Blade of Chaos

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Status

Hiatus

Author

AceXD

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• FennRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I’ll go for constructive criticism in this review. PM me if you want me to point things out specifically, or if you have questions and stuff. I’ve only read up to chapter 5.1 and I'll update this as I continue reading.
  Style
  The spacing isn’t that bad.
  As a whole, your chapters look fine.
  You make really funny and nice scenes.
  The spacing might not be bad, but some parts are still fixable. Generally, having four or more sentences make a paragraph a bother to read. Try to tone down those big paragraphs, and beef up the small one liners. Though if the one liner is there to promote humor, please do keep it. I like those.
  Please fix your small mistakes concerning the style. Things like ‘soundless communication,’ “sound,” and thoughts. I found a couple with the ‘ and the ” and since you use them a lot, those small mistakes can cause a lot of confusion for the readers.
  Grammar
  Your grammar and word choices are fine most of the time. Most of the time.
  You use interesting words every now and then, but nothing too hard.
  That most of the time shouldn’t be like that. Things like grammar, spelling, all of those little things, they should perfectly done. You should have read your work over and over again, and eventually gotten rid of all of those.