Atonement of an Immortal

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Michael Rageberg was someone blessed with great luck. In a world where the strong rule, he was born with an immortal soul. Wielding immense power since his childhood, he grew up arrogant and shallow. Arrogance led to overconfidence, and overconfidence led to stagnation. When his world was invaded by devils, he was not able to achieve much besides protecting himself. In the end, he found himself outnumbered and captured. The devils ripped out his soul from his body, in an attempt to refine him as an immortal puppet. Over aeons, he was tortured by the devils. When the endless pain and solitude was about to break his will, he found a ray of hope. An ancient being offered to send him back in time in exchange for his immortality.

To atone for the sin of weakness, he now wants to change the fate of his world! But having lost his immortality and power, his path is filled with danger and hardship. Follow Michael on his journey as he struggles against cosmic beings to protect all he holds dear.

The cover is taken from the following link:https://wallpapercave.com/w/D1rx3AB

Ps:- This is my first attempt to writing a story on any platform. I just wanted to give this a try. I have read quite a few Chinese Novels and this story is my attempt at the genre. I welcome all criticisms.

Information

Status: Cancelled
Year: 2019
Author: day_dreamer

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Followers: 297
Views: 341,543

Chapters(155 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

tupster29Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I thought I'd spent enough time perusing RR using the advanced search options to have found every half-decent story with enough content to be worth reading. I only even gave this story a chance, even with it's awful synopsis (seriously author, might want to change that, "child of plane" being the first line is the type of grammar that stops people from reading further) because it was 1 am and I was very bored. It's now 7 am, I am on chapter 72, and while I'm going to pass out fairly soon I couldn't let myself forget to write a review and give my thanks to the author. Thanks author! Now on to the review:
Style: This is the author's first time writing a story, and it kinda shows, but not in a bad way. The style of narration, story pace, and story timeline can change pretty drastically between chapters, but there's almost always a reason for it. One chapter may start ahead of where the last story ended time-wise, and instead of an info-dump or flashback the story just jumps back to those events, and knowing how they will play into the story makes it a more interesting read. Also, there are infrequent side character POVs that at first seem to be just for character-building, but always come back to advance the plot in surprisingly relevant and meaningful ways.
Grammar: Not much to say, not perfect, some typos, some weirdly phrased or named things, but waaaaay better than in the synopsis. Seriously, author, please fix it.
Character: OP western-xianxia mc, but not a self-righteous face-slapper with impenetrable plot armour. The author also avoids another character pitfall common in the genre of characters being introduced once, then only mentioned in passing, or falling off the map entirely. Side characters and relationships are introduced gradually, but as the mc is characterized as single-minded in his pursuit to change the future it makes sense that making friends isn't his top priority, although that and other character developments happen naturally but slowly.
Story:
CursedDragon05Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I quite like this story. It may feel a little uninteresting or boring in the beginning but the writer has improved his writing style and is still improving.
The plot may seem fastpaced at the beginning as in MC is becoming stronger too fast but if you read on you will find that the world is a lot bigger and the pacing slows down a bit later.
The worldbuilding is very good. The writer has made an effort to make sure he does not turn chapters into infodumps so no problems here.
I see no problems in the MCs personality. Don't get turned off by his old personality he becomes a lot better after his reincarnation. The other characters aren't focused on too deep but they aren't cardboard cutouts either. They all have their own thoughts, reasons, schemes and their interactions are believable too.
Again I will suggest you don't drop the story too early as it becomes more interesting later. I like this story and am looking forward to more
LaxmichandRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Enjoyable read with lots of entertaining plots and huge improvement in authors writing style.good content having lot of different paths of cultivation one suggestion explore more in dao and conscient related cultivation
Silencer7Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I can honestly say that the author's writing has improved by leaps and bounds. The more chapters you read the more drawn into the story you are. No doubt the writer CAN get better (I honestly think they will). Kudos to Ankit and apart from some earlier prevalent typos and grammar errors, so far so good. Anticipating for more.
JacksaunRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
So to summarise this book without spoiling too much, it is a western wuxia genre (western names and tropes yet a wuxia power system) where the MC has been sent back in time to prevent a great tragedy and he is doing his best to ensure when it does come he can fight it off.
