Alucard St. Vincent

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Pens&Keys

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• Resigned DilettanteRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  So the first thing to say is that the grammar/ editing is really bad and often confusing, but I understand that's somewhat expected for a writathon story so I'll forgive it. What struck me though is how the excellent writing style still manages to shine though despite the poor editing. Which I view as being much more important for enjoying the read. In particular I think the utilization of first person is well done, which I say as someone who writes in it myself and thinks this probably does it better. So admittedly part of my score is appreciating something I've tried to do being done well, and my general preference for first person.
  The characters are also well done and enjoyable. Alucard in particular makes me want to spend time from her perspective as she seems to be enjoying her dark life, and she has an interesting combination of personality traits. The interactions with Godric are enticing and smooth. To the point that I almost wonder if some of the editing choices which occasionally make it confusing as to which is talking might intentional to show a sort of merging of thoughts without saying it. Which would be clever if it's the case.
  The setting is also interesting with its sort of 'monster high school' trope, but with students that are actually monstrous. The only magical powers that's been explained so far are Alucard's, but they seem interesting. The eye thing in particular seem to fit her personality which should provide good synergies.
  All in all I'm looking forward to more.
• ProviderRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  The story represents an intresting mix of urban fantasy, dark intrigue, and character-driven drama that masterfully immerses one into a vibrant, supernatural world where vampires, necromancers, and mysterious figures like Godric Victorian coexist amidst the mundane trappings of school life and wild club scenes. The story is rich in details, be it the pulse of music at Club Pink Matter, the serenity of moonlit skies, or the chilling danger that seems to seep from Mr. Cravemount's possession.
  The characters are amazingly dynamic and multi-dimensional. Alucard St. Vincent makes for an interesting protagonist, balancing her vampire instincts with sharp intellect and loyalty to her friends. Her relationships with Elloren and Clarissa showcase contrasting yet deeply connected dynamics; Elloren's carefree charm is well-balanced by Clarissa's sharp wit and more grounded demeanor, creating tension and depth in every interaction.
  Godric Victorian's introduction is the most captivating. Mysterious, in silk pajamas, with frosted silver eyes, he is both appealing and disquieting; perfectly pitched to carry along the tone of the story. The dialogue has layered meaning, especially during the initial classroom debate about love and intentions. It adds depth to the characters' personalities while exploring universal themes.
  The pacing is good, interweaving moments of introspection with bursts of action and suspense. The plot thickens wonderfully with the possession of Mr. Cravemount, a twist that really raises the stakes and will leave the reader wanting resolution. How the narrative balances the heavy, supernatural elements with real, relatable, almost human conflicts is a feat in itself.
  The main criticism is the spelling and grammar in the initial chapters, I'd recommend the author to go over that and do a polish pass and look for spelling mistakes, incorrect use of tenses and possessive errors.
• T.R. TellsRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  "Alucard St. Vincent" emerges as an understated gem in the urban fantasy genre, specifically within the supernatural modern vampire narrative. What makes this novel particularly compelling is Alucard's voice—it's not just engaging; it's captivating, drawing readers into the depths of the story before they even realize it. This narrative strength is one of the book's most notable attributes, setting it apart in a genre often bogged down by clichés and repetitive themes.
  The author masterfully reels readers in with a combination of unique storytelling and a building suspense that keeps you hooked on every word. As the plot unfolds, it maintains a fresh take on vampire lore, hinting at traditional tropes while presenting them in new, intriguing ways. This approach ensures that even the most seasoned fans of vampire fiction will find something novel and engaging here.
  With the proper editing and further development, "Alucard St. Vincent" has the potential to be a must-have on every fantasy lover's bookshelf. It offers a distinct narrative that refreshes the vampire story for modern readers, promising that, despite familiar elements, you won’t feel like you've read this story before. I'm eagerly anticipating diving back into the world with the next chapter—another bite is just irresistible.
• SheaveRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I have noticed that what I like to dub "genre-mixing" has become increasingly popular.  Where fantasy realism meets science fiction meets faeries and Gods and prophecies. All in one single rich tale.  Likely this is because many of us grew up with such stories and fantasized about going to our own land ruled by Gods or vampire faeries or attending some magical academy.
  This tale seems to have elements that are reasonably slice of life such as the almost dreary scenes in the club and the philosophical debates in class but the next minute our protagonist is drinking blood that tastes like perfect honey from his fridge. Blood that tastes like the nectar of the Gods.
  I do like the class discussion on the nature of caring and love. It was nicely done.  Defining such things is a lot less simple than it first appears and love as an action vs love as a feeling is often strongly contested.
  The opening starts well with a scene full of hazy, dank eroticism, and strange relationships. We met a tall, confident, sexually charged girl, a protagonist who is a vampire with a slightly disenchanted air, and a strange, frosted, silver-eyed boy.
  The lore about the children of Gods and the mother who begged for death was interesting and the concept of sharing a body is always a spooky one.
  The killed mother has been reincarnated into a shared body and though she has been rendered somewhat silent, she has plenty of room to still influence the story by regaining her strength and getting out from under her sisters. If the author so chooses which might be interesting to see.  Genre-bending can sometimes feel like whiplash as a reader tries to wrestle with so many different elements but a little refining and slowing down of the world-building can deal with that.
• nickdavisRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Alucard St. Vincent follows a teen vampire in her supernatural, elite, and expectedly dangerous high school.
  If you are looking for a setting with young adults and supernatural/horror lore elements, then this story is for you. I cannot speak to the future direction of the story and if it moves on past the high school setting and adopts a more typical grimdark grittiness, but on the spectrum of what to expect, go in ready for something like Harry Potter, but less goofy and with vampires and necromancers and everything supernatural!
  STYLE
  I had no issues with the style throughout. The prose is relatively minimal in anything too stylistic, sometimes to the story's detriment where the extra description would aid both pacing and visualization, but overall, I found the style serves the functions of the plot just fine.
  GRAMMAR
  As other reviewers have said, grammar is the biggest weak point of the story, which can be a good and bad thing. It does pull the reader out occasionally as simple errors or confusing grammatical decisions come up. If you are not bothered by such things then a good deal bulk of common criticisms may not matter much to you.
  STORY
  The story starts off quickly enough as the reader is led in with hints of depth and potential. I didn't feel immediately gripped by the first chapter in revealing any inciting incident, but that is often a big ask for RR stories to successfully accomplish. Read on for a few chapters to get your bearing before deciding to commit or not, I would say. That's where you begin to get a feel for how it is going.
  CHARACTER
  Alucard is a teenage vampire with the characteristics one might expect of a protagonist in such a story. She is pretty confident, has a powerful origin, is witty, and is a generally good person--at least to those she trusts. The other characters' attributes are also decently developed, but sometimes it feels like characterization is put to the back burner for progressing plot in conversations--a difficult issue to
• Demonic HeavenRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The story is written in First Person following the Vampire girl that shares the same name as the title of the story. Daughter of Great Dracula, Alucard St. Vincent.
  The world-building is interesting as the monsters and creatures from legends and myths exist in this world like vampires, mermaids, necromancers, witches and magicians. While those folktales exist in medieval times the story is set in XXI century.
  While the characters are students in some school their problems are far from having bad grades. Alucard friend is a Necromancer who has unusual abilities which "Fallen Gods" want to use for their benefit. They are warned that the enemies of those god-like beings will try to kill them to prevent their resurrection.
  Expect some spice to the story but it isn't much if you don't like it. As far as I read there was only a bit of it or mention nothing to graphical.
  Each character is very unique in their look as much as in their behavior. The main character is very loyal to her friends but aggressive to the people she doesn't know well often holding curses from slipping in the conversations. Alucard is intelligent and plans well but it seems like there are some characters that are using her intelligence like Godric a being that has many secrets and his intentions toward the main character are unclear for now.
