Being Undead

Self-Published

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Description

The first battle of a young soldier's life plays out to be a costly defeat. As corpses lay scattered, feasted upon by the undead, the soldier awaits for his end, but one doesn't come to him.

Due to the powers of the one they had initially set out to stop, the soldier returns to life with his faculties intact as a being on the border between life and death.

Without any ties to the mortal realm, as far as he's concerned, his death only signals the start of his journey.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Saj

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 172
Views: 67,829

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Community Reviews(3)

hungrypunkrRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Okay, first off my personal opinions before I move on to the actual review bits.
I like our little MC, in life he was a reasonable guy from a wealthy family that dreamed of being a Necromancer, but those dreams were dashed by mommy and daddy saying that not only is raising the dead not in their future plans for his life but "Society" frowns upon reanimating the girl next door for that...do over.
So like any reasonable chap in a medieval story, he walks the path of the noble soldier looking for that cushy job in the rear, good pay low hassle sounds good to me. But no the parents want him to go to a less evil version of the Hitler's Youth, premiere military unit where heroes are born. Let's just say it goes to shite and the story goes from there. So there's my quick synopsis, and I was pretty much hooked at I wanted to be a Necro.
The Most Important factor over a story, likable characters, and all that other chaff. GRAMMAR, can we read the damn thing without wanting to reach through the monitor and beat the author over the head with the most recent publication of Webster's Dictionary:
For the most part, it has been on point, there are some tense issues like using "Slayed" instead of perhaps "Slain" or "Slew".
A few minced commas, but mostly just incorrect tenses of verbs, and such.
On to the story, I enjoy "Rebirth" stories, in fact, I troll RRL for them to binge through so I may be a little bias. However, I haven't come across a story that follows, WARNING SPOILERS.
(I can't get the Spoiler tab to work...oops) Spoiler-ish: A lazy soldier turned Zed that then goes on to steal a kiss from death, who is like a vague SUPER hotty getting off track, to destroy The Ancient Undead Kings and Find Out why the Imperial Emperor is Immortal Despite not showing a soul.
this type of MC before.
Characters:
Characters feel very fluid although admittedly all we've gotten so far, as of Ch 16., is a Lucid Zombie and a prepubescent girl with a death wish.
Conclusion:
All in all its a go
T_JRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
You fell into the trap that most authors do on this site, the charecter is a nice guy/ hero and therefore you failed to differntiate your story from the thousands of similar ones already on the site.
Although at the beginning, I was quite looking forward to the main charecter (named Zombie for some reason) rising through the ranks of his undead army and eventually sweeping across the empire with his own army, royal road has struck again.
Why is it that when a author on this site has a good, non human character they see the need to insert bullshit emotions into it? It happens with dungeon stories and it happened with this, I very rarely find a story where the main charecter is not a good guy. If the author sees this, read Overlord, he has his own thoughts and emotions but they are balanced; without taking up whole sections of the storu and stifling any meaningful development.
The MC felt naive and I didn't like how death was portrayed. A further thought on that is why did you see the need to include any deities in your story at all? At least that soon? Is there something wrong with stories about people who survive without help? Real people manage pretty well without god.
The combat scenes were much too standoffish, unless that was the intention, in which case, well done.
The MC seemingly had no goal, which j was at first ok with as the necromancer did and j was willing to watch what would happen. Then he broke free and I lost interest. I felt that you could have had him use the death energy to strengthen himself or kill the necromancer but meeting death, especially when you write it's a young girl wasn't forced.
deathbricksRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Being undead is a pretty good story. It isn't some random OP undead who just kills everything by farting in it's general direction, it just fights.
The grammar is nice, This is my first read though and it's currently on chapter 14 1/2, And as of yet i don't think i've spotted a error.
The story is also pretty good, He isn't some undead who just randomly meets death and becomes powerful, It has a build up.
The MC is someone i like, Not some guy who knows it all, but not dumb as a brick. The his thoughts are natural and unforced and it doesn't feel like he is trying to force infomation out, the story just flows.
That all said and done, Yes, i do like the story and it's pretty good. If you're not sure you want to read it... Give it a read anyway because raisins.