A Tale Of Five Kingdoms

Self-Published

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Description

Pangia is an empire consisting of five kingdoms. A celestial warning appears saying doom is upon the realm. The empire starts decaying from within and sets off several people in pursuit to save it.

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Status
Hiatus
Year
2016
Author
iScribble

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Rating
3.0/ 5.0
Followers
1
Views
1,685

Chapters(2 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • RznRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    The prologue is a bit of a curve and unfortunately does not really tell the reader anything at all, it does not even really serve as a cold opening because it causes only questions which are not going to be relevant to framing the story for the reader in a meaningful way. It does not even establish the tone. Chapter one has a fair amount of exposition which is a bit much, but I'd like to point out that the main issue is the nature of the smithing here, such as reactive dirt and the way in which the description of all things related to the smithy are just off. I don't want to sound harsh, but if something is wrong with the focal point of a chapter to the point that I wonder if the author knows anything about what they describe - that is not good. Believability is important and I was distracted by the awkward descriptions.