Calamity Amnesiac

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Description

Most of Luna's memories were formed in the army. Conscripted at a young age, she quickly grew accustomed to killing. And just when the final battle was being fought, she died. Luckily, that wouldn't be the end of Luna's story. An achievement she was granted would kick in and grant her a second chance at life, but without any of her memories. 100 years later, Luna finds herself in a confusing situation, and must now figure out who she was, and who she will become.

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[participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge]

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: SmirkyW

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Rating: 4.8/ 5.0
Followers: 57
Views: 10,235

Chapters(17 total)

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Community Reviews(9)

Andrew K.Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style:
The story is easy and enjoyable to read. SmirkyW uses a wide vocabulary, avoiding repetition of the same words and phrases. The sentences are well constructed and clear.
The only thing that caused me problems was the transition from third-person narration used in the first chapter to third-person narration in later chapters. And I have to say that first-person narration is not very close to me. But then I realized that this is a kind of stylistic move, separating the character's life before and after.
Story:
Within the first five chapters, we are thrust headfirst into Luna's homeworld. After reading the first chapter, I wanted to know more about what was going on, the war, the opposing sides, and the magic of this world. But the main plot develops much later and is more focused on revealing the System, Skills and Magic, in one form or another. It's all presented in a compelling and measured way. The heroine gradually gets information from those around her or her own flashbacks, which I don't question either. Recall the title of the piece. Amnesia is an important part of the narrative here and a great tool in the author's hands.
Grammar:
I didn't notice any problems with grammar. The text is pleasant to read, I didn't notice any problems with punctuation or typos.
Character:
The main character is sympathetic, partly because of her unenviable fate of becoming a recruit at such a young age. On the other hand due to her rational behavior and sensible view of what is going on. The cruel world gives no one a break and the heroine has to fight for survival with all her might. I like it.
Summary:
The plot and world pulled me in with ease. The character evokes sincere sympathy. The LitRPG elements are not annoying and are presented neatly, while being quite detailed. The world is quite harsh and shows us the unseemly side of life during the war, this may not suit everyone.
In the end we have a great story with a strong female protagonist.
Pablo_BruinRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
When I began to read Calamity Amnesiac, my first impression was that it was using LitRPG to it's strengths. We get a little taste of the prose with the main character and then the author, SmirkyW, allows the system to speak for itself by showing us the character's sheet and skills.
A high level? A set of skills that imply a sense of lethality? All of this apparently incongruent with the MC's age? It's a remarkably visual form of storytelling I don't see exploited very often in our corner of the internet. I'm happy to say that this is a recurring theme in the early goings of the story as well.
As the circumstances in Chapter 1 convey us into the inciting incident that kicks off the aformentioned 'Second Chance', the LitRPG elements mix with the prose in a manner that is seamless yet unmistakably feel appropriate for the genre. Too often these days, many Progression Fantasies with systems built into them feel as if the game mechanics are there one minute and then gone the next. In Calamity Amnesiac, quite literally, these elements are the very identity of the MC as they awaken beyond the battlefield in a more quieter environment. And that's where this becomes a tad challenging to detail...
While I won't get into specifics, that quiet does not last for long...
It's hard to get into deeper detail than that without spoiling anything, but I can confirm that the pacing is quick and the flow of the prose is excellent. This is quite bingeable and I'm rather impressed that this is actually a contributor to the Writathon because the whole escalation of stakes and stats feels very cohesive and executed with intention. I had to reread the synopsis because some of the setbacks actually seem like they would be adequate as the main inciting incident. As a character-driven narrative, this is already quite the rollercoaster.
I will reiterate with a heavy dose of caution that this story is quite perilous. The MC, Luna, is often put into scenarios that appear unwinnable and they don't
TheNoatRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Im not usually one to leave a review but figured why not lmao. I only even got an account recently to start keeping track of all the stories I read on here XD.
Anyway I like to look through newer fictions to see if there are any I should keep my eye on and this is surprisingly good for something just starting off. Some of my favorites started off worse than this lel. Maybe the concept of the story itself is right up my alley thoug. Will definitely be keeping my eye on it anyway. Don't disappoint me lol
