A vampire life

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2019

Author

freeblood

• 02: Status
  Mar 20, 2019
• 01: Primogenitor
  Mar 20, 2019
• Prologue
  Mar 20, 2019

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• Cody ObannonRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Good foundation so far.
  Style:  The style is fine and tends to blend well with the story.  The only gripes I have about how the story is set up is the lack of using something to signify that it is being used.  For example:
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  When the unknown god or being that summoned him to the void uses the "Soul Search" ability, there is no text of any kind to seperate it from the text around it.  The only thing that does so is the fact that it is on an empty line to itself, with no empty lines separating it either.
  This made me deduct two stars from the Style Score.  As it does happen a couple more times in the 3 chapters total.
  The grammar is fine, but could use some work.  I suggest Grammarly as it is quite easy to use and does not require you to pay.  Grammar score is 4 stars due to some mistakes.
  The story is interesting and hooked me in the title description.  That alone shows how well made it is so far and there doesn't seem to be any major plot holes that I can see / think of at the moment.  Story score is 4 stars, however, as it can still be improved.
  The characters, the 3, that we have seen so far have not shown much life to them.  This is to be expected due to the short chapters and the overall small progress that has been made so far.  The little life that has been shown though is promising.  4 stars for the Character Score.
  Overall score is calculated for me by combining the Style, Grammar, Story, and Character score then dividing by 20 which is the overall total of stars you can have.
  3+4+4+4 = 15/20
  This comes out to 75% or 3 1/2 stars for the overall score.
  Overall a great start to a promising book.
  I will edit this review as the story progresses.
  EDIT:  It appears that this story may be dropped.