Avalon Year 3
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Description
Avalon is now a 3d year student on t
hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry where this year an exiting event will take place. but is it all as wonderfull as it seems to be? or is there darkness around the corner
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- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2024
- Author
- Miss hearty
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 4
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- 1,567
Chapters(7 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- Akito B. TakahashiRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0Something I didn't see at first glance, but is the Avalon on the cover fully AI-generated? Not a bad thing, but it does raise an eyebrow. Anyway, on to this review.
If you didn't read my first take on the fact I don't like Harry Potter or magic for that instance, it won't stop me from giving an unbiased judgement on book three.
Always write like you're a bona fide author, whose audiences are scholars who need to feel every scene as if it were the last chapter! Apart from that, this third installment had a strong hook. Chapters are also much longer. Avalon's growing feelings for Fred add a sweet touch amidst the tension.
To tighten the story, try focusing the narrative more on Avalon's perspective. Limit time spent explaining backstory—weave it subtly into present events. Show, don't tell, to maintain the chapter's fast pace.
But what do I know? I could be a bot.