Tokage NoshipoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Calamity Amnesiac has been a very enjoyable story to dive into. The tale of an amnesiac soldier, reborn and placed in a very different environment, This is a great pick for readers looking for character driven stories, system fans, milsim, litRPG, and rebirth/resurrection themes.
Story
The pacing is very good, with flashbacks breaking up the scenes. The reader is constantly teased with external information, while also being rewarded with small tidbits of background.
Style
System type stories are difficult to balance data with substance. Author does a good job of providing context with easy to understand progression.
Character
What can be said of a blank slate character? At this point in the story, there is not much to her, which is what is expected in this type of a book. She is sympathetic because she is damaged, but also because it is easy to relate to someone without a strong personality. The joy is in the development yet to come.
Grammar
Easy to read and easy to follow. No glaring typos or problems to break the illusion. Great job and I look forward to new chapters!
Submitting a book during writathon is tough, I should know. But it is also a great place to find hidden gems. I hope readers will give a chance to many of the great new stories available during this time.
I hope the Author will be able to keep up the quality and direct this story for many chapters to come.
DedlineRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It has been a long time since I read something I really enjoyed from a review swap. Not gonna lie, I don't like most LitRPG fics (personal reason, don't ask) and although I enjoy reading all fantasies, some of them were not fictions I would proactively seek on RR. But this time, the experience is truly worth it.
This narrative has been quite captivating from the start! The initial chapter immediately grabbed my attention, and didn't let go. The author skillfully painted a vivid backdrop, immersing me in the story.
Style: The writing style is very pleasant, and to my opinion, the strongest aspect of the novel. I have read "The Archer's Tale" of Bernard Cornwell and "Primal Hunter" of Zorgart, and this felt like a perfect blending of both. The flow was easy to follow. The fantasy aspect and medieval theme was utilized, the concept of LitRPG wasn't overused. And I like how the author laid out everything for us so naturally. Like, he put the right explanation right at the moment I want to see it.
Grammar: Flawless execution. No mistake found.
Story: The plotline is refreshingly distinctive. While the sudden shift in gears after the first chapter initially caught me off guard, the answer came in later smoothly . Crafting a compelling memory loss tale is challenging, but the execution here seems commendable. Although,
World building: Great. Clear. The author could even add the @Military and Army" to this novel and still excel. And have I said I love power system in this? Stats make sense, skills make sense, and leveling up feel earned in this system.
Character: The choice of incorporating memory loss, while well-executed, left me yearning for more glimpses of the protagonist's original personality. I'm eager to witness the gradual return of memories and may reconsider my assessment as the narrative unfolds.
Overall, I wholeheartedly recommend delving into this story. Rising Stars stuff, no doubt.
L.K. WinturRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
As the title suggests this is my first LitRPG, a genre I've skimmed through on here and haven't had any that I liked enough to keep reading, but this one was different.
I'll admit, this is part of a review swap, but I will definitely continue reading it as I'm already attached the Luna.
The world the author has created is so vibrant and well thought out. The skill system is really interesting and already there's a ton of motivation going for the lead character. I can relate and root for her already and that's rare so soon into a novel.
The first 5 chapters, while heavy in exposition, actually don't feel burdensome. The information and the way the system is explained fits so well into the narrative it's as fun to read and think about as the story.
Synopsis:
Luna, the main character is conscripted into the army at such a young age, one can't help but feel sorry for her. She survives long enough to become fairly strong, but as my hero Obi Wan said, "there's always a bigger fish." When her army invades a massive city she is killed by a high level mystery man and is resurrected years later, soon to be found by a lovely old couple on a farm. This opportunity is so exciting and it makes a great start to the story where the possibilities are endless. Unfortunately, once again, she is conscripted into the army and her caretakers meet a terrible fate. Now we follow Luna as she's once again thrust into war against her will. Will she escape? Will she follow the same path as before? I'm going to keep reading to find out!
Not to be lazy, but for the first time on this website I'm giving this story 5 stars in every category. Yes, it's that good.
The style is easy to follow and switches between perspectives and flashbacks flawlessly.
The story is intriguing, immediately gripping, and even humorous.
There were no grammar or spelling issues I could find.