  I recommend giving the story a try and don't drop it until the third chapter because that's the point were the story picks up an interesting turn.
• Felix MagnusRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This story has a compelling start, with very distinct and well rounded characters. The setting and relationships reminds me of my younger days.
  The world-building is intriguing, yet you will find many familiar faces. I would definitely recommend it for those who loves supernatural monsters. Thank you for this enjoyable read!
• AchhHansRunRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Alright! Here we go.
  I like this story concept. I enjoy the characters. Both of these are huge pluses for me. I'm a big fan of supernatural concepts and I think this story does its best to handle those well. The characters are also a boon to the story. Relatable (as much as one can be with vampires, ghosts, demons, etc.) and diverse. I think overall these are the strong points of the story, and if that's what you really care about in a story, then this will be a good read for you!
  That being said. I do struggle with the author's writing style and the grammar within the chapters. Both of these can easily be worked on and fixed over time, so I never try to be too harsh with reviews in regards to the categories, but for this story I really do feel like these categories held it back. The author, however, seems to be consistently taking and reacting to feedback in a positive manner. So that's always nice to see!
  Overall I think this is a really solid start. Its the author's first work and I think if they continue on with this hobby/passion that they'll be an amazing writer in the future!
  Keep up the good work, I look forward to seeing where the story goes from here!
• TheHofferRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This story is a first person narrative, where the narrator is all sorts of lovably unreliable. I personally love this storytelling convention when it's done right and this writer hits these peaks when they're at their highs, but unfortunately there are some lows to go along with it. Let's chat about this awesome story with a deep world that goes way beyond supernatural high school drama.
  Style 4/5: The style is an angsty and brooding lead vampire, who is chill and gets to drink blood from wine glasses if she wants. I really liked her and her friendship with Elloren as well as her more than likely love interest who wears silk pajamas. A man after my own heart.
  Story 5/5: Mysteries are abound and the reader is genuinely crazy if they don't want to know more. There are supernatural creatures, people with abilities, and even subtle mentions of gods and superpwers all rolled into one dysfunctional high school type setting. (It could be a college too, because there is drinking but does it really matter? Schools are fun)
  Grammar 3/5: Some spelling, grammar, and improper word choice mistakes consistently jar the reader out of the scene and make you double-take for the wrong reasons. You aren't sure if you missed something or it's a genuine mistake. This problem does start to clear up towards the latter half of the chapters I read, but some people might not be enticed to read that far if they have a low attention span and cant read past the typos.
  Character 4/5: The characterization can feel a little spotty at times and there are a couple instances of showing and not telling when it comes to characters. One sentence basically says "I could read the trauma playing in her eyes" or something to that effect. When it comes to trauma, subtle little hints like jumping at certain things, overreacting to something that wouldn't normally cause a reaction might make the reader more curious than if you told them too much. Also, one character did not feel like a person. The rest of the c
• SuperscribeFromTheQuasiFutureRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  The first thing that drew me into Alucard St. Vincent’s World was the gripping and atmospheric worldbuilding. The author has done an exceptional job crafting a rich, dark, supernatural realm that feels both immersive and unique. The story is fast-paced, kicking off with a strong opening and only getting better as the plot unfolds. I was consistently on the edge of my seat, unable to predict what would happen next. Every scene, every chapter, was unpredictable and utterly gripping.
  Special mention must go to the character building. Each character not only has a distinct personality but also a unique voice and appearance, demonstrating the considerable effort the author has put into fleshing them out. The characters are both enjoyable and relatable—a feat not many books achieve with such finesse.
  That said, I did notice some minor issues with grammar, phrasing, and the flow of dialogue. There were occasional sentences with missing words, and a few dialogues felt slightly stilted. However, considering this book was written for Writathon, where time pressure is intense, these imperfections are completely understandable. To expect heavy editing under such circumstances would be unfair to the author.
  Besides, I didn't really mind these issues while reading because the plot, the nuances, the supernatural details and the writing style itself were all too interesting to mind anything else.