ARMS: Company in another world

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Description

Drop Boeing into Middle-Earth. or Northrop-Grumman into Azeroth, I can assure you the impact will be a lot greater than a kid with a smartphone or an OP harem.

Build a kingdom? Why bother? They could control the entire planet with experimental fighter-jets and AK-48's.

Academy arc? Nah, lets focus on building the academies.

This is the story of Arna & Reynolds; the largest supplier of the US military, and now the newly summoned Heroes of another world.

(This is a Nanowrimo project. You are reading the unedited alpha-draft and major changes should be expected as the story expands.)

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Saustin

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Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
Followers: 96
Views: 44,830

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Community Reviews(4)

KlisikRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I enjoy the story and am on the edge of my seat for more. For anyone who enjoys the kingdom building genre and the ISOT subgenre you won't find the story lacking.
The grammar might have errors but if it did I didn't notice them. Though I will admit I can be a bit blind to this unless it's glaring.
Style wise there were no problems I could see. The story might benefit from more dialogue but that doesn't mean there were issues with show don't tell. The exposition is almost flawless and definitely good enough for five stars in my book.
As for story, I liked the hook enough to read the story and stick through it, but the first part feels both a little confusing and underwhelming to me, enough that I just skimmed it. After that though the story really picked up, with amazing worldbuilding that really sucks you in.
Characters don't feel two dimensional but at the same time they don't feel very fleshed out. Really this is only because not much time is spent on individual character's dialogue. It might just be that it's too early in the story for it but I would really like to see character arcs.
j03manRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The story structure is weird. Half of the chapters feel like an anthology of loosely connected vignettes that don't contribute much other than some tiny bits of world building and brief character introductions of people that don't matter much. The other half of the story is sometimes hand-wavy, sometimes well thought out kingdom building with enough time jumps in between each chapter that it feels like plot developments come out of nowhere.
There really isn't any character development. People just are who they are and there isn't an arc to follow for anyone yet and even if there was the time jumps and vignette stories interrupt any potential momentum
It kind of reminds me of reading JRR Tolkien's Silmarillian (on a short timescale) a bunch of stories, world building, and characters that flesh out a world and backstory that will allow a more traditional story to be told later after the author finds a through line that gives an angle on what stories to tell and what to leave out. I like some of the author's previous works and am interested in seeing how this world develops so I'm following along but I'm not reading this as a story right now.
The Grammar is good other than occasional letter swaps like calvary instead of cavalry
rakhuRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
From what I've read so far, the story is interesting, but it is held back by horrible formatting. The author seems to change perspective, time and location with doubleline, but after the change I had no idea where or who's perspective I'm reading from.
I would suggest placing a heading to identify where or when the events are taking place. Like,
Capital City, Palace
'A' walked through the long halls taking in the sights...
Grammar is pretty good though. The passages flows coherently and the only few mistakes I've seen are small typos, which can be resolved with another round of editing, but it does not impact the reading quality in any manner.
KOPSiRoyal Road
★ 1.0
Story as is has great promise and it gets 5 star but as it is it gets 1 star overall because:
Chapters and story are not connected and characters are not relateable, most of time it feels as if you are reading some report that jumps all over the place.
I understand need for random numbers bs, google THX-1138 4EB (1967) from 50+ years ago, and i dont mind it, but you should atleast put some context into chapters and maybe do some research into stories like one you are writing.
As it is, this story look like mix of 1632 series of books, destroyermen series of books and Jormungand anime about arms dealers with 0 context and randomness all over the place.
1632 series of books where full town gets teleported into middle ages
Destroyermen series of books where ship and its crew get teleported in another world
Jormungand anime about group of arms dealers.
PS: Are u sure u have the chapters corectly connected and explained in them what is going on?
You should start reading from beginning, maybe edit and explain what is going on and maybe add prologue chapter? maybe add calendar like 30.10.2040 year earth time and below it new world time?, my advice is to do some research a bit.