Aeternae

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2021

Author

Shan_Mana

• Chapter Three: Of fish and friendhip
  Aug 20, 2021
• Chapter Two: Wrath of the demon
  Aug 9, 2021
• Chapter One : A book, a dog and a little bit of spite
  Aug 8, 2021
• Prologue
  Aug 8, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• Doggo_eats_the_worldRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Coming from a dog I especially like the dog, Mutt.
  I got a good idea of the different characters from reading and it made me want to read the next chapter to find out. They all seem to be quite dark and have secrets. (The mother especially, as the prologue was quite shocking) I'm looking forward to seeing what new faces will be introduced. Hopefully the knight returns as a villain, that would make for an interesting sub plot.
  grammar is overall pretty good, (I struggle with spelling and grammar myself but have no problems picking out errors in a story.) Just watch your speech marks are the same! I noticed that you use apostrophes for the first two chapters, and then suddenly swap to inverted commas in the last part you did.
  The story is good. A nice pace. A little slow, but I feel like it's building up to something, and I guess it's good to get all of the slow character driven arcs finished before some big action starts.
  Nice, flowery style overall, but not too much to put me off from reading. You use a lot of long and then short sentences to build a nice pace. There's a lot of show, but some parts are left to the reader's imagination, which is good to keep us guessing.
  overall, not what I normally go for, but a very good start to your novel nonetheless.
  keep going!
• Midgar FlowersRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  A great prologue. I enjoyed the pacing and the characterisation during the dialogue. Nice bit of action towards the end as well! I'm interested to find out what the woman is, and if there's a good magic system behind all of this.
  I'd recommend the author checking their work before publishing, as there were a few errors, but overall really good.