tenses are inconsistent in the first few chapters, but things eventually settle on a present-tense narrative that is kept moving with good momentum. Thoughts and system notifications occasionally blend in with narration, but the design of the system is creative enough to help the reader overlook much.
Grammar score: the weakest rating from me for this story. I get the impression that the author is likely no older than our MC, Jace, and it's totally fine to still be learning the basics! That being said, I think it's also clear that the author never used any spell-checking or grammar-checking software, which is really a good habit to get into before posting things for the public to read. If you don't have a Microsoft Word subscription, even the free-to-use Google Docs has some pretty intelligent error checking, and a quick pass-through making the corrections it recommends would do a lot to alleviate any writing friction.
Story score: The system at the heart of this story is distinctive and unique. The MC is set to be on a satisfying journey of power growth, and though the antagonists have had little development, they're used effectively to occasionally remind the reader that there's danger afoot.
Character score: Jace himself is at least likeable and a good protagonist for the reader to experience the story through. There haven't been many other characters featured in the story yet, but a few figures show promise as minor an
OVDCRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
For style, the problem is that the style of writing is bad. In particular, odd use of quoting a quote and bar codes makes it a difficut style to read. To add to that, blue boxes (which aren't blue here) are very hard to read, because line spacing isn't used where it should be. However, if you're used to reading elementary schoolkid's work, it's fine. 3/5.
The grammar is not good. Some of the problems are missing spaces, misspelled words, and bad punctuation. Quotation marks are often missused. It comes off like the way a fourth-grader uses grammar. Trying, but just not fluent. The main problem is the quotes and then punctuaion. Other than that it's mostly fine, although there are spelling errors. 2/5.
The story is where this excells. The premise is very intresting. Someone getting powers pre system apocalypse? An intresting take on the genre. Basically, it's system apocalypse where the MC gets powers a year before the apocalypse.
The character doesn't seem poorly built, but the personality could use some more fleshing out. This could also be a byproduct of the bad grammar, as it makes it harder to understand the character. The character being likeable definietly helps, and I can see a miniscule chance of this happening in this setting. 4/5.
So, overall, it has one of the best premises I've ever seen, but the problem is that the execution of the premise could use a lot of improvement. Overall, escpecially with the extremely short chapter lengths, it seems like a pre-teen wrote it. To get the score, 3+2+5+4=14. 14/4=3.5. So 3.5 overall score. I don't mean to come off as harsh, but I get that in an unbiased way: means.