Asura

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Description

Xiaowei is an orphan living with his uncle and his family. His parents died a week after he was born. At the age of eight he found out that he had a very special body. His family felt impeccable doom because of this body since only one in a billion will have this body and this just so happens to have happen in their family who are one of the elite clans of the continent. In order to remove this danger they shipped him away. To a continent far, far away. His uncle loved Xiaowei like his own child and vow to bring him back no matter what. He told Xiaowei before he departured that he will do everything within his power to bring him back.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2015
Author: jzhang1

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.7/ 5.0
Followers: 924
Views: 1,248,924

Chapters(146 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

AssmdxdRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
i don't know why but i just like it
Will you continue or stop
freako2323Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I have to retain hope that the story will be continued because I just read it all and crave so much more.
I did not give any spoilers in case anyone reads this review.
The other reviews are pretty rough on the story really and stupidly mean.
Overall I think this is a good story with a creative enough future fantasy xianxia storyline that makes it worthwhile, entertaining, and exciting to read.
Naturally there are parts that you have seen in other stories, but honestly, that will happen with whatever you read or watch these days. The normal arrogant young masters, good guy mc, super luck, unique power-up methods, special skills. They make the story exciting and give it character where we could just be given time skips and a bland character and plot.
The world building is pretty good even if it gets messed up with wording issues here and there. He doesn't force feed you information in huge chunks at the beginning or at random parts but introduces information when it is needed.
The characters are stereotypical sometimes but also unique and entertaining enough that it is fun to read about them. We learn about characters but aren't given too much about them since we don't know how long they will be around for. It is better than having the author harp on how amazing the enemy and their family is and then having the MC take him out and their family being useless (which happens in a ton of other stories).
The grammar is lacking in both spelling and sentence composition, but if English is not your first language, then you are doing very well. (My grammar is worse anyways)
kariRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
It was pretty fun read... all the way up to the end of book 1 where it got kinda boring
or maybe reading it i one sitting wasn't a good idea :p
Anyways, certain elements are taken from other novels... I don't remember if there was anything important, but a silly one is the butt-exploding (mirror) from ISSTH
Its not too much but is a little annoying.
All in all it's a good story to read. Nothing Spectacular but you could give it a read.
Skoll028Royal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Okay. About your story.
Your style is about average, nothing that really sets you apart from the crowd, in a good or bad way. Work on deciding how you want to use size references though. 1000 miles, for example, and 100 miles. Do you have any concept of how large an area those two are? Also, when you have certain things happen in the story, especially when you try to make it comedic, it is ridiculously hit and miss. More misses than hits. There is comedy, there is stupidity, and there is stupid comedy. Your comedy is mainly the latter two. If you are going to have your MC fail at things do to "shoes" make sure it stays consistent throughout the story. 1 time, okay, coincidence. Any more than that, and at least keep it throughout. If he trips from shoes doing a running start... LIKE TEN DAMN TIMES... while running 100 meters, but doesn't have any issues with said shoes on a 100 lap run.... I'm going to have to call shenanigans.
Story is realllllyyyyy hackneyed, with the little twist of the MC having a unique bloodline (Hence the 4 stars, as opposed to 3)
Grammar. Your sentences, while yes, are understandable, use terms that can be considered annoying at best, and downright derogatory at worst. There is a reason why the top stories on this site don't use words like "retarded." Might wanna look into stuff like that.
Your characters are really boring at best, crazy annoying at worst. The side characters have no real character development yet, nothing that makes us want to like them, or really hate them. And the villains you introduce? They are downright classic cartoon villains, doing stupid things for stupid reasons (or no reasons at all). Spend some time going over what motivates each character. As for the MC, I swear, I would honestly prefer a mix of Ah Dai (Good Reaper) and Yue Yang (LLS) over a character as... for lack of a better term.. stupid as him. You have him as an 8 year old kid, that acts mature one moment, but then is doing stupid shit the next. Consistenc
StyxxRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Its good but by the end of book 2 all of sudden he’s on a different world and that’s like third time the author has changed the plot out of nowhere and like made his fam dissapear
bullyboyRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I have huge expectations on this, but the author killed my enthusiasm to read it further
Spoilers alert
Timeskip appeared out of nowhere and lots of ridiculous events happen while mc was on coma, then he proceed on his daily life despite the fact that his family went missing and doesn't give a fuck about them despite the closeness they have when he was living with them.
Overall it was very good just the ridiculous timeskip that appeared out of nowhere, that made me stop from reading it.
So yeah give it a try.
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Edit–
The author removed the bad timeskip and now looks like he plans to write the events properly this time.
But still I’m done on this fiction for now, I used to look forward for the upcoming chapter of this fiction but the bad timeskip killed my enthusiasm, maybe I’ll check it out later though I doubt it because the contradicting parts that happen in the bad timeskip that full of plot holes still hunts me.
So yeah again try out guys.
gallandro83Royal Road
★★★ 2.5
Review for BOOK 1 so far
The first couple of chapters were interesting but then the author just seemed to take off while only giving readers parrt of the backstory. Readers find out why the MC is special but the author fails to give information about the people around him. In the beginning we have what seems to be LITRPG terms mixed with wuxia then those completly go away. But then we find out that the story is in a high-tech Wuxia/xanxia world.
The author constantly gives either incomplete or extroneous information thorughout the story, its inconsistant between characters themselves or extemporaneously though the story.
The story is interesting in concept but I wish the author had given a little more polish to the story because it reads very disjointedly. The plot of the story and information about the world and characters seems to be cut and pasted where-ever it would fit rather than making it integral to the story itself. I hope that as the story continues this trend will slow down and make it easier to read and a bit more enjoyable.
angryfanRoyal Road
★ 0.5
The author changes the font type and size every few chapters it makes the story really hard to read. Other than that the story isn't very consistent.
SamhainRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Ive read up to chapter 23 and I can honestly say this is retarded, everything was good up until chapter 21 and in 2 chapters I already don't want to read this shit anymore, its sad that after all that 2 chapters ruins the story and makes me not even want to get it a chance.
I'm debating weither or not to continue reading it, and if I do and it gets better I'll change my review, until then or if I don't this is my opinion on this story as of chapter 23
mintRoyal Road
★ 0.5
There is really nothing good about it. I read the story for a pretty long time hoping it would get better, but it only got worse.
The grammar is terrible. The author can't even use the right tense. Punctuation is almost nonexistant after a certain point. It's as if the story was written by a second grader. It's embarrassing.
Style is horrible as well. Nothing special at all. The story font changes every chapter as well as the font size, which is just stupid. He always picks a terrible font as well. I don't know if the author is blind, tasteless, or simply dumb.
At somepoint in the book the author starts using homophobic langauge as well, which is to be expected I guess.
The story is about yet another overpowered MC (which is actually fine) but it is poorly executed. The MC changes his personality every chapter. There is no real consistency. None of the other characters are noteworthy either.
In conclusion, this story is plain ugly.