Beta World
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
My name is Arnold Freimann, or at least that's what I want to believe. Apparently this goddess reincarnated me into her so-called beta world. Honestly I really don't know what to do here other than collect these 16 Luna Rocks that her friend left behind. Aside from this body, things should just be easy right?
...Right?
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2019
- Author
- Fayare
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.6/ 5.0
- Followers
- 33
- Views
- 6,827
Chapters(6 total)
Reviews
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Community Reviews(1)
- AniRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0Ani's Glance Review for 'Beta World':
Style and Grammar:
Style felt like a hybrid between first and third person. Can't say I'm a professional on first-person writing, but as I said, it feels... wrong.
Grammar is decent. I say it's around the high-end of the average here in RR. It isn't terrible, nor is it perfect.
Of course, these two can always be improved. I heard that this story is going to be rewritten. With some polish here and there, this will certainly turn out amazing.
Story and Character:
Okay... that was really fast. I usually complain about stories having slow and boring prologues, but this one turned out, uh... too fast.
Spoiler:
There was an info dump on the first paragraph, then a war, then MC died... and met the goddess and got reincarnated to his next world.
Mm, yeah. That's fast. I'm pretty sure you can put more details on the first scene, or just completely omit it and start at the second scene.
For character, I gave 4 stars. Arnold is pretty human, and most importantly, knows Skyrim memes. That's always a plus! On a more serious note, Arnold is pretty plain, but that's a good thing for me. He's not a special snowflake, which makes him much more relatable than the fedora-wearing, trench-coat covered, katana-wielding black haired swordsmen... Ahem.
That's all for my review. This empress gives you her blessing, Fireblade. Good luck and have fun writing... and rewriting!