Between The Senses [Medieval Spy Fantasy]
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Description
A highly secretive spy organization has been tracking down the movements of a devil. Just as they were gaining ground their spymaster Samuel was killed and the devil has increased their activities, threatening to take down their country Threinas.
Peter the brother of Samuel has taken up the mantle of Spymaster and his success dictates the fate of his country. The newly titled spymaster recruits a vigilante known as the Adjudicator, knowing that he needs the strength no matter where it comes from.
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My self rule on this story is it will end. It will not take hundreds of chapters (in fact due to my estimation it won't even reach 100 chapters).Though, there is a case for me to end it prematurely and the condition is if my story isn't profitable enough. That is a case for me to move on and start a new one. It will be hard for my supporters for that story and for me as well as I have a vested interested in these worlds I created, but I have a life to sustain and a family to support. I hope you understand my sentiment. Thank you.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- C.Z. Adams
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- Rating
- 3.5/ 5.0
- Followers
- 1
- Views
- 1,191
Chapters(6 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- M.J. MarkgrafRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5I’m not sure 4 chapters were enough to get a good feel for this story, but I was asked to review and I shall oblige.
I don’t think I have ever read a spy story before and I’m not sure this quite counts as one yet. From what I have read so far it is more action and adventure than espionage and intrigue. It’s possible this may change in later chapters.
The writing is decent and the story and magic aren’t anything I have read before which is interesting.
These interesting aspects are ruined by the grammatical issues though.
My suggestion to the author is to use something like Grammarly to check for issues. While not perfect it will help quite a bit. As an example, I copied the first chapter into Grammarly and found 89 issues. Not all of these are actual issues but a vast majority of them are. Fixing these will help the story flow better.
Another issue I see is the switching of perspective from character to character. It’s extremely jarring unless it's denoted by a line, which some are, but not all. I would also recommend avoiding it altogether in a scene. Whatever perspective you start that scene in, stick with it.
The character interactions and responses seemed ok from what little there is in the first four chapters. Its hard to tell who the MC is as each chapter seems to be from another person's perspective. Again, this could be due to not having enough chapters to see the full picture.