Aiming for the top

it is 2050 and now the release of the very first virtual reality game fantasy onlineWe join Jacob Taylor on his adventure in the fantasy online and as he make new friends and enemies and gains power.------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------this is my first ever writingi cannot say what will happenand sorry for the windows back then---------------------------------------------------------------------so how was it even the first page do critisize and tell me what you want i might just add them