Arbiter of Power (Canceled and currently redone as 'Re:' version.)

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What is there in the vastness of infinity that makes even Gods tremble in fear, Immortals shudder in torment and all under creation itself shriek in terror? It is simple, loneliness.Follow the wayward and apostate half of the one true God, experience his loss and grief as his world, his undying love, is torn from him. As he falls into the desolate precipice of solitude and gets his deserved solace as another chance opens up for him. His story will continue in the world of Asthea. A world unlike his own, with so much new to see, feel and love. But can he still rejig his closed off heart? Can he still see humans in the same light as before? Only time will tell.-----------------'But then came the call, another world, another destiny. 'Maybe I can... live on?', Hirahn thought, scowled at the blue world from above and sneered at the people that left his soulmate to die. 'Let's see how long you will survive without us... without me... without HER!', atrabilious Hirahn dived straight into the light, a tear flowed from his cheek and left a blue trail behind.'-----------------(HEYHO! First fiction here! I changed the synopsis since it caused major plotholes and was overall waaaaaaaaaaay to long.)

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Doid_Haive

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.6/ 5.0
Followers: 366
Views: 98,817

Chapters(19 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

ArkhamRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Just read it...just read it now...
The fact that the MC is so OP yet the story is still so interesting is unique. The emotion and history behind the MC is fascinating and I like the fact that you are still building the characters and giving each of them exceptional depth.
TDM_MystRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
For all of you lucky guys that endured this harsh and exhausting discription, that is longer than some fictions chapters out there on RoyalRoadl, congratulations! You are about to be immersed in a grammar wise flawless story that transitions seamless from one chapter into the next, for now.
If I could I would punch all those in the face that don’t have the balls to do a review when this fiction is clearly better than at least 90% of all the other fictions on this site.
It is a shame how people criticize those newbie fictions in the top 5 and then get bashed on because they are telling the truth and the truth only!
Now, let’s take this fiction and compare it to the BULLSHIT some other authors post here. No I won’t call out any names just simply imagine the recent top 5 weekly fictions, you did? Good.
Now compare those, those… insults to the literature world with this fiction. You spot a difference? Of course you do, even all of you hardcore fans of those hardly readable fictions have to realize that this fiction is ten, twenty if not even hundred times better than the shit you are reading.
I think it is a shame -a shame I tell you!- that not more people stumbled open this gem. I am nearly at tears when I see those scarce 200 views and the author is probably working his ass up, and then there are those authors that give half a shit about their stories, don’t even bother to proofread or better their english, YES EVERYONE CAN SAY SO, BUT AT LEAST DO IT THEN!, and then post the biggest turdnuggets in history!
If royalroadl would somehow have an algorithm that sorts out the good fictions from the (read the next in jackass voice) traaash then this fiction right here would have earned its top spot. I expect greatness from the author and can only pray to all wuxia Gods, John Cena’s and whatever trend is going its rounds that this story gets the view it deserves.
Oh, right an actual review:
Style, I already said it was on point! ON-FUCKING-POINT!
Story, the way it goes now i
KillashardRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
You have a great use of words. However, I don’t think you know what some of them mean. Some of the words are used incorrectly or are not appropriate for the sentence. It feels like you write a common word, then look up the synonym in a thesaurus. It is refreshing to see different words, true, but there is a limit.
For example, you used the word smaragd. I’m going to assume some things, but I don’t think the majority of native English speakers know what that word means. And considering how many non-native English speakers there are, I’m also going to assume they have no idea what it means either. For those wondering, it means emerald, or a rich green color. And yes, I had to look it up.
Another example is how you described a cloak. It was described as “moved seemingly sentient in the stagnant air”. I understand what you mean, i.e. the cloak was moving around without wind or anything else touching it. But it would be far better to use the word consciously or to just have it be a regular sentence. Every single sentence does not need a “big” word in it. “Though there was no wind, the cloak fluttered/wrapped around the king.”
PurpleFrogManFACERoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I have not read very much of your story, however I have one quick pointer. You are using many "big" words. Kudos to you for that, however many of the words are used incorrectly. For example, when you say: "I glimpsed back, behind me was the majestic fortress Ysold." You used the word glimpsed incorrectly. You cannot glimpse on purpose, you get a glimpse of something out of the corner of your eye.
You have many of these relatively minor semantic errors. I would suggest that you tone down the alliteration and figurative language to possibly avoid these errors. Another thing you could try is to stick the story into an online semantics checker, it will very quickly point out most of your errors. This is not to say, however, that your grammar is bad. On the contrary, it is quite good. I would say that it is leaps and bounds beyond many other fictions on RRL, only behind stellar fictions such as "Don't Fear the Reaper" and "Of Monsters and Men".
Keep up the good work. I expect to thoroughly enjoy reading this. Just remember to use more complex words correctly. Also, I would not point this out, were your grammar not good enough that I thought you could benefit from this.
P.S. Once I read further into the fiction, I will update my rating.