After The End
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Description
"Hey you all know the novels where a person or group is summoned as heroes to save a kingdom or world. Well guess what I was one of those summoned people. Now you might be thinking that I'm breaking the fourth wall and you may be right I don't know and I don't care. I talk to you~ my nonexistent audience becau~se it helps me deal with stress, loneliness, boredom as well as helping me keep my sanity in check. I'm explaining this to you because I like explaining thing but I don't trust others enough to explain my thoughts and other things to them, but a nonexistent audience I can trust since you~ can't do anything to me. Now getting back on track I'm talking to you due to me being ve~ry stressed because I was sent back to my old world and my old self."
Yo unnoticed guy in the corner here you can read this story or not I don't care. Just in case you don't understand italics means that is what he is saying is in his head.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2018
Tags
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 1
- Views
- 151
Chapters(10 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- triplos05Royal Road★★★★ 4.0Very cool setting and general idea, although you could try explaining how some of the abilities (of the monsters) work, so it feels more immersive and is more comprehensive.
Story feels rushed and stuff like absolutely nailing the military compound raid with almost no preparation is just straight up unrealistic, but I see potential here. Also don't let the characters be saved by luck every time, they have had absolutely massive plot armor till now. Maybe just make them barely win skirmishes not because of luck, but because of their skill. And dont have every enemy act like a moron, why should the entire population of the military base storm outside because of a single shot? Realistically, they would've sent out a few scouts only
Just take it a bit slower with the story progression and add more variable characters that aren't either the good or bad stereotypes. Also, try to hint Sky's abilities subtly and make her learn and find out on her own instead of just saying she suddenly knew how to use them out of instinct.
Please take this advice to heart and rethink and rewatch your ideas before actually writing. This story has great potential, I wouldn't want to see it wasted. - 1Royal Road★★ 2.0This entire prologue is just the mashed up internal thoughts of a relatively incompetent main character. It's relatively difficult to read, and leaves no room for exposition. Apparently, the main character magically knows he's in another world, and he knows what his new name is too. There is no plot or even an intriguing setup. This story has many errors, probably multiple per sentance on average. Overall, I regret reading this prologue.