As for character, Luna and her new family are amazing, and the villains even if only briefly shown so far, are easy to hate and als
VioletMoonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I'm really enjoying this story so far! The first chapter hooked me, big time. I thought the author did an excellent job in describing an epic setting and carried it out well to enrapture the reader.
Style: I thought this was a really nice style. The prose flows smoothly and it's easy on the eyes, without blocks of text that are hard to read through. I did find the early introduction of the blocks of skills a bit much so early. I think it could be helpful to introduce all of the skills a bit more slowly, it was kind of overwhelming.
Grammar: I didn't notice a single error. Nicely done!
Story: I thought that the plotline was really unique! I'll admit, I was invested in the first chapter so when it abruptly shifted gears it threw me off a bit, but it was a good twist. It's hard to do a good memory loss story, but it seemed like you did a really good job with it from what I saw!
Character: I only dropped this one because I personally wasn't a huge fan of the memory loss. I wanted to see more of her original personality! I'm curious to see how the memories come back later. I might reevaluate my rating as the story progresses.
Overall, easy recommendation to read this story. It's a polished work that draws the reader in. Oh, and I love the cover!
Ink & TomeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Disclaimer: This review is being written after completing Chapter 6 and as such only pertains to the chapters leading to that point. Do with that as you will.
As a fan of LitRPG in general who is mostly aware of the major hits in the genre, I went into this really hoping to find something unique to differentiate it from the rest. I was not disappointed.
I'll get into more detail in a moment, but I just really enjoy Luna and the whole mystery second chance at life with missing memories and wanted to say that this is absolutely the pivotal, driving force of this story.
Style: So, I want to say that I think one of your greatest strengths is your writing style. It's engaging and gets straight to the action, which helps grasp and keep my attention. It's also supremely easy to read and doesn't bog me down with over-the-top prose.
If I had one thing to be picky about, it's that sometimes it feels like we're always rushing from one event to another without the chance to breathe - although to be fair, this is only up to where I paused to write this review, after finishing Chapter 6. Since this appears to be a fairly action-packed fiction, making sure you set that up in the beginning stages makes complete sense. It was just the slightest bit jarring for me as I read, and I split the "detraction" between Style and Story here because it sort of applies to both.
Story: Like I mentioned before diving into the details of my review, the author really brings a unique perspective to the LitRPG genre via a protagonist whose memories are wiped away by a quirk of the System as she's brought back to life, and yet whose memory loss plays a pivotal role not only in her new Class, but also with her growth in general. I've never seen someone literally get stronger from remembering things, and it's an incredibly memorable direction to take. (Yes, I'm aware of the irony in my choice of descriptor here.)
I won't drone on again about the pacing, as I already talked about it in Style and mentione
Bjorn56Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I'm going to preface this by saying I'm not really the biggest fan of lit RPGs, so I won't let my personal bias get in the way of the review. Just know that I'm not really the target audience for this. I'm going to divide this into sections because that's how I like to review things lol
Style
The style is good. Very competent and even has some excellent moments of really cool descriptors. The author is very good at describing action when it does occur in the story. The Litrpg menu stuff is implemented in a way that doesn't distract from the overall story, which has a lit RPG hater, was a pleasant surprise.
Story
I really like the main character in the first chapter, where she's like a callus soldier. I found that stuff to be really interesting, and I felt it was a downgrade when she lost her memories. The story just sort of lost some of the intrigue for me, which seems to be sort of fixing itself in the last chapter I read. It's not necessarily bad, just not as interesting as what it started, in my opinion. I think this is in large part because of the bizarre relationship she develops with some characters quickly after. I feel like the relationship between the MC and her basically "adoptive" parents, who find her after she loses her memories, moves way too quickly. It almost immediately took me out of the story the way they were treating each other like they had known each other for years. It felt very unrealistic to me and sort of broke my suspension of disbelief. You may want to consider reworking some of that dialogue so that they're less familiar with each other so quickly. I was almost wondering if they were secretly bad guys manipulating the girl with no memories by pretending to care for her the whole time. Something like Mysterio and Spider-Man. Having read more, I don't think this is what you were trying to get across. I think one of the main issues could be that a lot of their dialogue is exposition. But exposition is necessary, especially considering the