Black Heaven Ascension

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2020

Author

Hego

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Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• VMJaskierniaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  It's not a bad story. It's written very simply, there's little desciption, and the grammar is off. But if you put that aside and just want to read a quick action story that reminds you of anime like Dragonball Z or Naruto, it's nice.
• TwelveGreatApesRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Style
  The story is written simply, but often quite snappily, frequentally moving quite quickly from one scene to another. This does keep you interested and invested in the story, at the cost of a little development. The fight scenes are also exciting and easy to follow.
  Story
  Writing at the end of act 1 the story is shaping up quite well, and is equally interesting and imaginative. While dealing with definite high-fantasy concepts the setting still feels grounded and consistent with itself, which is always a good thing.
  Grammar
  This is the biggest issue with this fiction currently, something already acknowledged by the author. Whilst certainly not the worst I've come across, there are a few things that really let it down and at times make it a real struggle to get through. The main ones are:
  -Proper speech formatting: Whenever a new character begins speaking, there needs to be a paragraph break. Without the proper breaks, it's really difficult for a first time reader to work out who is currently talking. This is the most important thing that needs to be changed, and fortunately its not a hard fix. Just requires a scan of the work and a lot of hitting the enter key.
  -Inner thoughts: Currently these are presented in speech bubbles, which makes it a real challenge to work out whether the main character is currently speaking or simply thinking out a problem and tends to draw the reader out of the text. These should ideally be changed to a different tense, Eg: 'the opponent looked tough,' rather than ' "This opponent looks tough" '. At the very least, the inner thoughts should be changed to a single ' , rather than a double ", in order to differentiate them from speech.
  Character
  The characters are well drawn and the interactions believable. I particularly found the main character quite unique and often amusing - it's actually great fun seeing such an outwardly rude and acerbic character negotiate his way through the unfolding events!
  In conclusion this story has a lot o
• ZZZXRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Introduction:
  Black heaven ascension is a story written by Hego, as you start reading, you get hit with a small problem, this is a very difficult story to read. Mind you, I do not mean in terms of pure vocabulary and style choices, which are another seperate issue but not as critical, but instead because of the total lack of editing.
  However, if you manage to break through the barriers that stop you from reading this story, you will find a story that could be interesting and fun to read.
  Grammar (1.5/5):
  So, let's get the elephant out of the way first, grammar and editing here are... bad. Some of the most major issues include:
  1- Very high number of general grammar mistakes, missing commas and full stops which can get weird sentences that will confuse you until you figure out which sentence ends where.
  2- Insanely inconsistent spacing and writing system, many sentences have too many or too few spaces in areas, one of the most often issues are the presence of quotations with writing before and after stuck to it like this:
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  clan needed"Enough distractions,
  and commented"I never imagined
  got splattered"Sorry" elder
  3- Typos are very very common, some of them are more confusing especially with this form which ends up more wrong than right eyes vs eye's)
  4- Tenses are very inconsistent, normally is written in past, but happens enough to be written in the present tense to be jarring.
  I originally planned to give grammar just a half star, however, it has been improving through the last few chapters which is a good sign.
  Conclusion: Grammar/editing in the story needs work, in fact it is the crippling point of the story. I recommend both looking at how better-rewritten stories have their grammar, and then editing the story and making sure to make it much easier to read and approach.
  Style (2/5):
  The style of the story is not horrible. However, its harder for me to judge it purely because the style is lost through the grammar. It feels like a similar style in