On the actual review:
First off, the MC is very OP. This might be a turn off for some, but I personally think it is understandable, as his strength makes sense (he gets the best resources and techniques) and its logical + compared to many other beings in the story he is nowhere near their level of power (yet). Even among his 'generation' there are people much stronger in him in certain areas as they have advantages he does not possess.
Second, time skips. There are quite a few time skips already, but they are very well used and keep the reader engaged (right when you are getting a little bored of some of his actions BAM 2 years later and bunch of new stuff).
Third, characters. Most of the big characters in the novel have logical personalities, and while the story focuses almost entirely on the MC (which I prefer) the POV and opinions of other characters are clearly shown and sound in their reasoning (this is a wuxia book, but there is very little of the constant jealousy BS - it's there, but the people in the background have brains in this book).
Fourth "romance + emotions". There is little focus on the emotions/romance where I am at, but when it does occur it really makes sense and its clearly explained, especially for people who are familiar with the wuxia genre, (ex: oh I am very wary of this person and I do not want to fight, but I cannot stand back in this situation as it is not my way even if i realise how stupid this is).
I will update/change this review as I read more, but for right now this is a very good book and i highly suggest giving it a read!
CatVIRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Western wuxia setting, and it has it's pros and cons.
But I was really pissed after reading through (I only read stories that are not harem) and baam comes the harem.
Tag the story as 'Harem' properly and send me a PM, I will update my review. Because other than that I think the story is average and deserves 3.5 stars.
edit: review updated as author tagged properly
KwrobesRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Fair warning, review is based on first 60 chapters or so and I have stopped reading now.
As a story, it goes as a standard Chinese reincarnation novel with the main character gaining implausible upgrade after upgrade. The author clearly tries to make this not the case, but it is a trope he falls into. Even though the MC had had instances where he almost died, I never felt a sense of fear for the character. However, as a wish fulfillment, it hits all the boxes including disproportionate responses to perceived slights by the MC. The one best part about the story is that it seems clearly plotted out and the world behaves in a cohesive manner. I never found myself questioning why something happened or getting lost in how the system here works.
Unfortunately, all the positives from the story are lost due to constant grammar and spelling errors which just soured my entire experience. These errors are pervasive and it's clear the document wasn't even run through a spell checker. Also, character names are frequently misspelled which is unfortunate for following the plot.
As for characters, the author has clearly out some effort into giving them a little bit of personality. These end up being a mixed bag of standard tropes. The characters lack idiosyncrasies to make them seem like actual humans, but they function well enough for progressing the plot. Mostly everyone seems to just be a vehicle for the MC to move from plot point to plot point or to develop further. The dialog often feels stilted since it too mostly exists to move forward the plot.
The reason I stopped reading was due to a fairly misogynistic set of dialog between the MC and his to-be wife that I'm sure the author didn't intend the way I read it. Unfortunately, just because the author probably didn't intend harm doesn't mean I'm comfortable with continuing reading. This together with the spelling mistakes really hurt my enthusiasm for the story.
Overall, it's a fairly average representation of the genre. There'
Sam WilliamsRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
The story is pretty average and doesn't there isn't much new to be found. In saying that it's pretty fun if your just looking for a solid but unremarkable wuxia novel. The characters aren't incredible but they feel alive and real, which is alot more than can be said about many novel on this site.
The real problem is the grammar and structure. Personally I find it unreadable, especially the dialogue. I don't know why the author chose to write it like they did but it completely ruined it for me. In saying that I encourage you to read a couple of chapters and if it doesn't bother you, you'll probably have a decent time.
CiainaRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
If you dont mind "heaven defying" "earth shattering" "peerless talent" and one every three sentences ending with an esclamation, then this is for you.
If you find xianxia and wuxia to be shallow, badly written masturbatory session for knuckle draggers, then steer clear.
In short it's a xianxia, with no glaring grammatical mistakes, either technical in nature or in structure.
SilvRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
The story tells it doesn't show. While I do enjoy cultivation stories I find it really concerning that the author has to mention every other paragraph that it will help him in the future. We understand that when you say it is a legendary blessing show us in the upcoming chapters how it affects him not just saying in the future this guy is a beast. Also 1d character.